Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2024/Vitamin D and emotion regulation

General comments

Hi Chris,

Really like your topic and how you have set up the page so far. Your key questions seem relevant to your topic but make sure you are incorporating psychological theory as part of answering them i.e. what is it psychologically we need to be well/ motivated/ happy theoretically and how does getting vitamin D support that?

You'll have a fair bit of research to do to answer the questions in that way but it's important to reference it.

all the best, Ari --Ubaldo111 (discuss • contribs) 01:39, 30 August 2024 (UTC)

Suggestions

I wonder if including information on how to diagnose/know if you are vitamin D deficient might be helpful? Persimmon24 (discuss • contribs) 06:57, 17 August 2024 (UTC)

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1. Title The title and sub-title are correctly worded and formatted 2. Headings Basic, 2-level heading structure – could benefit from further development (expand) Reasonably good alignment between focus questions and heading structure, but consider closer alignment Aim for 3 to 6 top-level headings between the Overview and Conclusion, with up to a similar number of sub-headings for large sections Avoid having sections with only 1 sub-heading – use 0 or 2+ sub-headings Definitional headings aren't usually needed (e.g., about vitamin D in general and ER in general). Focus on the question in the sub-title. 3. Overview Add a scenario or case study in a feature box (with an image) at the start of this section to help catch reader interest Add a brief, evocative description of the problem/topic Vitamin D doesn't have a purpose per se, but it is useful to human beings What is emotional regulation? is not a core question for this topic - there are other chapters that cover this Reasonably good alignment between focus questions and heading structure, but consider closer alignment 4. Key points Partial development of key points for some sections, with some relevant citations For sections which include sub-sections, include the key points for an overview paragraph prior to branching into the sub-headings Avoid providing too much background information. Aim to briefly summarise general concepts and provide internal links to relevant book chapters and/or Wikipedia pages for further information. Then focus most of the content on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title. No development Strive for an integrated balance of the best psychological theory and research about this topic, with practical examples It is unclear whether the best available psychological theory and research has been consulted in the preparation of this plan Conclusion (the most important section): Under developed What might the take-home, practical messages be? (What are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions?) 5. Figure Excellent - One or more relevant figure(s) is/are presented, captioned, and cited The figure caption(s) provide(s) a clear, appropriately detailed description that is meaningfully connected with the main text Figure(s) are cited at least once in the main text 6. Learning feature Excellent use of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Promising use of one or more scenarios/examples/case studies Promising use of quiz question(s) Focus the quiz question(s) on the take-home messages for each focus question Also consider using one or more tables to summarise key information 7. References OK Wikistyle references are fine, but they need to be formatted consistently (suggest use APA style principles as much as possible) Don't cite references behind university logins Are there any systematic reviews about this topic? Move non-academic / non-peer reviewed sources to External links Remember that the goal is to identify and use the best academic theory and research about this topic 8. Resources See also Not developed – needs work (see Tutorial 2) External links Not developed – needs work (see Tutorial 2) 9. User page Excellent – used effectively Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. A link to the book chapter is provided 10. Social contribution The three types of required contributions to be demonstrated with direct link(s) to evidence were making: direct improvements to other chapters (past or current) comments on the talk pages of other chapters (past or current) posts about the unit or project on other platforms such as the UCLearn discussion forum or on X using the #emot24 To add direct links to evidence: view the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and paste the comparison URL on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions. Well done on creating and uploading your own image Use a numbered list (see Tutorial 02)

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:30, 26 August 2024 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a very good presentation Overview The opening clearly conveys the purpose of the presentation Engaging introduction to hook audience interest A context for the presentation is established through an example Focus questions and/or an outline of topics are presented Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation addresses the topic An appropriate amount of content is presented — not too much or too little The presentation makes very good use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes reasonably good use of relevant psychological research The presentation makes very good use of citations to support claims The presentation makes very good use of examples The presentation provides useful practical advice The presentation provides easy to understand information Conclusion The conclusion provides a very good summary of the most relevant psychological theory and research about this topic The conclusion provides reasonably good take-home message(s) Audio The audio is easy to follow The presentation makes very good use of narrated audio Audio communication is well-paced Reasonably good intonation The narration is well practiced and/or performed Audio recording quality was reasonably good The narrated content is well matched to the target topic Video Overall, visual display quality is good/ The presentation makes good use of text and image based slides The font size is mostly sufficiently large to make it easy to read Using a sans-serif typeface would make the text easier to read Use APA style for citations (e.g., no initials, use et al. for three or more authors) The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time The visual communication is supplemented in a reasonably good way by relevant images and/or diagrams The presentation is well produced using simple tools The visual content is well matched to the target topic Meta-data The chapter sub-title but not the chapter title is used in the name of the presentation. This would help to convey the purpose of the presentation and be consistent. A very brief written description of the presentation is provided. Expand. An inactive hyperlink to the book chapter is provided (maybe because the YouTube user account doesn't have advanced features) A link from the book chapter is provided Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are communicated Provide clickable links to the image sources and license details (e.g., in the description) A copyright license for the presentation is clearly indicated

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:14, 11 November 2024 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a good chapter. It makes very good use of psychological theory and basic use of research to address a real-world phenomenon or problem. The main area for potential improvement is to provide less background information and to concentrate more of the chapter on directly addressing the sub-title question Insufficient use of primary, peer-reviewed sources as citations (e.g., see the tags) in many places Under the maximum word count, so there is room to expand For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Very good Engages reader via a case study or scenario in a feature box with a relevant image Explains the psychological problem or phenomenon reasonably well The focus questions are reasonably good The focus questions could be improved by being more specific to the topic (i.e., the sub-title) Theory A very good range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained Builds effectively on other chapters and/or Wikipedia articles Basic depth is provided about relevant theory(ies) Basic use of tables, figures, and/or lists to help clearly convey key theoretical information Insufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the tags) in many places Reasonably good use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts Research Basic review of relevant research More detail about key studies would be ideal Any systematic reviews or meta-analyses in this area? Insufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the tags) in many places Basic critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Many claims lack sufficient citation (e.g., see the tags) Integration Basic integration between theory and research Insufficient integration with chapters Conclusion Basic summary and conclusion Address the focus questions Add practical, take-home message(s) Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is very good Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes "People" is often a better term than "individuals" APA style Use serial commas[2]. Video (1 min) Figures Reasonably well captioned Use this format for captions: Figure X. Descriptive caption goes here in sentence casing. See example. Each Figure is referred to at least once within the main text. Refer to each Figure using APA style (e.g., "(see Figure 1)"; do not use bold, italics, check and correct capitalisation). Increase some image sizes to make them easier to read Citations use excellent wiki style References use inconsistent style: Move links to Wikiversity into the see also section Learning features Good use of learning features Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Basic use of figure(s) Promising use of table(s) but lacks relevance (not about VD and ER) Reasonably good use of feature box(es) Reasonably good use of scenarios, case studies, or examples Reasonably good use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s) The quiz questions could be improved by being more focused on the key points and/or take-home messages The quiz questions could be more effective as learning prompts by being embedded as single questions within each corresponding section rather than as a set of questions at the end Good use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Use internal linking style per Tutorial 02 Use sentence casing Use alphabetical order One use of external links in the "External links" section Use bullet points per Tutorial 02 Use sentence casing Add more links Social contribution ~2 logged, useful contributions with direct links to evidence ~2 logged contributions without direct links to evidence, so unable to easily verify and assess. See tutorials for guidance about how to get direct links to evidence.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:45, 24 November 2024 (UTC)