Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2022/Time management

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Hi there, it looks like you've put heaps of effort into this chapter, and there's tons of great info and resources. I had a look and it seems like you're a fair way over the word count. When I read through the chapter, I'm not entirely clear on how the section on intrinsic vs extrinsic motivation relates to time management or ties in with the other theories you discuss. Given how far over the word count you are, I'd suggest cutting that whole section. I know it's a pain to have to leave out stuff you've worked hard on, but better that your most relevant info gets assessed! Good luck, U3141987 (discusscontribs) 10:05, 14 October 2022 (UTC)Reply

Suggestion and feedback

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Hi there, what an interesting topic! As the person in charge of the perfectionism book chapter I really related to the section on time management and perfectionism and very much agree on their linking. I have formatted most of your images as per APA style (Figure #.) but just remember to link the images into your text eg. The pickle jar theory (see Figure 1).

I have also gone through and have fixed a lot of grammar and spelling errors and have noticed that a lot of your references within the text are incorrectly formatted/the text needs a reference eg the intrinsic and extrinsic motivation sections. I have also removed a lot of capitalisations as per wiki style. Additionally, I think you may be about 2000 words over the limit which is also something to consider. Remember the marker doesn't read past 4000 words so make sure all your important points are within that bracket!

Many thanks and all the best for the rest of your book chapter.

AEMOR (discusscontribs) 02:31, 16 October 2022 (UTC)Reply

Book chapter review and feedback

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Overall

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  1. Overall, this is an insufficient chapter
  2. Insufficient use of primary, peer-reviewed sources as citations
  3. Well over the maximum word count, so content beyond the section titled "Academic environment" was ignored for marking purposes
  4. This chapter "beats around the bush". There is insufficient integrative review and application of key psychological theory and research about time management
  5. This chapter has an overly complicated heading structure; simplify
  6. Submitting the topic development feedback could have helped to improve this chapter
  7. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits
  1. Basic Overview
  2. Too long. Move detailed content in subsequent sections. The purpose of the Overview is to briefly explain the topic, engage reader interest, and establish focus questions for the chapter.
  3. Engages reader interest by introducing a basic case study and/or example
  4. Basic focus question(s)
  1. Potentially relevant models of time management are described, however there is insufficient basis in psychological peer-review theory and research for promoting these models
  2. Insufficient use of psychological theory about this topic
  3. There is too much general theoretical material. Instead, summarise and link to further information (such as other book chapters or Wikipedia articles), to allow this chapter to focus on the specific topic (i.e., the sub-title question)
  4. The chapter wanders off into discussion of irrelevant theory (e.g., extrinsic and intrinsic motivation) with insufficient application to the topic (time management)
  5. The discussion of time management in several places seems to be oddly focused on an academic context rather than in broader, everyday life
  6. Build more strongly on other time-related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters in this category: Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Time)
  1. Insufficient depth is provided about the best available psychological theories for time management.

selected theory(ies)

  1. Basic use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts
  2. More examples could be useful to illustrate key concepts
  1. Insufficient use of relevant psychological research
  2. Greater emphasis on effect sizes, major reviews, and/or meta-analyses would be helpful
  1. Insufficient critical thinking about research is evident
  2. Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by:
    1. discussing the direction of relationships
    2. considering the strength of relationships
    3. acknowledging limitations
    4. pointing out critiques/counterarguments
    5. suggesting specific directions for future research
  3. Many claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the [factual?] tags)
  1. Discussion of theory and research is poorly integrated
  1. Ignored for marking purposes; over word count
  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the quality of written expression is below professional standard. UC Study Skills assistance is recommended to help improve writing skills
    2. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). Instead:
      1. it is, most often, not needed at all, or
      2. use section linking
    3. Direct quotes should be embedded within sentences and paragraphs, rather than dumped holus-bolus. Even better, communicate the concept in your own words.
  2. Layout
    1. Sections which branch into sub-sections should include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections
    2. Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading – use 0 or 2+ sub-headings
  3. Grammar
    1. The grammar for many sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags). Grammar-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance.
    2. Check and correct use of semi-colons (;) and colons (:)
    3. Abbreviations
      1. Abbreviations (such as e.g., i.e., et al., etc.) should only be used inside parentheses
  4. Spelling
    1. Spelling can be improved (e.g., see the [spelling?] tags). Spell-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages.
  5. Proofreading
    1. More proofreading is needed to fix typos and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard
    2. Remove unnecessary capitalisation
  6. APA style
    1. Direct quotes need page numbers – even better, write in your own words
    2. Figures
      1. Figures are reasonably well captioned
      2. Refer to each Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1)
    3. Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example:
      1. Use ampersand (&) inside parentheses and "and" outside parentheses
      2. If there are three or more authors, cite the first author followed by et al., then year. For example, either:
        1. in-text, Smith et al. (2020), or
        2. in parentheses (Smith et al., 2020)
      3. Do not include author initials
  7. Ignored for marking purposes; over word count
  1. Overall, the use of learning features is insufficient mainly due to being over the maximum word count
  2. Good use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example.
  3. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
  4. Good use of image(s)
  5. No use of table(s)
  6. Good use of feature box(es)
  7. Basic use of quiz(zes)
  8. Basic of case studies or examples
  9. "See also" section ignored for marking purposes; over maximum word count
  10. "External links" section ignored for marking purposes; over maximum word count
  11. Format bullet-points and numbered lists, per Tutorial 02
  1. No logged social contributions

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:28, 1 November 2022 (UTC)Reply

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Overall

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  1. Overall, this is a reasonably good presentation
  2. The presentation is over the maximum time limit — content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking and feedback purposes
  1. Display and narrate a slide with the same title and sub-title as the book chapter to help the viewer understand the purpose of the presentation
  2. This presentation has a very engaging introduction to hook audience interest  
  3. A context for the topic is clearly established through an example
  4. Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation.
  1. Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section
  2. The presentation addresses the topic
  3. The presentation is well structured (i.e., Overview, Content, Conclusion)
  4. The presentation makes excellent use of relevant psychological theory
  5. The presentation makes good use of relevant psychological research
  6. The presentation includes citations to support claims
  7. The presentation makes excellent use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice
  8. The presentation provides practical, easy to understand information
  1. The Conclusion did not fit within the time limit
  1. The audio is fun, easy to follow, and interesting to listen to
  2. Audio communication is well paced
  3. Excellent intonation enhances listener interest and engagement
  4. Audio recording quality was very good
  1. Overall, visual display quality is excellent
  2. The presentation makes effective use of animated slides
  3. The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time
  4. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images and/or diagrams
  5. The presentation is very well produced
  1. The chapter title is used, but the sub-title (or a shortened version of it) is not used, as the name of the presentation. The sub-title (or an abbreviation of the sub-title that fits within the 100 character limit) would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. A written description of the presentation is not provided. Providing an informative description can help viewers decide whether they want to watch or not.
  3. A link to the book chapter is not provided
  4. A link from the book chapter is provided
  1. Image sources and their copyright status are not provided.
    1. Probably the images are all from PowToon but this is not explicitly stated.
  2. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:25, 21 November 2022 (UTC)Reply

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