Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2022/Hijack hypothesis of drug addiction

Heading casing

FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:35, 26 September 2022 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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Title The title is correctly worded and formatted The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted User page Created – minimal, but sufficient Very brief description about self provided – consider expanding Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Add link to book chapter Social contribution None summarised with direct link(s) to evidence – looking ahead to the book chapter submission see how to earn marks for social contribution Headings See earlier comment about Heading casing Basic, mostly 1-level heading structure – would benefit from further development to more clearly address the questions in the sub-title Key points Promising development of key points for some sections, with relevant citations, however there is a lack of direct focus on the HH. Overview - Consider adding: an evocative description of the problem and what will be covered focus questions an image an example or case study Avoid providing too much background information. Briefly summarise general concepts and provide internal wiki links to relevant book chapters and/or Wikipedia pages for further information. Then focus most of the content of this on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title. Strive for an integrated balance of theory and research Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Consider including more examples/case studies Conclusion (the most important section): Hasn't been developed What might the take-home, practical messages be? In a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions? Generally well-written, but I recommend using the Studiosity service and/or a service like Grammarly to help improve the quality of written expression because there are a lot of grammar and spelling errors. Figure A figure is presented Caption should include Figure X. ... Caption could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text Cite each figure at least once in the main text References OK For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation italicisation doi formatting page numbers separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Resources See also OK Rename links so that they are more user friendly Include source in brackets after link Also link to relevant Wikipedia pages External links OK Rename links so that they are more user friendly Include source in brackets after link

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:35, 26 September 2022 (UTC)

Comments

Hi there. Here is a great resource for understanding dopamine and the reward system (mesocorticolimbic circuits) https://neuroscientificallychallenged.com/posts/know-your-brain-reward-system

Section 2 of this journal article provides a great overview of the anatomy of motivation and has the bonus of being a scientific source! https://doi.org/10.1016/j.pbb.2013.06.011

Good luck! U3162201 (discuss • contribs) 23:50, 3 October 2022 (UTC)

Multimedia presentation feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an insufficient presentation mainly because: There is insufficient focus on research The presentation is under the maximum time limit, so there was room for further development of the ideas A conclusion with take-away messages in response to the focus questions is not provided Meta-data and licensing were insufficient Overview An opening slide with the title is displayed. Also display and narrate the sub-title — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Consider creating an engaging introduction to hook audience interest Establish a context for the topic (e.g., by using an example or explaining why it is important), to help the viewer understand Focus questions are presented (note: 01 isn't a question) Content The presentation addresses the topic The presentation is well structured (i.e., Overview, Content, Conclusion) Explain key terms (e.g,. mesolimbic) and abbreviations (HPA) The presentation makes basic use of relevant psychological theory The diagram is too detailed for the presentation - summarise The presentation makes implied use of relevant psychological research; ideally make more explicit use of research Include citations to support claims The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples or case studies Avoid excessive reference to the book chapter. This presentation should provide a stand-alone summary of the best available psychological theory and research about this topic. Conclusion The presentation could be strengthened by adding a Conclusion slide with practical, take-home messages in response to each focus question Audio The presentation makes basic use of narrated audio Audio communication is well paced Good intonation The presentation lacks the polish that comes with practice Audio recording quality was OK. Review microphone set-up to achieve higher recording quality. Probably an on-board microphone was used (e.g., keyboard and/or mouse clicks were audible). Consider using an external microphone. Video Overall, visual display quality is basic The presentation makes basic use of mainly text-based slides The font size is sufficiently large to mostly make it easy to read, except for the diagram Consider using a sans-serif typeface to make the text easier to read The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time The visual communication could be improved by including some relevant images and/or diagrams The presentation is basically produced using simple tools Hide the audio icon Meta-data The chapter title is used, but the sub-title (or a shortened version of it) is not used, as the name of the presentation. The sub-title (or an abbreviation of the sub-title that fits within the 100 character limit) would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding. A link to the book chapter is not provided A link from the book chapter is provided Licensing A copyright license for the presentation is not provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:54, 12 November 2022 (UTC)

Book chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an insufficient chapter mainly because it is incomplete Well under the maximum word count, so there is room to expand For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Basic Overview Explain the problem or phenomenon in more detail Consider introducing a case study or example or using an image to help engage reader interest Add focus questions in a feature box to help guide the reader and structure the chapter Theory – Breadth Insufficient use of relevant psychological theory about this topic Theory – Depth Insufficient depth is provided about relevant theory(ies) Research – Key findings Insufficient review of relevant research Research – Critical thinking Insufficient critical thinking about relevant research is evident Integration Insufficient integration between theory and research Conclusion Insufficient as a cohesive summary of the best available psychological theory and research about the topic Written expression – Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is below professional standard. UC Study Skills assistance is recommended to help improve writing skills Layout See earlier comments about heading casing Grammar The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags) Remove unnecessary capitalisation APA style Do not capitalise the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc. Figures Provide more detailed Figure captions to help connect the figure to the text Use this format for figure captions: Figure X. Descriptive caption in sentence casing. See example Refer to each Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1) Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example: Do not include author first name or initials References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation[1] Check and correct use of italicisation Written expression – Learning features Insufficient use of learning features No use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. One use of an image No use of table(s) No use of feature box(es) No use of quiz(zes) No use of case studies or examples Basic use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Use bullet points per Tutorial 02 Rename links per Tutorial 02 Also include links to related Wikipedia articles Include sources in parentheses No use of external links in the "External links" section Social contribution No logged social contributions

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:43, 21 November 2022 (UTC)