Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2024/Inner voice and emotion

Topic development feedback

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1. Title The title and sub-title are correctly worded and formatted 2. Headings Promising 2-level heading structure – could benefit from further development Refine the structure to remove repetition / provide more specific/distinct headings Remove heading for focus questions (incorporate into Overview) Adopt closer alignment between the sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings Avoid having sections with only 1 sub-heading – use 0 or 2+ sub-headings 3. Overview Move the scenario or case study into a feature box (with an image) to the start of this section to help catch reader interest Abbreviate the scenario (or split and distribute in more than one feature box throughout the chapter) A brief, evocative description of the problem/topic is provided Present focus questions in a feature box at the end of this section Closer alignment between the sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings is recommended Open-ended focus questions are usually better than closed-ended (e.g., yes/no) questions 4. Key points Promising development of key points for each section, with relevant citations Strive for an integrated balance of the best psychological theory and research about this topic, with practical examples Use APA style 7th edition for citations with three or more authors (i.e., FirstAuthor et al., year) Conclusion (the most important section): Underway What might the take-home, practical messages be? (What are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions?) 5. Figure A relevant figure is presented and captioned The Figure 1 caption provides a clear, appropriately detailed description that is meaningfully connected with the main text Cite each figure at least once in the main text using APA style 6. Learning feature One use of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Promising use of example(s)/case study(ies) Focus the quiz question(s) on the take-home messages for each focus question Also consider using one or more tables to summarise key information 7. References Very good Are there any systematic reviews about this topic? Check and correct APA referencing style: capitalisation 8. Resources See also Excellent External links Excellent 9. User page Good Brief description about self – consider expanding Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. A link to the book chapter is provided 10. Social contribution One out of three types of contributions made with with direct link(s) to evidence The other types of contribution are making: comments on chapters (past or current) posts about the unit or project on other platforms Use a numbered list (see Tutorial 02)

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:16, 19 August 2024 (UTC)

Hi StephenBlume your book chapter is shaping up well, especially with its practical focus on how self-talk impacts emotions. Here are some of my feedback points:

The introductory cliffside hiking scenario powerfully captures attention and demonstrates how inner conversation may influence emotions in real time. However, while the beginning scenario is interesting, there is some confusion as the narrative alternates between positive and negative inner voices. It may be useful to consider breaking the process down into smaller, more manageable segments.

Your structure is clear, you break down the numerous parts of the inner voice and its relationship to emotions, making the information easier to understand.

Overall, this chapter is off to a strong start. Best of luck and I cannot wait to see the final result! - U3236641 --U3236641 (discuss • contribs) 12:04, 3 October 2024 (UTC)

Multimedia presentation feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a basic presentation Overview The opening conveys the purpose of the presentation in a basic way Create an engaging introduction to hook audience interest (e.g., through an example) Establish a context for the presentation (e.g., use an example) Consider asking focus questions to help focus and discipline the presentation Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation addresses/somewhat addresses/does not adequately address the topic An appropriate amount of content is presented — not too much or too little The presentation makes very good use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes basic use of relevant psychological research The presentation makes excellent/very good/good/reasonably good/basic/insufficient/no use of citations to support claims The presentation makes basic use of examples The presentation provides basic practical advice The presentation provides easy to understand information Provide easy to understand information Conclusion The conclusion provides a good summary of the most relevant psychological theory and research about this topic The conclusion provides basic take-home message(s) Audio The audio is easy to follow The presentation makes reasonably good use of narrated audio Audio communication is well-paced Reasonably good intonation The narration is reasonably well practiced and/or performed Audio recording quality was good It sounded like there was a faint beep in the background every now and then? The narrated content is well matched to the target topic Video Overall, visual display quality is reasonably good The presentation makes basic use of text-based slides The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read Consider increasing line spacing to make the text easier to read Different font types are used (consistency) Direct quotes need page numbers The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time The visual communication could be improved by including relevant images and/or diagrams The presentation is basically produced using simple tools The visual content is well matched to the target topic Meta-data The correct title and sub-title (or an abbreviation to fit within the 100 character limit) are used in the name of the presentation — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation A very brief written description of the presentation is provided. Expand. A link to the book chapter is not provided A link from the book chapter is provided Licensing A copyright license for the presentation is not clearly indicated

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:22, 10 November 2024 (UTC)