Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2024/Better-than-average-effect

Topic Suggestion - Something to cover?

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Hi there,

In one of my other courses at the moment we were talking about self-serving biases (the tendency to see oneself favourably - or above average). We talked about how it is a function of how we process and remember info about ourselves - we are motivated to enhance our own self-image. This can be either adaptive (protects us from depression) or maladaptive (blame others for failure rather than accept responsibility). Let me know if you have any more questions - the classic example that people tend to use is the 'rate yourself as a driver' study. Hope this helps! U3239962 (discusscontribs) 11:38, 15 August 2024 (UTC) U3239962 (discusscontribs) 09:45, 15 August 2024 (UTC)Reply

Heading casing

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Hi RussellP1. FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example:

Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory

Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:25, 29 October 2024 (UTC)Reply


Topic development feedback

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The topic development submission has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is below, plus see the general feedback page. Please also check the page history for changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Marks are available via UCLearn. Marks are based on the latest version before the due date.

 
  1. The title and sub-title are correctly worded and formatted
  1. See earlier comment about Heading casing
  2. Promising 2-level heading structure – could benefit from further development and/or refinement
  3. Remove links from headings
  4. Develop closer alignment between sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings
  5. Avoid having sections with only 1 sub-heading – use 0 or 2+ sub-headings
  1. Excellent – Scenario, image, evocative description of the problem/topic, and focus questions
  2. Move the scenario to the start of this section to help catch reader interest
  3. A brief, evocative description of the problem/topic is provided
  4. Closer alignment between the sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings is recommended
  1. Promising development of key points
  2. Basic use of citations
  3. Strive for an integrated balance of the best psychological theory and research about this topic, with practical examples
  1. Avoid overcapitalisation (APA style) – more info
  2. Consider using the Studiosity service and/or a service like Grammarly to help improve the quality of written expression such as checking grammatical and spelling errors
  3. Conclusion (the most important section) hasn't been developed
  4. What might the take-home, practical messages be? (What are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions?)
  1. One or more relevant figure(s) presented and captioned
  2. The figure caption(s) provide(s) a clear, appropriately detailed description that is meaningfully connected with the main text
  3. Cite each figure at least once in the main text using APA style (e.g., see Figure 1)
  1. One use of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters
  2. Move the link into main text instead of in heading
  3. Basic use of scenario/example/case study
  4. Promising use of quiz question(s)
  5. Also consider using one or more tables to summarise key information
  1. Good
  2. Are there any systematic reviews about this topic?
  3. Check and correct APA referencing style:
    1. provide all authors up to 20
    2. capitalisation
    3. make doi hyperlinks active (i.e., clickable)
  1. See also
    1. One of two link types provided
      1. Also link to related book chapters
    2. Use sentence casing
  2. External links
    1. Not developed (see Tutorial 2)
  1. Excellent – used effectively
  2. Excellent description about self provided
  3. Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.
  4. A link to the book chapter is provided
  1. None summarised on user page with direct link(s) to evidence (see Tutorial 03). Looking ahead to the book chapter submission, see social contributions.
  2. To add direct links to evidence of Wikiversity edits or comments: view the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and paste the comparison URL on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions.
  3. Use a numbered list

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:08, 2 September 2024 (UTC)Reply

General feedback

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Hey!

Your page on Better-than-average effect (BTAE) is engaging. Here are a few suggestions to enhance your chapter:

Deepen the Explanation of Psychological Factors: You have touched on Self-Enhancement Theory and Social Comparison Theory. However, diving deeper into the neurobiological mechanisms behind these theories could add more depth. For instance, how do dopamine levels influence self-esteem and motivation in the context of BTAE?

Expand on Consequences: While you have mentioned overconfidence and resistance to feedback, it would be beneficial to provide more real-life examples or case studies that illustrate these consequences. This can make the content more relatable and impactful. U3219927 (discusscontribs) 11:18, 6 October 2024 (UTC)Reply

Book chapter review and feedback

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This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Chapter marks will be available via UCLearn along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.

 

Overall

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  1. Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient chapter
  2. Basic use of academic, peer-reviewed citations to support claims
  3. Better use could be made of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the [factual?] tags)
  4. Under the maximum word count, so there is room to expand
  5. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits
  1. Reasonably good
  2. Engages reader via a case study or scenario in a feature box with a relevant image
  3. The scenario is overly complex because it involves a social/group perception of being better than another group, whereas the better-than-average effect is more about e.g., an individual driver perceiving themself as better than average
  4. Explains the psychological problem or phenomenon reasonably well
  5. The focus questions are clear
  1. A promising range of ideas are presented but there is a lack of depth and integration with research
  2. Builds effectively on chapters and Wikipedia articles
  3. Builds reasonably well on chapters and/or Wikipedia articles

other chapters)

  1. Basic depth is provided about relevant theory(ies)
  2. Use tables, figures, and/or lists to help convey key theoretical information
  3. In some places, there is insufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the [factual?] tags)
  4. Insufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the [factual?] tags)
  5. If you didn't consult an original source (e.g., Festinger, 1954), cite it as a secondary source
  1. Insufficient review of relevant research
  2. More detail about key studies would be ideal
  3. More indepth use of the Zell meta-analysis is recommended
  4. Insufficient critical thinking about relevant research is evident
  5. Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by:
    1. describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies
    2. considering the strength of relationships
    3. acknowledging limitations
    4. pointing out critiques/counterarguments
    5. suggesting specific directions for future research
  6. Some claims lack sufficient citation (e.g., see the [factual?] tags)
  1. Insufficient integration between theory and research
  2. Insufficient integration with chapters
  1. Basic summary and conclusion
  2. Add practical, take-home message(s)
  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the quality of written expression is basic
    2. Avoid starting sentences with a citation unless the author is particularly pertinent. Instead, it is more interesting for the the content/key point to be communicated, with the citation included along the way or, more typically, in parentheses at the end of the sentence.
    3. Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes
  2. Layout
    1. See earlier comments about heading casing
    2. Move links from headings into their first mention in text
  3. Grammar
    1. Check and correct use of possessive apostrophes (e.g., cats vs cat's vs cats')[2]
    2. Abbreviations
      1. Once an abbreviation has been established (e.g., PTSD), use it consistently aftwarwards
  4. Proofreading
    1. Remove unnecessary capitalisation
  5. APA style
    1. Use sentence casing for the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc.
    2. Use serial commas[3]. Video (1 min)
    3. Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used ... as slang, or as an invented or coined expression" (APA Style 7th ed., 2020, p. 159)
    4. Figures
      1. Reasonably well captioned
      2. Refer to each Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1)
    5. References use basic APA style:
      1. Check and correct use of italicisation
      2. Include hyperlinked dois
  1. Reasonably good use of learning features
  2. Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles
  3. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
  4. Basic use of figure(s)
  5. No use of table(s)
  6. Very good use of feature box(es)
  7. Basic use of scenarios, case studies, or examples
  8. Reasonably good use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s)
  9. Basic use of interwiki links in the "See also" section
    1. Also include links to related book chapters
    2. Use alphabetical order
  10. Basic use of external links in the "External links" section
    1. Use sentence casing
    2. Use alphabetical order
  1. ~3 logged social contributions without direct links to evidence, so unable to easily verify and assess. See tutorials for guidance about how to get direct links to evidence.
  2. Use a numbered list per Tutorial 02

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:25, 29 October 2024 (UTC)Reply

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