Template:MEBF/2018
Instructions: This is a marking and feedback template for the book chapter exercise for the motivation and emotion unit. This template is designed to be transcluded on a chapter talk page.
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This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Chapter marks will be available later via Moodle, along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements. |
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-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:11, 3 December 2018 (UTC)
Detailed example
editExample use of the template which includes some commonly provided feedback comments:
<!-- Official book chapter feedback --> {{MEBF/2018 |1= <!-- Overall comments... --> # Overall, this chapter... # Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. # Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient chapter. # The chapter could benefit from further development of the Overview and Conclusion - it should be possible to only read these sections and get a good sense of why the topic is important and what is known/recommended. # Overview - consider building on the sub-title by establishing focus questions to help guide the reader and the chapter structure. # This chapter is well over the [[Motivation and emotion/Assessment/Chapter#Word_count|maximum word count]]. # For additional feedback, see comments below and [ these copyedits]. |2= <!-- Theory comments... --> # Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained. # Basic but sufficient coverage of theory involving the relation between the target constructs is provided. # Overall, this chapter makes basic use of theory. # There is too much general theoretical material. Instead, summarise and link to further information, to allow this chapter to focus on the specific topic (i.e., the sub-title question). # Overall, this chapter makes insufficient use of theory. # The Reeve (2015) textbook is overused as a citation - instead, utilise primary, peer-reviewed sources. |3= <!-- Research comments... --> # Relevant research is well reviewed and discussed in relation to theory. # Overall, this chapter provides a basic overview of relevant research. # Basic but sufficient coverage of research involving the relation between the target constructs is provided. # Overall, this chapter makes insufficient use of research. # When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. # Greater emphasis on major reviews and meta-analyses would be helpful. # Some statements are unreferenced (e.g., see the {{fact}} tags). |4= <!-- Written expression comments... --> # Written expression ## Overall, the chapter is very well written. ## The chapter benefited from a well developed Overview and Conclusion, with clear focus question(s) and take-home messages. ## The chapter would benefit from a more developed Overview and Conclusion, with clearer focus question(s) (Overview) and take-home self-help message for each focus question (Conclusion). ## Internationalise: Write for an international, not just Australian audience. [http://www.worldometers.info/world-population/australia-population/ Australians make up only 0.32% of the world human population]. ## Obtaining (earlier) comments on a chapter plan and/or chapter draft could have helped to improve the chapter. ## Addressing the [[#Topic development feedback|topic development feedback]] could have helped to improve this chapter. ## Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences. ## Some sentences are unnecessarily wordy - strive for the simplest expression of the point being made. ## Some sentences are overly long; consider splitting them into shorter, separate sentences. ## Some statements could be explained more clearly - see the {{explain}} tags ## Some of the bullet-points should have been in full paragraph format. ## Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). ## Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences. ## Use abbreviations sparingly. Do not use abbreviations for minor terms that aren't used very much in the chapter. ## Use third person perspective, rather than first person (e.g., "we") or second person (e.g., "you") perspective. ## Avoid starting sentences with a citation unless the author is particularly pertinent. Instead, it is more interesting for the the content/key point to be communicated, with the citation included along the way or, more typically, in brackets at the end of the sentence. ## Direct quotes should be embedded within sentences and paragraphs, rather than dumped holus-bolus. Even better, communicate the concept in your own words. # Layout ## The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections. ## Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. ## Avoid having sections with only one sub-section. ## See earlier comments about [[#Heading casing|heading casing]]. # Learning features ## [[m:Help:Interwiki linking|Interwiki links]] are well used. ## Adding [[m:Help:Interwiki linking|interwiki links]] for the first mention of key words would make the text more interactive. ## Embedding [[m:Help:Interwiki linking|interwiki links]] links to other book chapters would help to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. ## Use in-text [[m:Help:Interwiki linking|interwiki links]], rather than external links. ## Basic use of images. ## Basic use of tables. ## Good use of feature boxes. ## Basic use of quizzes. ## Basic use of case studies or examples. ## No use of images, tables, feature boxes, quizzes, case studies, or examples. ## For numbered lists, using Wikiversity formatting per [[Motivation and emotion/Tutorials/Introduction|Tutorial 1]]. # Grammar ## Check and make [https://www.grammarly.com/blog/comma/ correct use of commas]. ## The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the {{grammar}} tags). ## Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's). ## Use [[w:Serial comma|serial comma]]s[https://www.buzzfeed.com/adamdavis/the-oxford-comma-is-extremely-important-and-everyone-should]. ## Check and correct use of [https://www.google.com.au/search?q=grammar+that+vs+who that vs. who]. ## Check and correct use of [https://www.google.com.au/search?q=affect+vs.+effect+grammar affect vs. effect]. ## Check and correct use of [http://www.colonsemicolon.com/ semi-colons (;) and colons (:)]. ## Abbreviations (such as e.g., i.e.., etc.) should only be used inside parentheses. # Spelling ## Spelling can be improved (e.g., see the {{spelling}} tags). ## Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour; fulfillment vs. fulfilment). # Proofreading ## More proofreading is needed to fix typos and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard. ## Remove unnecessary capitalisation. # APA style ## Use APA style for Figure captions. [[Motivation and emotion/Assessment/Chapter/Figures|See example]]. ## Use APA style for Table captions. [[Motivation and emotion/Assessment/Chapter/Tables|See example]]. ## Refer to each Table and each Figure at least once within the main text. ## Provide more detailed Figure captions to help connect the figure to the text. ## Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numbers (e.g., 10). ## Direct quotes need page numbers. ## Citations use correct APA style. ## Citations are not in full APA style. For example: ### Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets. ### A [[w:Serial comma|serial comma]] is needed before "&" or "and" for citations involving three or more authors. ### In-text citations should be in alphabetical order. ### When there are three or more authors, subsequent citations should use et al. e.g., Smith, Bush and Western (2001) and thereafter cite Smith et al. (2001). ### A full stop is needed after "et al". ### For APA style, citations in parentheses use a comma between the author(s) and year. ### Check and correct use of [http://research.moreheadstate.edu/c.php?g=107001&p=695202 citations for sources with six or more authors]. ### Select up to the top three citations per point (i.e., avoid citing four or more citations to support a single point). ## References use correct APA style. ## References are not in full APA style. For example: ### Check and correct use of capitalisation. ### Check and correct use of italicisation. ### Add spaces between author initials. ### See [http://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2014/07/how-to-use-the-new-doi-format-in-apa-style.html new doi format]. ### Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within volumes. }} ~~~~
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This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Chapter marks will be available later via Moodle, along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements. |
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-- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:48, 26 November 2018 (UTC)