Template:MEBF/2019
Instructions: This is a marking and feedback template for the book chapter exercise for the motivation and emotion unit. This template is designed to be transcluded on a chapter talk page.
Simple example
See also detailed example
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This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Chapter marks will be available later via UCLearn Canvas, along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements. |
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-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:11, 3 December 2019 (UTC)
Detailed example
Example use of the template which includes some commonly provided feedback comments:
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# Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem.
# Overall, this chapter does a reasonably good job of applying psychological theory and research to a real-world problem.
# Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient chapter.
# Overall, this is an insufficient chapter.
# The chapter could benefit from further development of the Overview and Conclusion - it should be possible to only read these sections and get a good sense of why the topic is important and what is known/recommended.
# Overview - consider building on the sub-title by presenting focus questions to help guide the reader and the chapter structure.
# This chapter is well under/over the [[Motivation and emotion/Assessment/Chapter#Word_count|maximum word count]].
# For additional feedback, see following comments and [ these copyedits].
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# Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained.
# Basic but sufficient coverage of theory involving the relation between the target constructs is provided.
# Overall, this chapter makes basic use of theory.
# There is too much general theoretical material. Instead, summarise and link to further information (such as other book chapters or Wikipedia articles), to allow this chapter to focus on the specific topic (i.e., the sub-title question).
# Overall, this chapter makes insufficient use of theory.
# Did you consult ? If not, this should be a secondary citation.
# The Reeve (2018) textbook is overused as a citation - instead, utilise primary, peer-reviewed sources.
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# Relevant research is well reviewed and discussed in relation to theory.
# Overall, this chapter provides a basic overview of relevant research.
# Basic but sufficient coverage of research involving the relation between the target constructs is provided.
# Overall, this chapter makes insufficient use of research.
# When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
# Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful.
# Some claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the {{fact}} tags).
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# Written expression
## Overall, the quality of written expression is excellent/very good/good/basic/below professional standard.
## The chapter benefited from a well developed Overview and Conclusion, with clear focus question(s) and take-home messages.
## The chapter would benefit from a more developed Overview and Conclusion, with clearer focus question(s) (Overview) and take-home self-help message for each focus question (Conclusion).
## Use active rather than passive voice[https://www.grammarly.com/blog/active-vs-passive-voice/].
## Internationalise: Write for an international, not just a domestic audience. [http://www.worldometers.info/world-population/australia-population/ Australians make up only 0.32% of the world human population].
## Obtaining (earlier) comments on a chapter plan and/or chapter draft could have helped to improve the chapter.
## Addressing the [[#Topic development feedback|topic development feedback]] could have helped to improve this chapter.
## Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences.
## Some sentences are unnecessarily wordy - strive for the simplest expression of the point being made.
## Some sentences are overly long; consider splitting them into shorter, separate sentences.
## Some statements could be explained more clearly - see the {{explain}} tags
## Some of the bullet-points should have been in full paragraph format.
## Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). Instead, use [[w:Help#Section linking|section linking]].
## Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences.
## Use third person perspective rather than first person (e.g., "we") or second person (e.g., "you") perspective[https://www.grammarly.com/blog/first-second-and-third-person/].
## Avoid starting sentences with a citation unless the author is particularly pertinent. Instead, it is more interesting for the the content/key point to be communicated, with the citation included along the way or, more typically, in brackets at the end of the sentence.
## Direct quotes should be embedded within sentences and paragraphs, rather than dumped holus-bolus. Even better, communicate the concept in your own words.
# Layout
## The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections.
## Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.
## Avoid having sections with only one sub-section.
## See earlier comments about [[#Heading casing|heading casing]].
# Learning features
## Excellent/Very good/Good/Basic/No use of embedded [[m:Help:Interwiki linking|interwiki links]] to Wikipedia articles. Adding [[m:Help:Interwiki linking|interwiki links]] for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive.
## Excellent/Very good/Good/Basic/No use of embedded links to related [[Motivation and emotion/Book|book chapters]]. Embedding links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
## Use in-text [[m:Help:Interwiki linking|interwiki links]], rather than external links.
## Excellent/Very good/Good/Basic/No use of images.
## Excellent/Very good/Good/Basic/No use of tables.
## Excellent/Very good/Good/Basic/No use of feature boxes.
## Excellent/Very good/Good/Basic/No use of quizzes.
## The quiz questions could be more effective as learning prompts by being embedded as single questions within each corresponding section rather than being presented as a set of questions at the end.
## Excellent/Very good/Good/Basic/No use of case studies or examples.
## Use bullet-points and numbered lists, per [[Motivation and emotion/Tutorials/Introduction|Tutorial 1]].
## For numbered lists, use Wikiversity formatting per [[Motivation and emotion/Tutorials/Introduction|Tutorial 1]].
# Grammar, spelling, and proofreading are excellent.
# Grammar
## The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the {{grammar}} tags).
## Check and make [https://www.grammarly.com/blog/comma/ correct use of commas].
## Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs individuals').[https://grammar.yourdictionary.com/punctuation/apostrophe-rules.html].
## Use [[w:Serial comma|serial comma]]s[https://www.buzzfeed.com/adamdavis/the-oxford-comma-is-extremely-important-and-everyone-should] - it is part of APA style and generally recommended by [[wikt:grammaticist|grammaticist]]s.
## Check and correct use of [https://www.google.com.au/search?q=grammar+that+vs+who that vs. who].
## Check and correct use of [https://www.google.com.au/search?q=affect+vs.+effect+grammar affect vs. effect].
## Check and correct use of [http://www.colonsemicolon.com/ semi-colons (;) and colons (:)].
## Abbreviations
### Abbreviations (such as e.g., i.e.., etc.) should only be used inside parentheses.
### Use abbreviations sparingly. Do not use abbreviations for minor terms that aren't used very much in the chapter.
### Check and correct grammatical formatting for abbreviations (such as e.g., i.e.., etc.).
# Spelling
## Spelling can be improved (e.g., see the {{spelling}} tags).
## Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour; fulfillment vs. fulfilment).
# Proofreading
## More proofreading is needed to fix typos and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard.
## Remove unnecessary capitalisation.
## Replace double spaces with single spaces.
# APA style
## Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numerals (e.g., 10).
## Direct quotes need page numbers.
## Figures and tables
### Use APA style for Figure captions. [[Motivation and emotion/Assessment/Chapter/Figures|See example]].
### Use APA style for Table captions. [[Motivation and emotion/Assessment/Chapter/Tables|See example]].
### Use APA style to refer to each Table and each Figure (e.g., do not use italics, check and correct capitalisation).
### Refer to each Table and Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1).
### Provide more detailed Figure captions to help connect the figure to the text.
## Citations use correct APA style.
## Citations are not in full APA style. For example:
### A [[w:Serial comma|serial comma]] is needed before "&" or "and" for citations involving three or more authors.
### Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets.
### Multiple citations in parentheses should be listed in alphabetical order by first author surname.
### Do not include author initials.
### When there are three or more authors, subsequent citations should use et al. e.g., Smith, Bush and Western (2001) and thereafter cite Smith et al. (2001).
### A full stop is needed after "et al" (i.e., "et al.").
### Citations in parentheses need comma between the author(s) and year.
### Check and make correct use of [http://research.moreheadstate.edu/c.php?g=107001&p=695202 citations for sources with six or more authors].
### Select up to a maximum top three citations per point (i.e., avoid citing four or more citations to support a single point).
## References use correct APA style.
## References are not in full APA style. For example:
### Check and correct use of capitalisation.
### Check and correct use of italicisation.
### Add spaces between author initials.
### See [https://apastyle.apa.org/style-grammar-guidelines/references/dois-urls new doi format].
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# ~ logged, useful, social contributions with direct links to evidence
# ~ logged social contributions without [[/Motivation and emotion/Assessment/Chapter#Making and summarising social contributions|direct links to evidence]]
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Chapter review and feedback
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This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Chapter marks will be available later via UCLearn Canvas, along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements. |
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-- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:48, 26 November 2019 (UTC)