Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2023/Impact bias

Initial suggestions

@De2023: Thanks for tackling this topic. Some initial suggestions:

• Note that there was a previous attempt, so check out that chapter and the feedback on its talk page.
• Check out other related chapters and see how you can build on, link to, and integrate with that work:
  • Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Bias
  • Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Happiness
• What psychological theory(ies) can help to understand? What is the main research in this area?

Let me know if I can do anything else as you go along. Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:47, 12 August 2023 (UTC)

Heading casing

Hi De2023. FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:01, 23 August 2023 (UTC)

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Title The title and sub-title are partly correct. Be consistent with the book table of contents. Headings Promising 2-level heading structure – could benefit from further development by expanding the sub-heading structure It makes logical sense to use the sub-title questions as top-level headings. Consider further development of sub-headings in those sections. Overview Promising Consider adding: an engaging practical scenario to attract reader interest a brief, evocative description of the problem Key points Excellent – key points are well developed for each section, with some relevant citations Use edit summaries - this is part of providing transparent academic integrity about what/how the page is changing (see Tutorial 02) Promising balance of theory, research, and practical examples Conclusion (the most important section): Underway - what are the take-home messages likely to be? Figure Excellent – A relevant figure is presented and it is appropriately captioned Use APA style to cite figure Learning feature One use of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Promising use of examples/case studies Consider including more examples/case studies No use of quiz question(s) or tables References OK For APA referencing style, check and correct: Use of initials rather than first names capitalisation italicisation doi formatting Resources See also Excellent External links Excellent Use sentence casing User page Very good Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution Excellent – at least three different types of contributions with direct link(s) to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:37, 18 September 2023 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is an insufficient chapter due to the lack of review of relevant research The chapter is theory-strong but research-weak The written style is excellent, but academic citation is poor Over the maximum word count. The content beyond 4,000 words has been ignored for marking purposes. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Reasonably good Engages reader interest by introducing a case study and/or scenario in a feature box However, the relevance of the case study is unclear Add image to case study to help engage reader interest Briefly explains the problem or phenomenon Clear focus questions Theory The theoretical coverage is quite comprehensive, with lots of useful, practical summary and information, but is repetitive (lacks synthesis) and lacks sufficient citation Over reliance on Wilson et al. (2003) as a citation Build more strongly on other related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters) Very good depth is provided about relevant theory(ies) Lack of sufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the tags) Some good examples to illustrate theoretical concepts Research Insufficient review of relevant research More detail about key studies would be ideal Any systematic reviews or meta-analyses in this area? Greater emphasis on effect sizes could be helpful. Lack of sufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the tags) Insufficient critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Many claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags) Integration Insufficient integration between theory and research The chapter places more emphasis on theory than on research Conclusion Very good summary and conclusion Key points are well summarised Clear take-home message(s) Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is very good Avoid one sentence paragraphs. Convey one idea per paragraph using three to five sentences. Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes Layout The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections Grammar, spelling, and proofreading are excellent Figures Provide more detailed Figure captions to help connect the figure to the text Refer to each Figure using APA style (e.g., see Figure 1) Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example: If there are three or more authors, cite the first author followed by et al., then year. For example, either: in-text, Smith et al. (2020), or in parentheses (Smith et al., 2020) Move non-peer-reviewed sources to the external links section References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation[2] Proofreading needed for consistency Include hyperlinked dois Learning features Very good use of learning features Very good use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text even more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Good use of image(s) No use of table(s) Excellent use of feature box(es) Very good use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s) Good use of case studies or examples Very good use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Very good use of external links in the "External links" section Use sentence casing Social contribution ~3 logged, useful, minor social contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:48, 31 October 2023 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a very good presentation Overview An opening slide with the title and sub-title is displayed — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation Also narrate the title and sub-title — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. An opening slide with the title is displayed. Also display and narrate the sub-title — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. This presentation has a basic introduction to engage audience interest A general context for the presentation is established A more powerful context could be established by using an example to help the viewer understand An outline of topics is used on the slides but not verbally explained Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation addresses the topic An appropriate amount of content is presented — not too much or too little The presentation makes basic to reasonably good use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes no use of relevant psychological research Ideally, make more explicit use of research Include citations to support claims The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples or case studies Conclusion A Conclusion slide is presented with a clear summary The presentation could be strengthened by expanding on the take-home message (e.g., answers to more than one focus question) Audio The audio is easy to follow The presentation makes very good use of narrated audio Audio communication is well paced Good intonation The narration is well practiced and/or performed Audio recording quality was excellent The narrated content is well matched to the target topic (see content) but lacked synthesis of the best psychological research about this topic Video Overall, visual display quality is very good/ The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read The visual communication is supplemented in a basic way by images and/or diagrams The animation is visually distracting The presentation is well produced using simple tools The visual content is well matched to the target topic (see content) but lacked synthesis of the best psychological research about this topic Meta-data The chapter sub-title but not the chapter title is used in the name of the presentation. The title would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. The video title does not match the chapter title and sub-title — this would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation and be more consistent A written description of the presentation is provided Links to and from the book chapter are provided The presentation is incorrectly categorised as being for kids. This creates limitations, such as being unable to add the presentation to a playlist. More info. Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are communicated A copyright license for the presentation is provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:43, 8 November 2023 (UTC)