Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2024/Physical activity tracking and exercise motivation

Initial suggestions

@Alyssia Myers: Thanks for tackling this topic. Some initial suggestions:

• Check out other related chapters and see how you can build on, link to, and integrate with that work:
  • Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Exercise
  • Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Self-tracking
• Also search past book chapters for related topics
• For the topic development, consider:
  • What psychological theory(ies) can help to understand and explain this topic?
  • What is the main research in this area?
• Let me know if I can do anything else to support the development of this chapter.

Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:41, 10 August 2024 (UTC)

Comment

Hi Alyssia, Really interesting topic you chose for this, if you haven't already you should check out last year's chapter on Physical Activity tracking and exercise motivation, they seem to have some valuable resources. https://en.wikiversity.org/wiki/Motivation_and_emotion/Book/2023/Physical_activity_tracking_and_exercise_motivation --U3236610 Allana (discuss • contribs) 13:14, 15 August 2024 (UTC)

Heading casing

Hi Alyssia Myers. FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development ~~~~

Topic development feedback

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1. Title The title and/or sub-title were not correctly worded and/or formatted (fixed) 2. Headings See earlier comment about Heading casing Promising 3-level heading structure – could benefit from simplification perhaps to a 2-level structure Adopt closer alignment between the sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings The Overview and Conclusion should not have sub-headings Avoid having sections with only 1 sub-heading – use 0 or 2+ sub-headings 3. Overview Excellent - Scenario, image, evocative description of the problem/topic, relevant psychological theory/research, and focus questions A scenario or case study is presented in a feature box at the start of this section. Move the image into the scenario feature box to help attract reader interest. Probably make the image smaller. A brief, evocative description of the problem/topic is provided Closer alignment between the sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings is recommended The only relevant focus question is the last one. The other focus questions are too broad (i.e., not sufficiently specific to this topic). 4. Key points Promising development of key points for each section, with relevant citations For sections which include sub-sections, include the key points for an overview paragraph prior to branching into the sub-headings Avoid providing too much background information. Aim to briefly summarise general concepts and provide internal links to relevant book chapters and/or Wikipedia pages for further information. Then focus most of the content on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title. Strive for an integrated balance of the best psychological theory and research about this topic, with practical examples Conclusion (the most important section): Hasn't been developed What might the take-home, practical messages be? (What are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions?) 5. Figure Excellent - A relevant figure is presented, captioned, and cited Caption could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text Figure(s) are cited at least once in the main text 6. Learning feature Excellent use of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Excellent use of quiz question(s) Also consider using one or more tables to summarise key information 7. References Very good Well done on identifying relevant systematic reviews and/or meta-analyses Note that a 2020 preprint should be in press by now Move non-academic / non-peer reviewed sources to External links Check and correct APA referencing style: alphabetical order capitalisation italicisation 8. Resources See also OK One of two link types provided Also link to relevant Wikipedia pages Use sentence casing Use alphabetical order External links Very good Use bullet-points (see Tutorial 02) Use alphabetical order 9. User page Excellent – used effectively Excellent description about self provided Link(s) provided to professional profile(s) A link to the book chapter is provided 10. Social contribution Good – two out of three types of contributions made with with direct link(s) to evidence Also try making direct improvements to other book chapters (past or current) comments on chapters (past or current) posts about the unit or project on other platforms None summarised on user page with direct link(s) to evidence (see Tutorial 03). Looking ahead to the book chapter submission, see social contributions. To add direct links to evidence: view the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and paste the comparison URL on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions. Great to see you on X! Use a numbered list (see Tutorial 02) Add a brief summary of each contribution

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:00, 24 August 2024 (UTC)

Book chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent chapter. It successfully uses psychological theory and research to address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. Excellent use of academic, peer-reviewed citations to support claims For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Well developed Engages reader via a case study or scenario in a feature box with a relevant image (has been moved into box and resized) Clearly explains the problem or phenomenon Is there a problem with a lack of physical activity (or too much)? (i.e., why is tracking potentially useful?) Clear focus questions Use open-ended rather than closed-ended focus questions Theory An excellent range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained Builds effectively on related chapters and Wikipedia articles Insightful depth is provided about relevant theory(ies) Effective use of tables, figures, and/or lists to help clearly convey key theoretical information Key citations are well used Excellent use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts Research Very good review of relevant research More detail about key studies would be ideal Any systematic reviews or meta-analyses in this area? Basic critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Integration Good integration between theory and research The chapter places more emphasis on theory than on research; strive for an integrated balance Conclusion Excellent summary and conclusion Clear take-home message(s) Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is very good The target audience is international, not domestic. Australians represent only 0.3% of the world human population. "People" is often a better term than "individuals" Layout The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections Include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections (see tags) Spelling Many words are misspelt (e.g., see the tags). Spell-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. APA style Use serial commas[1]. Video (1 min) Figures Figures are very well captioned Refer to each Figure using APA style (e.g., do not use bold, italics, check and correct capitalisation) Tables Table captions use APA style or wiki style Refer to each Table using APA style (e.g., do not use bold, talics, check and correct capitalisation) Citations use very good APA style (7th ed.). To improve: List multiple citations in alphabetical order by first author surname Move embedded external links to peer-reviewed sources into the References section and provide APA style citations Move embedded external links to non-peer-reviewed sources into the Exteral links section References use reasonably good APA style: Check and correct use of capitalisation[2] Check and correct use of italicisation Move non-peer-reviewed sources to the external links section Learning features Excellent use of learning features Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles Excellent use of image(s) Excellent use of table(s) Excellent use of feature box(es) Very good use of case studies or examples Excellent use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s) Reasonably good use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Use bullet points per Tutorial 02 Use alphabetical order Reasonably good use of external links in the "External links" section Be more selective. Provide the best half-dozen links about this topic that are relevant to an international audience. Social contribution ~4 logged, useful, moderate social contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 20:56, 15 October 2024 (UTC)