Template:MEBF/2018

Instructions: This is a marking and feedback template for the book chapter exercise for the motivation and emotion unit. This template is designed to be transcluded on a chapter talk page.

Simple example

See also detailed example

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Chapter review and feedback

This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Chapter marks will be available later via Moodle, along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.

Overall Theory Research Written expression

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:11, 3 December 2018 (UTC)

Detailed example

Example use of the template which includes some commonly provided feedback comments:

<!-- Official book chapter feedback -->
{{MEBF/2018
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# Overall, this chapter...
# Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem.
# Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient chapter.
# The chapter could benefit from further development of the Overview and Conclusion - it should be possible to only read these sections and get a good sense of why the topic is important and what is known/recommended.
# Overview - consider building on the sub-title by establishing focus questions to help guide the reader and the chapter structure.
# This chapter is well over the [[Motivation and emotion/Assessment/Chapter#Word_count|maximum word count]].
# For additional feedback, see comments below and [ these copyedits].
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# Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained.
# Basic but sufficient coverage of theory involving the relation between the target constructs is provided.
# Overall, this chapter makes basic use of theory.
# There is too much general theoretical material. Instead, summarise and link to further information, to allow this chapter to focus on the specific topic (i.e., the sub-title question).
# Overall, this chapter makes insufficient use of theory.
# The Reeve (2015) textbook is overused as a citation - instead, utilise primary, peer-reviewed sources.
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# Relevant research is well reviewed and discussed in relation to theory.
# Overall, this chapter provides a basic overview of relevant research.
# Basic but sufficient coverage of research involving the relation between the target constructs is provided.
# Overall, this chapter makes insufficient use of research.
# When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
# Greater emphasis on major reviews and meta-analyses would be helpful.
# Some statements are unreferenced (e.g., see the {{fact}} tags).
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# Written expression
## Overall, the chapter is very well written.
## The chapter benefited from a well developed Overview and Conclusion, with clear focus question(s) and take-home messages.
## The chapter would benefit from a more developed Overview and Conclusion, with clearer focus question(s) (Overview) and take-home self-help message for each focus question (Conclusion).
## Internationalise: Write for an international, not just Australian audience. [http://www.worldometers.info/world-population/australia-population/ Australians make up only 0.32% of the world human population].
## Obtaining (earlier) comments on a chapter plan and/or chapter draft could have helped to improve the chapter.
## Addressing the [[#Topic development feedback|topic development feedback]] could have helped to improve this chapter.
## Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences.
## Some sentences are unnecessarily wordy - strive for the simplest expression of the point being made.
## Some sentences are overly long; consider splitting them into shorter, separate sentences.
## Some statements could be explained more clearly - see the {{explain}} tags
## Some of the bullet-points should have been in full paragraph format.
## Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned").
## Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences.
## Use abbreviations sparingly. Do not use abbreviations for minor terms that aren't used very much in the chapter.
## Use third person perspective, rather than first person (e.g., "we") or second person (e.g., "you") perspective.
## Avoid starting sentences with a citation unless the author is particularly pertinent. Instead, it is more interesting for the the content/key point to be communicated, with the citation included along the way or, more typically, in brackets at the end of the sentence.
## Direct quotes should be embedded within sentences and paragraphs, rather than dumped holus-bolus. Even better, communicate the concept in your own words.
# Layout
## The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections.
## Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.
## Avoid having sections with only one sub-section.
## See earlier comments about [[#Heading casing|heading casing]].
# Learning features
## [[m:Help:Interwiki linking|Interwiki links]] are well used.
## Adding [[m:Help:Interwiki linking|interwiki links]] for the first mention of key words would make the text more interactive.
## Embedding [[m:Help:Interwiki linking|interwiki links]] links to other book chapters would help to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
## Use in-text [[m:Help:Interwiki linking|interwiki links]], rather than external links.
## Basic use of images.
## Basic use of tables.
## Good use of feature boxes.
## Basic use of quizzes.
## Basic use of case studies or examples.
## No use of images, tables, feature boxes, quizzes, case studies, or examples.
## For numbered lists, using Wikiversity formatting per [[Motivation and emotion/Tutorials/Introduction|Tutorial 1]].
# Grammar
## Check and make [https://www.grammarly.com/blog/comma/ correct use of commas].
## The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the {{grammar}} tags).
## Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's).
## Use [[w:Serial comma|serial comma]]s[https://www.buzzfeed.com/adamdavis/the-oxford-comma-is-extremely-important-and-everyone-should].
## Check and correct use of [https://www.google.com.au/search?q=grammar+that+vs+who that vs. who].
## Check and correct use of [https://www.google.com.au/search?q=affect+vs.+effect+grammar affect vs. effect].
## Check and correct use of [http://www.colonsemicolon.com/ semi-colons (;) and colons (:)].
## Abbreviations (such as e.g., i.e.., etc.) should only be used inside parentheses.
# Spelling
## Spelling can be improved (e.g., see the {{spelling}} tags).
## Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour; fulfillment vs. fulfilment).
# Proofreading
## More proofreading is needed to fix typos and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard.
## Remove unnecessary capitalisation.
# APA style
## Use APA style for Figure captions. [[Motivation and emotion/Assessment/Chapter/Figures|See example]].
## Use APA style for Table captions. [[Motivation and emotion/Assessment/Chapter/Tables|See example]].
## Refer to each Table and each Figure at least once within the main text.
## Provide more detailed Figure captions to help connect the figure to the text.
## Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numbers (e.g., 10).
## Direct quotes need page numbers.
## Citations use correct APA style.
## Citations are not in full APA style. For example:
### Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets.
### A [[w:Serial comma|serial comma]] is needed before "&" or "and" for citations involving three or more authors.
### In-text citations should be in alphabetical order.
### When there are three or more authors, subsequent citations should use et al. e.g., Smith, Bush and Western (2001) and thereafter cite Smith et al. (2001).
### A full stop is needed after "et al".
### For APA style, citations in parentheses use a comma between the author(s) and year.
### Check and correct use of [http://research.moreheadstate.edu/c.php?g=107001&p=695202 citations for sources with six or more authors].
### Select up to the top three citations per point (i.e., avoid citing four or more citations to support a single point).
## References use correct APA style.
## References are not in full APA style. For example:
### Check and correct use of capitalisation.
### Check and correct use of italicisation.
### Add spaces between author initials.
### See [http://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2014/07/how-to-use-the-new-doi-format-in-apa-style.html new doi format].
### Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within volumes.
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gives

Chapter review and feedback

This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Chapter marks will be available later via Moodle, along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.

Overall Overall, this chapter... Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient chapter. The chapter could benefit from further development of the Overview and Conclusion - it should be possible to only read these sections and get a good sense of why the topic is important and what is known/recommended. Overview - consider building on the sub-title by establishing focus questions to help guide the reader and the chapter structure. This chapter is well over the maximum word count. For additional feedback, see comments below and [ these copyedits]. Theory Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained. There is too much general theoretical material. Instead, summarise and link to further information, to allow this chapter to focus on the specific topic (i.e., the sub-title question). Overall, this chapter makes basic use of theory. Basic but sufficient coverage of theory involving the relation between the target constructs is provided. Overall, this chapter makes insufficient use of theory. The Reeve (2015) textbook is overused as a citation - instead, utilise primary, peer-reviewed sources. Research Relevant research is well reviewed and discussed in relation to theory. Overall, this chapter provides a basic overview of relevant research. Basic but sufficient coverage of research involving the relation between the target constructs is provided. Overall, this chapter makes insufficient use of research. When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Greater emphasis on major reviews and meta-analyses would be helpful. Some statements are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags). Written expression Written expression Overall, the chapter is very well written. The chapter benefited from a well developed Overview and Conclusion, with clear focus question(s) and take-home messages. The chapter would benefit from a more developed Overview and Conclusion, with clearer focus question(s) (Overview) and take-home self-help message for each focus question (Conclusion). Internationalise: Write for an international, not just Australian audience. Australians make up only 0.32% of the world human population. Obtaining (earlier) comments on a chapter plan and/or chapter draft could have helped to improve the chapter. Addressing the topic development feedback could have helped to improve this chapter. Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences. Some sentences are unnecessarily wordy - strive for the simplest expression of the point being made. Some sentences are overly long; consider splitting them into shorter, separate sentences. Some statements could be explained more clearly - see the tags. Some of the bullet-points should have been in full paragraph format. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences. Use abbreviations sparingly. Do not use abbreviations for minor terms that aren't used very much in the chapter. Use third person perspective, rather than first person (e.g., "we") or second person (e.g., "you") perspective. Avoid starting sentences with a citation unless the author is particularly pertinent. Instead, it is more interesting for the the content/key point to be communicated, with the citation included along the way or, more typically, in brackets at the end of the sentence. Direct quotes should be embedded within sentences and paragraphs, rather than dumped holus-bolus. Even better, communicate the concept in your own words. Layout The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. Avoid having sections with only one sub-section. See earlier comments about heading casing Learning features Interwiki links are well used. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words would make the text more interactive. Embedding interwiki links links to other book chapters would help to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Use in-text interwiki links, rather than external links. Basic use of images. Basic use of tables. Good use of feature boxes. Basic use of quizzes. Basic use of case studies or examples. No use of images, tables, feature boxes, quizzes, case studies, or examples. For numbered lists, using Wikiversity formatting per Tutorial 1. Grammar Check and make correct use of commas. The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's). Use serial commas[1]. Check and correct use of that vs. who. Check and correct use of affect vs. effect. Check and correct use of semi-colons (;) and colons (:). Abbreviations (such as e.g., i.e.., etc.) should only be used inside parentheses. Spelling Spelling can be improved (e.g., see the tags). Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour; fulfillment vs. fulfilment). Proofreading More proofreading is needed to fix typos and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard. Remove unnecessary capitalisation. APA style Use APA style for Figure captions. See example. Use APA style for Table captions. See example. Refer to each Table and each Figure at least once within the main text. Provide more detailed Figure captions to help connect the figure to the text. Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numbers (e.g., 10). Direct quotes need page numbers. Citations use correct APA style. Citations are not in full APA style. For example: Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets. A serial comma is needed before "&" or "and" for citations involving three or more authors. In-text citations should be in alphabetical order. When there are three or more authors, subsequent citations should use et al. e.g., Smith, Bush and Western (2001) and thereafter cite Smith et al. (2001). A full stop is needed after "et al". For APA style, citations in parentheses use a comma between the author(s) and year. Check and correct use of citations for sources with six or more authors. Select up to the top three citations per point (i.e., avoid citing four or more citations to support a single point). References use correct APA style. References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation. Check and correct use of italicisation. Add spaces between author initials. See new doi format. Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within volumes.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:48, 26 November 2018 (UTC)

See also

• Template:MESC
• Template:MEMF
• Book chapter author guidelines