Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2023/Mental health literacy

Topic development feedback

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Title The title is correctly worded The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted The capitalisation of the title is incorrect. Be consistent with the book table of contents. Headings Under-developed, 1-level heading structure – develop further, perhaps using a 2-level structure for the larger section(s) Use more descriptive/detailed headings Incorporate the definition in the Overview or a subsequent section and remove it as a heading (too pedestrian) Overview Excellent - Includes scenario, image, evocative description of the problem/topic with links to relevant psychological theory/research, and focus questions Perhaps some of the detail could be moved into subsequent sections Key points Content is well focused on the target topic (important) Promising development of key points for each section, with relevant citations Strive for an integrated balance of theory and research Conclusion (the most important section): Hasn't been developed What might the take-home, practical messages be? (What are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions?) Figure Excellent - A relevant figure is presented, captioned, and cited Consider developing closer connection between text and image Figure(s) are cited at least once in the main text Learning feature Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Promising use of example(s)/case study(ies) Consider including more examples/case studies, quiz question(s), table(s) etc. References Good For APA referencing style, check and correct: include all authors (up to 20) alphabetical order include full journal title doi formatting Resources See also Very good Use bullet-points (see Tutorial 02) Use sentence casing Include source in brackets after link External links Good Use sentence casing Target an international audience; Australians only represent 0.33% of the world population Not developed User page Created – minimal, but sufficient Brief description about self provided – consider expanding Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Add link to book chapter Social contribution None summarised with direct link(s) to evidence – this was covered in Tutorial 03. Looking ahead to the book chapter submission, see how to earn marks for social contributions.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:21, 22 September 2023 (UTC)

Book chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a reasonably good chapter. It makes very good use of psychological theory and research to address a real-world phenomenon or problem. Some aspects of the style and learning features could be improved. No social contributions . Reasonably good use of academic, peer-reviewed citations to support claims Use of academic, peer-reviewed citations is lacking in some places (e.g., see the tags) Well under the maximum word count, so there is room to expand For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Reasonably good Engages reader interest via a case study or scenario in a feature box; also include a relevant image Explains the problem or phenomenon Add a brief definition of MHL Provide focus questions in a feature box to help guide the reader and structure the chapter Theory A very good range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained Build more strongly on related chapters and/or Wikipedia articles (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters) Very good depth is provided about relevant theory(ies) Use tables, figures, and/or lists are to help convey key theoretical information Key citations are well used in many places In some places, the use of academic, peer-reviewed citations is lacking (e.g., see the tags) Consider using more examples to illustrate theoretical concepts (e.g., how about following-up the initial case study with a positive change in MHL?) Research Very good review of relevant research More detail about key studies would be ideal Insufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations in some places (e.g., see the tags) Good critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Integration Very good integration between theory and research Conclusion Good summary and conclusion Remind the reader about the importance of the problem or phenomenon of interest Key points are summarised Address the focus questions Add practical, take-home message(s) Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is good to very good Some paragraphs are overly long. Communicate one key idea per paragraph in three to five sentences. Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). Instead: it is, most often, not needed at all, or use section linking Layout The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections Grammar The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags) Consider using a grammar checking tool Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance Check and make correct use of commas Check and correct use of possessive apostrophes (e.g., cats vs cat's vs cats')[2] Abbreviations Spell out abbreviations (e.g., MHL) on their first use, to explain them to the reader Once an abbreviation has been established (e.g., PTSD), use it consistently aftwarwards Spelling Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour) APA style Use serial commas[3]. Video (1 min) Direct quotes need page numbers – even better, write in your own words Figures Figures are very well captioned There are two Figure 2s Refer to each Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1) Citations use basic APA style (7th ed.). For example: A full stop is needed after "et al" (i.e., "et al.") because it is an abbreviation of et alii Do not include author first name or initials Use ampersand (&) inside parentheses and "and" outside parentheses References use poor APA style: Remove "doi:" Use alphabetical order Use full journal titles Check and correct use of capitalisation[4] Separate page numbers using an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Include hyperlinked dois Learning features Reasonably good use of learning features No use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Reasonably good use of image(s) No use of table(s) Good use of feature box(es) Basic use of case studies or examples Very good use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s) Basic use of interwiki links in the "See also" section' Use sentence casing Very good use of external links in the "External links" section Use sentence casing Use alphabetical order Social contribution No logged social contributions

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:56, 18 November 2023 (UTC)

Multimedia presentation feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's UCLearn site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

Overall Overall, this is a basic presentation The presentation is under the maximum time limit (3 mins), so there was room for further development Overview An opening slide with the title and sub-title is displayed and narrated — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation Very engaging introduction to hook audience interest A context for the presentation is clearly established through an example Focus questions and/or an outline of topics are presented Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation somewhat addresses the topic The presentation provides a basic overview and example of MHL but lacks sufficient explanation of the most relevant psychological theory and research The presentation makes basic use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes insufficient use of relevant psychological research The presentation makes insufficient use of citations to support claims The presentation makes reasonably good use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice It is unclear from the example whether MHL is about understand one's own mental health or about understanding another's mental health, or both Conclusion The conclusion provides an insufficient summary of the most relevant psychological theory and research about this topic Expand about how the take-home message can be used to improve our everyday lives Audio The audio is easy to follow The presentation makes good use of narrated audio Audio communication is well paced Very good intonation The narration is well practiced and/or performed Audio recording quality was very good The narrated content is somewhat matched to the target topic but lacked synthesis of the best psychological theory and research about this topic Video Overall, visual display quality is reasonably good The presentation makes basic use of text and image based slides It wasn't clear to me why images of people with physical disabilities were used (to be inclusive - good - but it also seemed to confuse the message about MHL) The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read The visual communication is supplemented in a basic way by images Also consider using diagrams The presentation is basically produced using simple tools The visual content is reasonably well matched to the target topic but lacked synthesis of the best psychological theory and research about this topic Meta-data The chapter title is used, but the sub-title (or a shortened version of it) is not used, as the name of the presentation. The sub-title (or an abbreviation of the sub-title that fits within the 100 character limit) would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A written description of the presentation is provided Links to and from the book chapter are provided An active hyperlink to the book chapter is provided Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are communicated A copyright license for the presentation is provided in the presentation description but not in the meta-data

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:03, 21 November 2023 (UTC)