Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2024/Vagus nerve and stress

Suggestions

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Hi, great work so far. Your chapter is well-structured, beginning with an accessible introduction and progressing into the scientific aspects of the vagus nerve and stress. The case study of Jenny adds a relatable, practical application of the theory, making the content more engaging for readers. You may want to include more recent studies and citations that jump into vagus nerve stimulation techniques, particularly those used in clinical practice. This would enhance the practical applicability for readers interested in therapeutic approaches. Also don't forget to move any non peer reviewed articles from the reference section to the external links section for example, Youtube sources. Best of luck! U3243508 (discusscontribs) 10:32 , 26 September 2024 (UTC)

Initial suggestions

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@Princess Brutus: Thanks for tackling this topic. Some initial suggestions:

Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:26, 10 August 2024 (UTC)Reply

Heading casing

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Hi Princess Brutus. FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example:

Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory

Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:32, 5 October 2024 (UTC)Reply

Further suggestion of useful wikipage

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Hi @Princess Brutus! I myself have a medical background and have encountered many patients who suffer with vagus nerve related issues. I am very curious and excited to see how you develop your research and add to this topic, especially with the focal point being the impact of stress on the vagus nerve. Your research will no doubt be greatly impactful and enlightening. Good luck to you and all the best with your studious endeavours! Mkatemoore (discusscontribs) 10:19, 22 August 2024 (UTC)Reply


Topic development feedback

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The topic development submission has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is below, plus see the general feedback page. Please also check the page history for changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Marks are available via UCLearn. Marks are based on the latest version before the due date.

 
  1. The title and sub-title are correctly worded and formatted
  1. Basic, 2-level heading structure – could benefit from further development (expand)
  2. Develop closer alignment between sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings
  3. "Introduction" heading isn't necessary. Provide this information in Overview or move into subsequent sections.
  4. Cover definition(s) in the Overview and/or subsequent sections with embedded inter-wiki link(s) to further information.
  1. Excellent – Scenario, image, evocative description of the problem/topic, and focus questions
  2. A scenario or case study is presented in a feature box with an image at the start of this section
  3. Select an image which better matched the scenario
  4. Two scenarios/case studies are presented. Move one into another section.
  5. A brief, evocative description of the problem/topic is planned
  1. Use 3rd person perspective (except 1st/2nd person can work for feature boxes/scenarios)
  1. Closer alignment between the sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings is recommended
  1. Basic development of key points
  2. Basic use of citations
  3. Strive for an integrated balance of the best psychological theory and research about this topic, with practical examples
  4. For sections which include sub-sections, include the key points for an overview paragraph prior to branching into the sub-headings
  5. Avoid providing too much background information. Aim to briefly summarise general concepts and provide internal links to relevant book chapters and/or Wikipedia pages for further information. Then focus most of the content on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title.
  6. Conclusion is underway
  1. Does the Conclusion plan include genAI content? If so, it needs to be acknowledged as such in the edit summaries, otherwise it violates academic integrity.
  1. What might the take-home, practical messages be? (What are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions?)
  1. One or more figure(s) presented and captioned
  2. The figure caption(s) provide(s) a reasonably clear, appropriately detailed description that is meaningfully connected with the main text. Explain the image illustrates stress and the VN
  3. Figure(s) are cited at least once in the main text
  4. Consider increasing image size from to make it easier to view
  1. One use of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to relevant book chapters
  2. Promising use of one or more scenarios/examples/case studies
  3. Excellent use of quiz question(s)
  4. Also consider using one or more tables to summarise key information
  5. Consider including more examples/case studies, quiz question(s), table(s) etc.
  1. Excellent
  2. Well done on identifying relevant systematic reviews and/or meta-analyses
  3. Check and correct APA referencing style:
    1. capitalisation
    2. italicisation
  1. I don't think is ChatGPT 2 is available. Check which model was used. Ideally, link to the conversations to foster transparency. Follow the using genAI guidelines which include acknowledging and linking to genAI use in edit summaries, otherwise it is a violation of academic integrity.
  1. See also
    1. Excellent
  2. External links
    1. To be developed (see Tutorial 2)
  1. Good
  2. Brief description about self – consider expanding
  3. Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.
  4. A link to the book chapter is provided
  1. None summarised on user page with direct link(s) to evidence (see Tutorial 03). Looking ahead to the book chapter submission, see social contributions.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:12, 3 September 2024 (UTC)Reply

General Feedback

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The chapter on the vagus nerve and stress is well-organised and engaging. The introduction effectively draws readers in with a relatable scenario, making complex concepts more accessible. The structure, with clear subheadings and case studies like Jenny’s, helps break down the information logically, allowing for a good flow of ideas. The scientific basis, especially the use of stress theories like the Cognitive Appraisal Theory, is well-integrated, but could be further deepened. A stronger link between these theories and the vagus nerve’s role in stress management would enhance the theoretical depth. Additionally, the case study could benefit from more detail on how interventions related to the vagus nerve might improve outcomes. Overall, the chapter does a great job of explaining the physiological and psychological importance of the vagus nerve in stress responses. Great work! (~~~~ = Cophiesollins 12:24, 04 October 2024 (UTC)) Cophiesollins (discusscontribs) 02:26, 4 October 2024 (UTC)Reply

Book chapter review and feedback

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This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Chapter marks will be available via UCLearn along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.

 

Overall

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  1. Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient chapter
  2. I suspect that some of this chapter is based on unacknowledged use of genAI content; if so, it violates academic integrity principles
  3. Insufficient use of primary, peer-reviewed sources as citations (e.g., see the [factual?] tags)
  4. Over the maximum word count. The content beyond 4,000 words has been ignored for marking purposes.
  5. Some material is repetitive (e.g., 10th cranial nerve)
  6. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits
  1. Basic
  2. Remove sub-headings
  3. Engages reader via a case study or scenario in a feature box; also include a relevant image (fixed)
  4. Explains the problem or phenomenon
  5. Clear focus questions
  1. A promising range of ideas are presented but it is far from clear how this material is derived from a first person reading of the best peer-reviewed psychological theory and research about this topic; it seems likely that much of this content was generated by genAI as there is little evidence of reading of the best psychological theory and research about the topic
  2. Builds on one previous, related chapter and/or Wikipedia article
  3. Build more strongly on related chapters and/or Wikipedia articles (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters)
  4. Promising depth is provided about relevant theory(ies)
  5. Effective use of tables, figures, and/or lists to help clearly convey key theoretical information
  6. Use tables, figures, and/or lists to help convey key theoretical information
  7. Insufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the [factual?] tags)
  8. Some use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts
  1. Basic review of relevant research
  2. More detail about key studies would be ideal
  3. Insufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the [factual?] tags)
  4. Basic critical thinking about relevant research is evident
  5. Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by:
    1. describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies
    2. considering the strength of relationships
    3. acknowledging limitations
    4. pointing out critiques/counterarguments
    5. suggesting specific directions for future research
  6. Many claims lack sufficient citation (e.g., see the [factual?] tags)
  1. Basic integration between theory and research
  2. The chapter places more emphasis on theory than on research; strive for an integrated balance
  1. Reasonably good summary and conclusion
  2. Add practical, take-home message(s)
  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the quality of written expression is basic
    2. Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes
  2. Layout
    1. The chapter is poorly structured. Review the skills taught in Tutorial 2.
    2. The structure is overly complicated; aim for 3 to 6 top-level headings between the Introduction and Conclusion
    3. Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading – use 0 or 2+ sub-headings
    4. Use the default heading style (e.g., remove additional italics and/or bold)
    5. Include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections (see [Provide more detail] tags)
  3. Grammar
    1. The grammar for many sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags)
      1. Consider using a grammar checking tool
      2. Another option is to use a services provided by UC, such as Studiosity
      3. Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance
  4. Proofreading
    1. Remove unnecessary capitalisation
  5. APA style
    1. Use sentence casing for the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc.
    2. Use serial commas[2]. Video (1 min)
    3. Figures
      1. Briefly captioned; provide more detail to help connect the figure to the text
      2. Each Figure is referred to at least once within the main text
    4. Citations use insufficient APA style (7th ed.). To improve:
      1. Learn when to use parentheses and when not to
      2. If there are three or more authors, cite the first author followed by et al., then year. For example, either:
        1. in-text, Smith et al. (2020), or
        2. in parentheses (Smith et al., 2020)
    5. References use good APA style:
      1. Use author initials rather than first names
      2. Check and correct use of italicisation
      3. Include hyperlinked dois (fixed)
      4. Move non-peer reviewed links into the External links section
  1. Basic use of learning features
  2. One use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text even more interactive. See example.
  3. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
  4. Basic use of image(s)
  5. No use of table(s)
  6. Reasonably good use of feature box(es)
  7. Basic use of case studies or examples
  8. Excellent use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s)
  9. Over word count; not used for marking purposes
  10. Over word count; not used for marking purposes
  1. ~6 logged, useful, moderate social contributions just before the due date with direct links to evidence
  2. The contributions are formulaic, suggesting that genAI may have been used without acknowledgement. If so, this would violate academic integrity principles.
  3. Note that the eportfolio link is not accessible

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:40, 26 October 2024 (UTC)Reply


Multimedia presentation feedback

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Overall

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  1. Overall, this is a good presentation
  1. The opening slide conveys the purpose of the presentation
    1. The title and sub-title are displayed and paraphrased
  2. Create an engaging introduction to hook audience interest
  3. A context for the presentation is established
  4. Focus questions and/or an outline of topics are presented
  1. Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section
  2. The presentation addresses the topic
  3. The presentation makes good use of relevant psychological theory
  4. The presentation makes basic use of relevant psychological research
  5. The presentation makes basic use of citations to support claims
  6. The presentation makes basic use of one or more examples
  7. The presentation provides basic practical advice
  8. The presentation provides easy to understand information
  1. The conclusion provides a reasonably good summary of the most relevant psychological theory and research about this topic
  2. The conclusion provides basic take-home message(s)
  3. The Conclusion only partly fitted within the time limit
  1. Make fewer references to the book chapter; concentrate on addressing the topic
  2. The presentation makes good use of narrated audio
  3. Audio communication is reasonably well-paced
  4. Reasonably good intonation
  5. The narration is reasonably well practiced and/or performed
  6. Check and correct pronunciation for acetylcholine
  7. Audio recording quality was reasonably good
  8. Review microphone set-up to achieve higher recording quality
  9. Probably an on-board microphone was used (e.g., keyboard and/or mouse clicks were audible). Consider using an external microphone.
  10. The narrated content is well matched to the target topic
  1. Overall, visual display quality is reasonably good
  2. The presentation makes very good/ use of text and image based slides
  3. The font size is mostly sufficiently large to make it easy to read
  4. Some of the font size could be larger to make it easier to read
  5. The amount of text presented per slide mostly makes it reasonably easy to read and listen at the same time
  6. The visual communication is supplemented in a good way by relevant images and/or diagrams
  7. The presentation is well produced using simple tools
  8. The visual content is well matched to the target topic
  1. The correct title and sub-title (or an abbreviation to fit within the 100 character limit) are used in the name of the presentation — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation
  2. A very brief written description of the presentation is provided. Expand.
  3. Provide a written description of the presentation to help potential viewers
  4. Links to and from the book chapter are provided
  1. Image sources and their copyright status are communicated
  2. The copyrights of some image creators appear to have been violated by reusing without permission
  3. A copyright license for the presentation is clearly indicated

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:57, 8 November 2024 (UTC)Reply

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