Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2024/Solitary confinement

Initial suggestions

@Ubaldo111: Thanks for tackling this topic. Some initial suggestions:

• Check out other related chapters and see how you can build on, link to, and integrate with that work:
  • Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Forensic
  • Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Self
• Also search past book chapters for related topics
• For the topic development, consider:
  • What psychological theory(ies) can help to understand and explain this topic?
  • What is the main research in this area?Let me know if I can do anything else to support the development of this chapter.

Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:35, 6 August 2024 (UTC)

Heading casing

Hi Ubaldo111. FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:36, 6 August 2024 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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1. Title The title is correctly worded and formatted 2. Headings Excellent – Well developed 2-level heading structure. Meaningful headings clearly relate directly to the core topic. Good alignment between focus questions and heading structure 3. Overview Excellent - Scenario, image, evocative description of the problem/topic, relevant psychological theory/research, and focus questions A scenario or case study is presented in a feature box at the start of this section A brief, evocative description of the problem/topic is provided Focus questions are aligned with sub-title and top-level headings I've simplified/reworded the focus questions I've adjusted from future to present tense 4. Key points Promising development of key points for each section, with relevant citations Avoid overly emotive language Use bullet points (per Tutorial 2) Use APA style 7th edition for citation formatting There seems to be reasonably good coverage of theory, however, strive to balance the content with critical review of relevant research, with illustrative examples Conclusion (the most important section): Underway What might the take-home, practical messages be? (What are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions?) 5. Figure A relevant figure is presented and captioned Cite each figure at least once in the main text 6. Learning feature Promising use of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Also link key concepts, not just case study biography pages. Promising use of example(s)/case study(ies) Connect the scenario(s) with motivation and emotion to help illustrate psychological science about this topic Be wary of overdoing case studies - they are useful if they are used to clearly illustrate key points in the text Consider including quiz question(s), table(s) etc. 7. References Very good Are there any systematic reviews about this topic? For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation italicisation doi formatting 8. Resources See also Very good Rename links so that they are more user friendly (see Tutorial 02) External links Excellent 9. User page Excellent – used effectively Very good Good Created – minimal, but sufficient Not created – see Tutorial 02 Brief description about self provided – consider expanding Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter 10. Social contribution Excellent – at least three different types of contributions with direct link(s) to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:36, 17 August 2024 (UTC)

Feedback

Hi!

I have just read through your chapter and I am very impressed! Your depth of research is evident throughout your information and the structure of your paragraphs are clear and fluent!

A few minor pieces of feedback relating to the style and referencing of your chapter:

1. In the sections 'Impacts of solitary confinement' and 'Psychological processes involved in solitary confinement' there is alot of dense information. Perhaps a relevant figure would help the visuals of the chapter to make it easier to read.
2. Consider changing the colour of the feature box of your focus questions so that your case studies have a dedicated colour to help with fluency throughout the chapter.
3. Finally, I can see a few places where in-text references may be necessary. Particularly your section on Maslow's heirachy of needs there are no in-text references which may cause some questions about the factualness of your information.

I have also updated one of your in-text references where you had only included the last name of the author and not the year.

Good luck witht the assignment! I am excited to read the final product of this chapter, it is a very interesting topic!

~~~U3228753 U3228753 (discuss • contribs) 09:39, 2 October 2024 (UTC)

Feedback

Hey Ubaldo111 ,

First, I just want to say that I'm very impressed. The way you connects psychological theories, like Maslow's hierarchy of needs and the Self-Determination Theory, to the conditions of solitary confinement is really interesting and helps in understanding why solitary confinement can be so detrimental to a person's wellbeing. I also thought the way you divide your sections up was really good as I like the way you've used quizzes, case studies and images to help your arguments.

This is of course nit-picking because I am really impressed but it might be interesting to delve more into the standpoint of why solitary confinement has its supporters. I really liked the point you made about Buddhist monks so maybe adding some more on that area could help and could create more depth to the argument. I am sure you are close to the world limit though so I understand if you can't fit this in.

Regardless, I loved reading your page and good luck with the final edits. U3236669 (discuss • contribs) 23:29, 3 October 2024 (UTC)

Book chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent chapter. It successfully uses psychological theory and research to address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Well developed Engages reader via a case study or scenario in a feature box with a relevant image Clearly explains the problem or phenomenon Clear focus questions Theory An excellent range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained Builds effectively on related chapters and Wikipedia articles Insightful depth is provided about relevant theory(ies) Basic use of tables, figures, and/or lists are to help convey key theoretical information Key citations are reasonably well used; in some places, claims could be better cited Excellent use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts Are MHUs and POIs the same/similar? (unclear) Research Excellent review of relevant research Very good critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments Integration Excellent integration between theory and research Conclusion Excellent summary and conclusion I made some minor rewrites to improve clarity Key points are very well summarised Consider Clear take-home message(s) Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is very good; the simple, direct style is excellent. In some places, more citations to support claims would strengthen the work. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). Instead: it is, most often, not needed at all, or use section linking Layout The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections Grammar, spelling, and proofreading are generally excellent Use serial commas[1]. Video (1 min) Figures Figures are very well captioned Citations use excellent APA style (7th ed.). For example: References use very good APA style: Page numbers should not be italicised Learning features Excellent use of learning features Case study: Assange - would be good to know more about the psychological processes and/or impacts (and maybe less biographical detail) Case study: Mandela - would be good to know more about the psychological processes and/or impacts (and maybe less biographical detail) Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles Excellent use of image(s) Excellent use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s) Excellent use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Excellent use of external links in the "External links" section Social contribution ~15 logged, useful, moderate to major social contributions with semi-direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:23, 12 October 2024 (UTC)

Multimedia presentation feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a very good to excellent presentation Overview An opening slide with the title and sub-title is displayed and narrated — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation Engaging introduction to hook audience interest A context for the presentation is established through an example Focus questions and/or an outline of topics are presented (inset bullet points) Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation addresses the topic No mention of potential benefits An appropriate amount of content is presented — not too much or too little The presentation makes excellent use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes very good use of relevant psychological research The presentation makes excellent use of citations to support claims The presentation makes very good use of one or more examples The presentation provides easy to understand information Conclusion The conclusion provides an excellent summary and take-home message(s) Audio The audio is easy to follow and interesting to listen to The presentation makes effective use of narrated audio Audio communication is well paced Excellent intonation enhances listener interest and engagement The narration is well practiced and/or performed Audio recording quality was reasonably good Review microphone set-up to achieve higher recording quality (audio level was low; volume varied between pauses, with some static spikes). Possibly an on-board microphone was used. If so, consider using an external microphone. The narrated content is well matched to the target topic Video Overall, visual display quality is very good The presentation makes good use of text and image based slides Some of the font size could be larger to make it easier to read Use the software bullet points so that text is better aligned The amount of text presented per slide makes it reasonably easy to read and listen at the same time The visual communication is supplemented in a reasonably good way by relevant images and/or diagrams The presentation is well produced using simple tools Meta-data The chapter title is used, but the sub-title (or a shortened version of it) is not used, as the name of the presentation. The sub-title (or an abbreviation of the sub-title that fits within the 100 character limit) would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Expand. An inactive hyperlink to the book chapter is provided A link from the book chapter is provided Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are communicated on the slides Ideally, provide clickable links to the original image sources (e.g., in the description) A copyright license for the presentation is clearly indicated

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:24, 6 November 2024 (UTC)