Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2024/Post-traumatic stress disorder and emotion

Suggestion

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Hi, Great chapter so far I can see you've got a great structure to add the rest of your information. It looks like you might not have found or added external links yet. I found a handful relating to your topic if you'd like to explore them and add any!

Best of luck U3243508 (discusscontribs) 3:12, 26 September 2024 (UTC)


Hi Rachel Condat so far you have put together such an insightful book chapter! Well done (: Here are some feedback/suggestion points I have for you:

You have done well in providing a comprehensive chapter covering multiple components of PTSD and emotion, including neurobiological, cognitive, and behavioural causes.

You have made good use in providing realistic scenarios and integrating various psychological theories.

Maybe consider providing more multimedia to break up text content for a holistic learning experience.

Don't forget to add the hanging indents to your references too!

Wishing you the best of luck! --U3236641 (discusscontribs) 22:18, 3 October 2024 (UTC)Reply



Question

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Would you consider comparing PTSD to c-PTSD (complex PTSD)? It's a fairly new concept and if it is relevant to your topic perhaps you could compare the two. U3229926 (discusscontribs) 07:13, 13 August 2024 (UTC)Reply


Topic development feedback

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The topic development submission has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is below, plus see the general feedback page. Please also check the page history for changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Marks are available via UCLearn. Marks are based on the latest version before the due date.

 
  1. The title and sub-title are correctly worded and formatted
  2. The title and/or sub-title were not correctly worded and/or formatted. This has been corrected.
  3. User name removed – authorship is as per the list of topics and the page's editing history
  1. Well developed 3-level heading structure. Meaningful headings clearly relate directly to the core topic.
  2. Maybe be overly complicated since key points haven't been developed for each section. Consider simplifying (e.g., drop the 3rd level of heading).
  3. The formatting for the 2nd and 3rd level of heading is not correct (it uses something like 5th-level format)
  4. Adopt closer alignment between the sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings
  1. Scenario, image, evocative description of the problem/topic, relevant psychological theory/research, and focus questions
  2. A scenario or case study is presented in a feature box at the start of this section
  3. A brief, evocative description of the problem/topic is provided
  4. Closer alignment between the sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings is recommended
  5. There are too many focus questions - I've removed the three least important ones. Suggest further refinement.
  1. Partial development of key points for some sections, with some relevant citations
  2. For sections which include sub-sections, include the key points for an overview paragraph prior to branching into the sub-headings
  3. Avoid providing too much background/tangential information. Briefly summarise general concepts and provide internal wiki links to relevant book chapters and/or Wikipedia pages for further information. Then focus most of the content of this on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title.
  4. Strive for an integrated balance of theory and research, with practical examples
  5. Avoid overcapitalisation (use APA style)
  6. Conclusion (the most important section):
    1. Hasn't been developed
  1. A relevant figure is presented and captioned
  2. Caption could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text
  3. Cite each figure at least once in the main text using APA style
  4. Consider increasing image size from to make it easier to view
  1. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters
  2. Promising use of example(s)/case study(ies)
  3. Promising use of quiz question(s)
  4. Focus the quiz question(s) on the take-home messages for each focus question
  5. Promising use of table(s)
  6. Focus the tables on addressing the focus questions; better off linking to the Wikipedia article about PTSD for this sort of information
  1. OK
  2. Are there any systematic reviews about this topic?
  3. For APA referencing style, check and correct:
    1. capitalisation
    2. italicisation
    3. doi formatting
    4. only the doi should be an active hyperlink
    5. page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-)
  1. See also
    1. OK
    2. Move the external links into a new section at the end called "External links"
    3. Include source in brackets after link
    4. Also link to related book chapters
  1. Excellent – used effectively
  2. Excellent description about self provided
  3. Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.
  4. A link to the book chapter is provided
  1. Good – two out of three types of contributions made with with direct link(s) to evidence
  2. The other type of contribution ia making:
    1. comments on chapters (past or current)
  3. If adding the second or subsequent link to a page (or a talk/discussion page), create a direct link like / Add direct links to evidence. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions.
  4. Use a numbered list (see Tutorial 02)

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:43, 18 August 2024 (UTC)Reply

Heading casing

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Hi Rachel Condat. FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example:

Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory

Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:37, 30 September 2024 (UTC)Reply

Book chapter review and feedback

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This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Chapter marks will be available via UCLearn along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.

 

Overall

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  1. Overall, this is a reasonably good chapter
  2. A key area for potential improvement is the quality of written expression
  3. Reasonably good use of academic, peer-reviewed citations to support claims
  4. Better use could be made of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the [factual?] tags)
  5. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits
  1. Solid
  2. Engages reader via a case study or scenario in a feature box with a relevant image
  3. Explains the problem or phenomenon
  4. Clear focus questions
  1. A reasonably good range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained
  2. The main issue is too much focus on "PTSD and memory" rather on the topic which is "PTSD and emotion", although they understandably are related and the focus on "PTSD and memory and emotion" is relevant and useful
  3. There was room to discuss treatment for PTSD in relation to emotion. What works?
  4. Consider linking to the corresponding chapter about post-traumatic growth
  5. Builds somewhat on Wikipedia articles; build more strongly on related book chapters
  6. Very good depth is provided about relevant theory(ies)
  7. Basic use of tables, figures, and/or lists to help convey key theoretical information
  8. Insufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the [factual?] tags)
  9. Some use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts
  1. Good review of relevant research
  2. More detail about key studies would be ideal
  3. Any systematic reviews or meta-analyses in this area?
  4. Insufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the [factual?] tags) in many places
  5. Basic critical thinking about relevant research is evident
  6. Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by:
    1. describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies
    2. considering the strength of relationships
    3. acknowledging limitations
    4. pointing out critiques/counterarguments
    5. suggesting specific directions for future research
  7. Some claims lack sufficient citation (e.g., see the [factual?] tags)
  1. Excellent integration between theory and research
  1. Very good summary and conclusion
  2. Add practical, take-home message(s)
  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the quality of written expression is reasonably good
  2. Layout
    1. Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading – use 0 or 2+ sub-headings
  3. Grammar
    1. The grammar for many sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags)
      1. Consider using a grammar checking tool
      2. Another option is to use a services provided by UC, such as Studiosity
      3. Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance
    2. Abbreviations
      1. Once an abbreviation has been established (e.g., PTSD), use it consistently aftwarwards
  4. Spelling
    1. Some words are misspelt (e.g., see the [spelling?] tags). Spell-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages.
  5. Proofreading
    1. More proofreading is needed (e.g., fix punctuation and typographical errors) to bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard
  6. APA style
    1. Use sentence casing for the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc.
    2. Use serial commas[1]. Video (1 min)
    3. Figures
      1. Well captioned
      2. Use this format for captions: Figure X. Descriptive caption in sentence casing. See example
      3. Refer to each Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1)
    4. Tables
      1. Table 1 is overly detailed. Summarise key points more succinctly.
      2. Table captions use APA style or wiki style
      3. Refer to each Table at least once within the main text (e.g., see Table 1)
    5. Citations use excellent APA style (7th ed.)
    6. References use basic APA style:
      1. Provide full journal titles
      2. Include hyperlinked dois (fixed)
      3. Check and correct use of capitalisation[2]
      4. Check and correct spelling
  1. Reasonably good use of learning features
  2. Reasonably good use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text even more interactive. See example.
  3. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
  4. Basic use of image(s)
  5. Basic use of table(s)
  6. Good use of feature box(es)
  7. Very good use of case studies or examples
  8. Excellent use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s)
  9. One use of interwiki links in the "See also" section
  10. Very good use of external links in the "External links" section
    1. Use alphabetical order
  1. ~2 logged, useful, moderate social contributions with direct links to evidence
  2. 1 contribution without direct links to evidence; ignored for marking purposes
  3. Use a numbered list per Tutorial 02

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:03, 23 October 2024 (UTC)Reply


Multimedia presentation feedback

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Overall

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  1. Overall, this is a reasonably good presentation
  2. Target an international audience
  3. The presentation is over the maximum time limit — content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking and feedback purposes
  1. An opening slide with the title and sub-title is displayed — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation
  2. Create an engaging introduction to hook audience interest (e.g., by introducing a case study or scenario)
  3. A basic context for the presentation is established
  4. Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation.
  1. Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section
  2. The presentation somewhat addresses the topic
  3. A third of presentation was dedicated to prevalence, but this isn't the topic
  4. There is too much content (goes over time)
  5. The presentation makes promising use of relevant psychological theory
  6. The presentation makes little to no use of relevant psychological research
  7. Ideally, make more explicit use of research
  8. The presentation makes very good use of citations to support claims
  9. The presentation makes no use of one or more examples
  10. The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples or case studies
  11. The presentation could be improved by providing practical advice
  12. Provide easy to understand information
  1. The conclusion provides a very good summary of the most relevant psychological theory and research about this topic
  2. The Conclusion only partly fitted within the time limit
  1. The audio is easy to follow
  2. The presentation makes basic use of narrated audio
  3. Audio communication is reasonably well paced
  4. Consider slowing down and leaving longer pauses between sentences. This can help the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point.
  5. Good intonation
  6. The narration is reasonably well practiced and/or performed
  7. Audio recording quality was excellent
  8. The narrated content is reasonably well matched to the target topic
  1. Overall, visual display quality is reasonably good
  2. The presentation makes reasonably good use of text and image based slides
  3. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read
  4. Some of the font size could be larger to make it easier to read
  5. The amount of text presented per slide could be reduced to make it easier to read and listen at the same time
  6. The visual communication is supplemented in a reasonably good way by relevant images and/or diagrams, with webcam
  7. The presentation is well produced using simple tools
  8. The visual content is reasonably well matched to the target topic
  1. The chapter title and sub-title (or an abbreviation to fit within the 100 character limit) are used in the name of the presentation — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation
  2. The question mark is missing from the title/sub-title
  3. An excellent written description of the presentation is provided
  4. An inactive hyperlink to the book chapter is provided (maybe because the YouTube user account does not yet have access to advanced features)
  5. A link from the book chapter is provided
  1. Image sources and their copyright status are communicated
  2. A copyright license for the presentation is clearly indicated in the description but not the meta-data

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:13, 6 November 2024 (UTC)Reply

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