Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2024/Inner talk in achieving high performance

Suggestions

Hi Oscar,

Great topic and first scenario. Not sure why the image isn't displaying properly I had a quick look and everything seems ok. I inserted the same image I could see you tried to put in above your overview box.

I really like the focus questions that you have but I think the 3rd and 4th are going to a similar point being; how do you create positive self talk and how can you maintain it to your benefit?

You've gone straight for sports which is definitely what I would do. Perhaps it would be worth your while checking out other industries/ areas where there is high pressure in business, govt. or military?

I've been in the high performance sport area getting on for 10 years now so if you wanted to chat I'd be happy to.

Good luck.

Ari --Ubaldo111 (discuss • contribs) 07:31, 30 August 2024 (UTC)

Hey!, I found a source that might be useful for chapter if you would like to use it. https://doi.org/10.1002/ejsp.2048 U3230258 (discuss • contribs) 22:05, 15 August 2024 (UTC)

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-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:51, 2 September 2024 (UTC)

General feedback

Hey!

Here are some suggestions for your chapter:

The introduction with Michael Jordan’s “Flu Game” is a great hook. Clearly explain why inner dialogue is important and how it relates to high performance to help readers understand its significance.

For the focus questions, ensure they are clear and directly related to the content. For example, ask, “What are the different types of inner talk, and how do they impact motivation and performance?” This will guide the reader through the chapter. U3219927 (discuss • contribs) 11:41, 6 October 2024 (UTC)

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-- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:58, 10 November 2024 (UTC)

Heading casing

FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:00, 26 November 2024 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a very good to excellent chapter. It makes very good use of psychological theory and research to address a real-world phenomenon or problem. Very good use of academic, peer-reviewed citations to support claims Over the maximum word count. Content beyond 4,000 words has been ignored for marking purposes. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Very good Engaging case study or scenario in a feature box with a relevant image Clearly explains the psychological problem or phenomenon The focus questions are excellent Theory An excellent range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained Builds on two previous chapters and/or Wikipedia articles Insightful depth is provided about relevant theory(ies) Promising use of tables, figures, and/or lists to help clearly convey key theoretical information Key citations are well used Excellent use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts Research Excellent review of relevant research Reasonably good critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Integration Excellent integration between theory and research Conclusion Very good summary and conclusion There is some excessive, over the word count key point material Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is very good Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes Layout The structure is overly complicated; aim for 3 to 6 top-level headings between the Introduction and Conclusion Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading – use 0 or 2+ sub-headings See earlier comments about heading casing Include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections (see tags) Grammar Check and correct use of affect vs. effect APA style Use sentence casing for the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc. Use serial commas[2][3] Figures Briefly captioned; provide more detail to help connect the figure to the text Use this format for captions: Figure X. Descriptive caption goes here in sentence casing. See example. Tables Use APA style for captions (see example) Refer to each Table using APA style (e.g., do not use bold, talics, check and correct capitalisation) Citations use very good APA Style (7th ed.): Use ampersand (&) inside parentheses and "and" outside parentheses References use reasonably good APA style: Check and correct use of capitalisation[4] Include hyperlinked dois (fixed) Use hanging indent (fixed) Learning features Reasonably good use of learning features One use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text even more interactive. See example. One use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Basic use of figure(s) Basic use of table(s) Basic use of feature box(es) Excellent use of scenarios, case studies, or examples Very good use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s) Use the quiz tool to improve plain text quiz questions and make them more interactive Insufficient use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Include sources in parentheses after the link Add more links Basic use of external links in the "External links" section Use sentence casing Use alphabetical order Add more links Social contribution No logged contributions

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:00, 26 November 2024 (UTC)