Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2024/Learned industriousness and motivation

Topic development feedback

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1. Title The title and sub-title are correctly worded and formatted 2. Headings Excellent – Well developed 1-level heading structure. Meaningful headings clearly relate directly to the core topic. Consider expanding to a 2-level heading structure, with sub-headings Very good alignment between sub-title, focus questions, and heading structure, but there may be room for improvement Aim for 3 to 6 top-level headings between the Overview and Conclusion, with up to a similar number of sub-headings for large sections 3. Overview Very good Move the scenario or case study into a feature box (with an image) to the start of this section to help catch reader interest A brief, evocative description of the problem/topic is planned Focus questions are aligned with sub-title and top-level headings Open-ended focus questions are usually better than closed-ended (e.g., yes/no) questions 4. Key points Promising development of key points for each section Excellent use of citations Promising balance of theory and research Use APA style 7th edition for citations (e.g., do not include author initials) Conclusion (the most important section) hasn't been developed What might the take-home, practical messages be? (What are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions?) 5. Figure One or more relevant figure(s) presented and captioned The figure caption(s) could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text Figure(s) are cited at least once in the main text 6. Learning feature Add in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters (see Tutorial 2) Promising use of one or more scenarios/examples/case studies Excellent use of quiz question(s) Also consider using one or more tables to summarise key information 7. References OK Are there any systematic reviews about this topic? Only include references which have been accessed and read Check and correct APA referencing style: alphabetical order capitalisation italicisation use dois instead of other reference numbers remove publisher location check formatting of author initials provide full journal titles 8. Resources See also Excellent External links Very good Use sentence casing Use alphabetical order 9. User page Excellent – used effectively Excellent description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. A link to the book chapter is provided 10. Social contribution Excellent – at least three different types of contributions with direct link(s) to evidence To add direct links to evidence of Wikiversity comments: view the talk page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and paste the comparison URL on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:55, 2 September 2024 (UTC)

Book chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a very good chapter. It makes very good use of psychological theory and research to address a real-world phenomenon or problem. Very good use of academic, peer-reviewed citations to support claims In some places, better use could be made of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the tags) Under the maximum word count, so there is room to expand For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Reasonably good Engages reader via a case study or scenario in a feature box; also include a relevant image (fixed) Briefly explains the problem or phenomenon Explain the problem or phenomenon in more detail Basic focus questions Use open-ended rather than closed-ended focus questions Use bullet points (fixed) Theory A very good range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained Builds somewhat on Wikipedia articles; to improve the chapter, build more strongly on other Wikipedia articles related book chapters by including more embedded links for key terms Very good depth is provided about relevant theory(ies) Use tables, figures, and/or lists to help convey key theoretical information Key citations are well used Excellent use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts Research Very good review of relevant research Any systematic reviews or meta-analyses in this area? Very good critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Some claims lack sufficient citation (e.g., see the tags) Integration Excellent integration between theory and research Conclusion Excellent summary and conclusion Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is very good Develop some of the bullet point statements into full sentences and paragraphs Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes Layout The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections Consider using sub-headings Grammar The grammar for some/many sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags) Consider using a grammar checking tool Another option is to use a services provided by UC, such as Studiosity Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance Check and make correct use of commas APA style Use serial commas[2]. Video (1 min) Figures Reasonably well captioned; provide more detail to help connect the figure to the text Refer to each Figure using APA style (e.g., "(see Figure 1)"; do not use bold, italics, check and correct capitalisation) Citations use very good APA style (7th ed.). To improve: List multiple citations in alphabetical order by first author surname References use reasonably good APA style: Check and correct use of capitalisation Check and correct use of italicisation Remove publisher locations Include full journal titles Learning features Very good use of learning features Basic use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text even more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Good use of image(s) No use of table(s) Very good use of feature box(es) Excellent use of case studies or examples Reasonably good use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s) Excellent use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Basic use of external links in the "External links" section Use sentence casing Include sources in parentheses after the link Social contribution ~11 logged, useful, mostly minor to moderate/major social contributions with some direct and some indirect links to evidence Indirect links were ignored for marking purposes

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:27, 26 October 2024 (UTC)

Multimedia presentation feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's UCLearn site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

Overall Overall, this is an insufficient presentation mainly because it stops at ~50 seconds Overview The opening conveys the purpose of the presentation in a basic way The presentation has a basic introduction to engage audience interest A basic context for the presentation is established Consider asking focus questions to help focus and discipline the presentation Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation does not adequately address the topic The presentation makes insufficient use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes insufficient use of relevant psychological research The presentation makes insufficient use of citations to support claims Use APA style for citations The presentation makes insufficient use of one or more examples The presentation could be improved by providing practical advice Conclusion Provide a conclusion which summarises the most relevant psychological theory and research about this topic, with take-home messages for each focus question Audio The presentation makes insufficient use of narrated audio Audio communication is well-paced Basic intonation The narration could benefit from re-recording, further scripting, and/or practice Audio recording quality was poor (stops around 50 seconds) The narrated content lacked synthesis of the best psychological theory and research about this topic Video Overall, visual display quality is excellent/very good/good/reasonably good/basic The presentation makes basic use of webcam with no text- or visual-based information The visual content lacked synthesis of the best psychological theory and research about this topic Meta-data The correct title is used, but the sub-title (or a shortened version of it) is not used, as the name of the presentation. This would help to convey the purpose of the presentation and be consistent. A very brief written description of the presentation is provided. Expand. An inactive hyperlink to the book chapter is provided (maybe because the YouTube user account doesn't have advanced features) A link from the book chapter is provided Licensing A copyright license for the presentation is not clearly indicated

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:36, 9 November 2024 (UTC)