Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2021/Impact bias

Heading casing

FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:19, 14 September 2021 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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Title The title is correctly worded The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted Capitalisation of the title has been corrected to be consistent with the book table of contents User page Excellent - used effectively Description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution Summarised with indirect link(s) to evidence Add direct links to evidence. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions. Headings Basic, 1-level heading structure - could benefit from further development, perhaps using a 2-level structure Consider using the sub-title questions as top-level headings. See earlier comment about Heading casing Key points Basic development of key points for some sections Overview - Consider adding: a description of what will be covered focus questions an image an example or case study Avoid overcapitalisation (APA style) - more info Consider describing and linking to the concept of the hedonic treadmill Strive for an integrated balance of theory and research Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. This is particularly important for this chapter as there are several other chapters about closely related concepts. Consider including more examples/case studies Cite each reference at least once in the main text. Conclusion (the most important section): hasn't been developed what might the take-home, practical messages be? in a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title? Figure A figure is presented Caption should only italicise Figure X but not the caption wording. Caption could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text Cite each figure at least once in the main text References Good For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation italicisation Resources See also Excellent External links Move links to academic articles into the References section and cite in the main body This section is for linking to resources that are not academic peer-reviewed articles

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:19, 14 September 2021 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an insufficient chapter. The main areas for potential improvement are: A more indepth integration of the best available psychological research about impact bias. Use full paragraphs rather than dot-points. Greater use of learning features. Well under the maximum word count. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits. Overview The Overview is promising but underdeveloped. Briefly explain what "affective forecasting" and "impact bias" are. Add focus questions in a feature box to help guide the reader and structure the chapter. Theory — Breadth Relevant theory is summarised - basic but sufficient coverage. Theory — Depth Basic depth is provided about the selected theory(ies). Some useful examples are provided to illustrate theoretical concepts. Research — Key findings Insufficient use of relevant psychological research. More detail about key studies would be ideal. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful. Research — Critical thinking Insufficient critical thinking about research is evident. Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations suggesting specific directions for future research Some claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags). Integration Insufficient integration of theory and research. Conclusion Key points are summarised. Consider reminding the reader about the importance of the problem or phenomenon of interest. Add practical, take-home message(s). Written expression — Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is basic. Template material has been removed. The chapter could be improved by developing some of the bullet-points into full paragraph format. "People" is often a better term than "individuals". Avoid overly emotive language (e.g,. incredibly) in science-based communication. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). Instead: it is, most often, not needed at all, or use section linking. Layout Sections which branch into sub-sections should include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections. Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading - use 0 or 2+ sub-headings. See earlier comments about heading casing. Grammar Use serial commas[1] - they are part of APA style and are generally recommended by grammaticists. Here's an explanatory video (1 min). APA style Figures and tables Figure captions should use this format: Figure X. Descriptive caption in sentence casing. See example. Refer to each Table and Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1). Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example: If there are three or more authors, cite the first author followed by et al., then year. For example, either: in-text, Smith et al. (2020), or in parentheses (Smith et al., 2020) References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation[2] Check and correct use of italicisation Page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Written expression — Learning features Overall, the use of learning features is insufficient. No use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. For example, consider embedding a link to the chapter about dental fear. Basic use of image(s). No use of table(s). No use of feature box(es). No use of quiz(zes). No use of case studies or examples. Social contribution ~6 logged, useful, minor/moderate/major social contributions with direct links to evidence. ~1 logged social contributions without direct links to evidence, so unable to easily verify and assess.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:03, 13 November 2021 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a good presentation. Overview An opening slide with the title and sub-title is presented and narrated - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Briefly explain why this topic is important. Focus questions are presented. Content The presentation addresses the topic. An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little. The presentation is well structured. The presentation makes very good use of relevant psychological theory. The presentation makes basic use of relevant psychological research. The presentation makes good use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice. The presentation provides practical, easy to understand information. Conclusion A Conclusion slide is presented with very good take-home message(s). Audio The audio is easy to follow. The presentation makes good use of narrated audio. Audio communication is well paced. The audio communication is hesitant in many places - could benefit from further practice. Audio recording quality was good. Video Overall, visual display quality is very good. The presentation makes good use of text and image based slides. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read. The visual communication is supplemented by images. The presentation is well produced using simple tools. Meta-data The chapter title but not the sub-title is used in the name of the presentation - the latter would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding. Links to and from the book chapter are provided. Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are communicated. A copyright license for the presentation is provided in the presentation description but not in the meta-data.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:40, 15 November 2021 (UTC)