Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2024/Oxytocin and motivation

Topic development feedback

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1. Title The title and sub-title are correctly worded and formatted 2. Headings Promising 3-level heading structure. Meaningful headings clearly relate directly to the core topic. The focus seems to be mostly O rather than M. Place more emphasis on O -> M. Sex and relationships can be very useful examples, but note that they are not topic per se Adopt closer alignment between sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings 3. Overview Excellent – Scenario, image, evocative description of the problem/topic, and focus questions Very good OK Basic Insufficient Does this section include genAI content? If so, it needs to be acknowledged as such in the edit summaries, otherwise it violates academic integrity. Hasn't been developed – Needs scenario, image, evocative description of the problem/topic, and focus questions Add an image to the scenario to help attract reader interest Description needs expansion Closer alignment between the sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings is recommended 4. Key points Promising development of key points for each section The main area for potential improvement is to provide more higher-level conceptual review of O and M (along the lines of the focus questions) rather than overemphasis on sex/relationships Excellent use of citations Strive for an integrated balance of the best psychological theory and research about this topic, with practical examples For sections which include sub-sections, include the key points for an overview paragraph prior to branching into the sub-headings Avoid providing too much background information. Aim to briefly summarise general concepts and provide internal links to relevant book chapters and/or Wikipedia pages for further information. Then focus most of the content on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title. Conclusion is underway 5. Figure One or more relevant figure(s) presented and captioned The figure caption(s) could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text Check and correct figure numbering Figure(s) are cited at least once in the main text 6. Learning feature Excellent use of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Basic use of scenario/example/case study Promising use of quiz question(s) Focus the quiz question(s) on the take-home messages for each focus question Also consider using one or more tables to summarise key information 7. References OK Well done on identifying relevant systematic reviews and/or meta-analyses Move non-academic / non-peer reviewed sources to External links Check and correct APA referencing style: capitalisation doi formatting Remember that the goal is to identify and use the best academic theory and research about this topic 8. Resources See also Very good Use alphabetical order External links Very good Use sentence casing Use alphabetical order 9. User page Used effectively Excellent description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. A link to the book chapter is provided 10. Social contribution One out of three types of contributions made with with direct link(s) to evidence. The other types of contribution are making: direct improvements to other chapters (past or current) comments on the talk pages of other chapters (past or current) posts about the unit or project on other platforms such as the UCLearn discussion forum or on X using the #emot24 If you fix something, remove the corresponding tag (example)

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:39, 2 September 2024 (UTC)

Oxytocin - the love hormone

I think its really good you've included the role oxytocin has in birth and so it ensures a mother won't abandon her child. Annabelle Taylor (discuss • contribs) 00:59, 17 September 2024 (UTC)

Suggestion to better adhere to book chapter marking criteria

Hello! Your chapter is looking really great so far! I just noticed towards the end in your 'external links' section that the titles did not use sentence casing. Maybe just double check this, but I am fairly sure sentencing casing is required for this section. All the best with the rest of your chapter, I can't wait to read it! --U3237728 (discuss • contribs) 14:19, 6 October 2024 (UTC)

Multimedia presentation feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent presentation Overview The opening clearly conveys the purpose of the presentation Create an engaging introduction to hook audience interest (e.g., through an example) Establish a context for the presentation (e.g., use an example or explain importance) Focus questions and/or an outline of topics are presented Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation addresses the topic An appropriate amount of content is presented — not too much or too little The presentation makes very good use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes very good use of relevant psychological research The presentation makes excellent use of citations to support claims The presentation makes very good use of examples The presentation provides good practical advice The presentation provides easy to understand information Conclusion The conclusion provides an excellent/very good/good/reasonably good/basic summary of the most relevant psychological theory and research about this topic The conclusion provides excellent/very good/good/reasonably good/basic take-home message(s) Provide a conclusion which summarises the most relevant psychological theory and research about this topic, with take-home messages for each focus question Audio The audio is easy to follow and interesting to listen to The presentation makes effective use of narrated audio Audio communication is well-paced Excellent intonation The narration is well practiced and/or performed Audio recording quality was excellent The narrated content is well matched to the target topic Video Overall, visual display quality is excellent The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read The amount of text presented per slide makes it reasonably easy to read and listen at the same time The amount of text presented on one or more slides could be reduced to make it easier to read and listen at the same time The visual communication could be improved by including relevant images and/or diagrams The presentation is well produced using simple tools The visual content is well matched to the target topic Meta-data The correct title and sub-title (or an abbreviation to fit within the 100 character limit) are used in the name of the presentation — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation Provide a written description of the presentation to help potential viewers Links to and from the book chapter are provided An inactive hyperlink to the book chapter is provided (maybe because the YouTube user account doesn't have advanced features) A link from the book chapter is provided Licensing A copyright license for the presentation is in the description but not in the license field

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:41, 10 November 2024 (UTC)

Book chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent chapter. It successfully uses psychological theory and research to address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. Excellent use of academic, peer-reviewed citations to support claims Under the maximum word count, so there is room to expand This chapter "beats around the bush" before directly tackling the target topic For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Well developed Engages reader via a case study or scenario in a feature box; also include a relevant image Clearly explains the psychological problem or phenomenon The focus questions are clear and relevant Theory An excellent range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained Could be more focused on the O-M relationship and provide less background information Builds very well well on other chapters and Wikipedia articles Insightful depth is provided about relevant theory(ies) Good use of tables, figures, and/or lists to help clearly convey key theoretical information Key citations are well used Very good use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts Research Very good review of relevant research More detail about key studies would be ideal Any systematic reviews or meta-analyses in this area? Reasonably good critical thinking about relevant research is evident Integration Very good integration between theory and research Insufficient integration with chapters Conclusion Excellent summary and conclusion Key points are well summarised Address the focus questions Add practical, take-home message(s) Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is excellent Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). Instead: it is, most often, not needed at all, or use section linking Layout Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading – use 0 or 2+ sub-headings APA style Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used ... as slang, or as an invented or coined expression" (APA Style 7th ed., 2020, p. 159) Figures Reasonably well captioned Use this format for captions: Figure X. Descriptive caption goes here in sentence casing. See example. Refer to each Figure at least once within the main text using APA style (e.g., "(see Figure 1)") Citations use excellent APA style (7th ed.) Move embedded citations/links to non-peer reviewed sources into the External links section; only cite peer-reviewed sources References use very good APA style: Check and correct use of capitalisation[1] Move non-peer reviewed sources into the External links section Learning features Excellent use of learning features Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Very good use of figure(s) No use of table(s) Very good use of feature box(es) Very good use of scenarios, case studies, or examples Reasonably good use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s) Excellent use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Excellent use of external links in the "External links" section Use sentence casing Social contribution ~ logged, useful, mostly minor/moderate/major contributions with direct links to evidence Thanks very much for your extensive contributions ~ logged contributions without direct links to evidence, so unable to easily verify and assess. See tutorials for guidance about how to get direct links to evidence. Contributions made across three platforms Use a numbered list per Tutorial 02 No logged contributions

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:24, 24 November 2024 (UTC)