Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2024/Lucid dream facilitation

Heading casing

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Hi ShamusBrodie. FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example:

Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory

Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:26, 20 August 2024 (UTC)Reply


Topic development feedback

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The topic development submission has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is below, plus see the general feedback page. Please also check the page history for changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Marks are available via UCLearn. Marks are based on the latest version before the due date.

 
  1. The title and/or sub-title were not correctly worded and/or formatted (fixed)
  1. See earlier comment about Heading casing
  2. Promising 2-level heading structure – could benefit from further development and/or refinement
  3. The planned headings seemed to be structured around single citations; instead provide synthesis and integration across the best psychological science on this topic
  4. Remove acronym#Noun|acronyms from headings
  5. Remove citations from headings
  6. Remove trailing colons from headings
  7. Use default heading formatting (i.e., avoid bold, italics, underline, changing the size etc.)
  8. Adopt closer alignment between sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings
  9. Usually an "Introduction" section isn't necessary because the Overview should do this job and, if there is additional detail, consider using more more descriptive heading(s)
  1. Does this section include genAI content? If so, it needs to be acknowledged as such in the edit summaries, otherwise it violates academic integrity.
  2. Move the scenario or case study into a feature box (with an image) to the start of this section to help catch reader interest
  3. A brief, evocative description of the problem/topic is planned
  4. Closer alignment between the sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings is recommended
  5. Present focus questions in a feature box at the end of this section
  1. Promising development of key points for each section
  2. Does this plan include genAI content? If so, it needs to be acknowledged as such in the edit summaries, otherwise it violates academic integrity.
  3. Good use of citations
  4. Strive for an integrated balance of the best psychological theory and research about this topic, with practical examples
  5. Conclusion (the most important section) hasn't been developed
  6. What might the take-home, practical messages be? (What are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions?)
  1. One or more relevant figure(s) presented and captioned
  2. The figure caption(s) could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text
  3. Figure(s) are cited at least once in the main text
  4. Well done on creating and uploading your own image!   – this can also be listed as a social contribution
  1. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters (see Tutorial 2)
  2. Consider use of one or more scenarios/examples/case studies
  3. Promising use of quiz question(s)
  4. Focus quiz question(s) on the take-home messages
  5. Also consider using one or more tables to summarise key information
  6. Consider including more examples/case studies, quiz question(s), table(s) etc.
  1. OK. Proofreading and correction needed.
  2. Are there any systematic reviews about this topic?
  3. Only include references which have been accessed and read
  4. Check and correct APA referencing style:
  5. Move non-peer-reviewed sources to external links
    1. Include volume and issue numbers
    2. make doi hyperlinks active (i.e., clickable)
  6. Remember that the goal is to identify and use the best academic theory and research about this topic
  1. See also
    1. OK
    2. Use sentence casing
    3. Include source in brackets after link (e.g., (Wikipedia) or (Book chapter, year) for Wikiversity book chapters)
    4. Use alphabetical order
  2. External links
    1. OK
    2. Use sentence casing
    3. Include source in brackets after link
    4. Use alphabetical order
  1. Basic
  2. Very brief description about self – consider expanding
  3. Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.
  4. A link to the book chapter is provided
  5. Rename the link to the book chapter to make it more user-friendly (see Tutorial 02)
  1. One out of three types of contributions made with with direct link(s) to evidence. The other types of contribution are making:

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:38, 2 September 2024 (UTC)Reply

Book chapter review and feedback

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This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Chapter marks will be available via UCLearn along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.

 

Overall

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  1. Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient chapter
  2. The main area for potential improvement is greater reliance on your own reading and writing and less on genAI content
  3. Basic use of academic, peer-reviewed citations to support claims; in some places, better use could be made of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the [factual?] tags)
  4. Under the maximum word count, so there is room to expand
  5. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits
  1. Basic
  2. Sub-headings removed
  3. Lacks development
  4. Engage reader via a case study or scenario in a feature box with a relevant image
  5. Briefly explains the psychological problem or phenomenon; provide more detail
  6. Reads like poorly written genAI material
  7. The focus questions are clear
  1. A good range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained
  2. Builds somewhat on other chapters and/or Wikipedia articles
  3. Reasonably good depth is provided about relevant theory(ies)
  4. Use more tables, figures, and/or lists to help convey key theoretical information
  5. In some places, there is insufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the [factual?] tags)
  6. Basic use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts
  1. Basic review of relevant research
  2. More detail about key studies would be ideal
  3. Any systematic reviews or meta-analyses in this area?
  4. In some places, there is insufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the [factual?] tags)
  5. Insufficient critical thinking about relevant research is evident
  6. Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by:
    1. describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies
    2. considering the strength of relationships
    3. acknowledging limitations
    4. pointing out critiques/counterarguments
    5. suggesting specific directions for future research
  7. Some claims lack sufficient citation (e.g., see the [factual?] tags)
  1. Basic integration between theory and research
  1. Basic summary and conclusion
  2. Reads like generic genAI content
  3. Add practical, take-home message(s)
  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the quality of written expression is OK but there are aspects which are below professional standard
    2. Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes
  2. Layout
    1. The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections
    2. The structure may be overly complicated (i.e., too many sections overall)
    3. Include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections (see [Provide more detail] tags)
    4. Use the default heading style (e.g., remove additional italics, bold, and/or change in font size)
  3. APA style
    1. Use sentence casing for the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc.
    2. Direct quotes need page numbers – even better, communicate about concepts in your own words
    3. Figures
      1. Briefly captioned; provide more detail to help connect the figure to the text
      2. Use this format for captions: Figure X. Descriptive caption goes here in sentence casing. See example.
      3. Refer to the Figure in a more relevant way in the main text using APA style
    4. Citations use excellent APA style (7th ed.)
    5. References use very good APA style:
      1. Check and correct use of italicisation
  1. Basic use of learning features
  2. Reasonably good use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text even more interactive. See example.
  3. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
  4. Basic use of figure(s)
  5. No use of table(s)
  6. Good use of feature box(es)
  7. Basic use of scenarios, case studies, or examples
  8. Very good use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s)
  9. Basic use of interwiki links in the "See also" section
    1. Use alphabetical order
    2. Include sources in parentheses after the link
    3. Add more links
  10. Insufficient use of external links in the "External links" section
    1. Include sources in parentheses after the link
    2. ChatGPT link broken (removed). See genAI guidelines for how to use and acknowledge.
    3. Add more links
  1. ~4 logged, useful, mostly minor contributions with direct links to evidence
  2. Thanks for the useful image upload

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:06, 30 October 2024 (UTC)Reply

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