Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2024/Goals and emotion

Initial suggestions

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@U3236641: Thanks for tackling this topic. Some initial suggestions:

Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:20, 11 August 2024 (UTC)Reply

Heading casing

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Hi U3236641. FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example:

Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory

Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:34, 15 August 2024 (UTC)Reply


Topic development feedback

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  1. The sub-title did not match with the list of topics, but I like your sub-title better so have changed the list of topics
  1. Basic, 1-level heading structure – could benefit from further development, perhaps using a 2-level structure
  2. Good alignment between focus questions and heading structure
  1. Add a scenario or case study in a feature box (with an image) at the start of this section to help catch reader interest
  2. Simplify/abbreviate the description of the problem/topic to make it more user-friendly. Move detail into subsequent sections.
  3. Focus questions are aligned with sub-title and top-level headings
  1. Promising development of key points for each section, with relevant citations
  2. Avoid providing too much background information. Aim to briefly summarise general concepts and provide internal links to relevant book chapters and/or Wikipedia pages for further information. Then focus most of the content on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title.
  3. No development
  4. Strive for an integrated balance of the best psychological theory and research about this topic, with practical examples
  5. Conclusion (the most important section):
    1. Hasn't been developed
  1. One or more relevant figure(s) is/are presented
  2. The figure caption(s) provide(s) a clear, appropriately detailed description that is meaningfully connected with the main text
  3. Cite each figure at least once in the main text using APA style (e.g., see Figure 1)
  1. One use of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters
  2. Consider use of one or more scenarios/examples/case studies
  3. Consider including one or more quiz question(s) about the take-home messages
  4. Also consider using one or more tables to summarise key information
  1. Very good
  2. Are there any systematic reviews about this topic?
  3. Check and correct APA referencing style:
    1. capitalisation
    2. make doi hyperlinks active (i.e., clickable)
  1. See also
    1. Not developed – needs work (see Tutorial 2)
  2. External links
    1. Not developed – needs work (see Tutorial 2)
  1. Used effectively
  2. Excellent description about self provided
  3. Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.
  4. A link to the book chapter is provided
  1. Two out of three types of contributions made with with indirect link(s) to evidence. The other type of contribution is making:
    1. comments on the talk pages of other chapters (past or current)
  2. To add direct links to evidence: view the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and paste the comparison URL on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:07, 25 August 2024 (UTC)Reply

Book chapter review and feedback

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Overall

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  1. Overall, this is an excellent chapter. It successfully uses psychological theory and research to address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem.
  2. Excellent use of academic, peer-reviewed citations to support claims
  3. Move embedded external links to academic articles into the References section, include links as dois, and provide APA style citation to the article in the main body text
  4. Move embedded non-peer-reviewed links into the External links section
  5. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits
  1. Well developed
  2. Engages reader via a case study or scenario in a feature box with a relevant image
  3. Decrease image size (fixed)
  4. Clearly explains the problem or phenomenon
  5. Clear focus questions
  6. Use bullet-points (fixed)
  1. An excellent range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained
  2. Reduce general theoretical background (e.g., about goal theory). Instead, summarise and link to related resources (i.e., other book chapters and/or Wikipedia articles). Increase emphasis on substantive aspects of theory that relate directly to the specific topic (i.e., the sub-title question).
  3. Builds effectively on related chapters and Wikipedia articles
  4. Insightful depth is provided about relevant theory(ies)
  5. Effective use of tables, figures, and/or lists to help clearly convey key theoretical information
  6. Key citations are well used
  7. The Reeve (2018) textbook is overused as a citation – instead, use primary, peer-reviewed sources
  8. Very good use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts
  1. Excellent review of relevant research
  2. Basic critical thinking about relevant research is evident
  3. Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by:
    1. describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies
    2. considering the strength of relationships
    3. acknowledging limitations
    4. pointing out critiques/counterarguments
    5. suggesting specific directions for future research
  1. Excellent integration between theory and research
  1. Excellent summary and conclusion
  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the quality of written expression is very good
  2. Proofreading
    1. More proofreading is needed (e.g., fix punctuation and typographical errors) to bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard
  3. APA style
    1. Use sentence casing for the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc.
    2. Use serial commas[1]. Video (1 min)
    3. Figures
      1. Well captioned
      2. Use this format for captions: Figure X. Descriptive caption in sentence casing. See example
      3. Refer to each Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1)
    4. Tables
      1. Table captions use APA style or wiki style
      2. Refer to each Table at least once within the main text (e.g., see Table 1)
    5. Citations use very good APA style (7th ed.). To improve:
      1. Use ampersand (&) inside parentheses and "and" outside parentheses
    6. References use reasonably good APA style:
      1. Check and correct use of capitalisation[2]
      2. Check and correct use of italicisation
  1. Excellent use of learning features
  2. Good use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text even more interactive. See example.
  3. One use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
  4. Reasonably good use of image(s)
  5. Very good use of table(s)
  6. Basic use of feature box(es)
  7. Good use of case studies or examples
  8. Excellent use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s)
  9. Excellent use of interwiki links in the "See also" section
  10. Excellent use of external links in the "External links" section
  1. ~10 logged, useful, mostly moderate/major social contributions with mostly direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:44, 26 October 2024 (UTC)Reply


Multimedia presentation feedback

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Overall

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  1. Overall, this is a basic presentation
  1. The opening slide
    1. Displays the title — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation
    2. Displays the sub-title — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation
    3. Does not narrate the title — this would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation
    4. Narrates the sub-title — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation
  2. Create an engaging introduction to hook audience interest
  3. Establish a context for the presentation (e.g., use an example or explain importance)
  4. Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation.
  1. Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section
  2. The presentation somewhat addresses the topic
  3. The content is focused on goal setting theory in a general sense rather than concentrating on the relationship between between goals and emotion
  4. There is an overreliance on textbook material rather than primary, peer-reviewed sources
  5. An appropriate amount of content is presented — not too much or too little
  6. The presentation makes reasonably good use of relevant psychological theory
  7. The presentation makes basic use of relevant psychological research
  8. The presentation makes excellent use of citations to support claims
  9. The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples or case studies
  10. The presentation provides practical advice
  11. The presentation provides easy to understand information
  1. The conclusion provides a basic summary of the most relevant psychological theory and research about this topic
  1. The audio is easy to follow
  2. The presentation makes reasonably good use of narrated audio
  3. Audio communication is well-paced
  4. Reasonably good intonation
  5. The narration is well practiced and/or performed
  6. Audio recording quality was reasonably good
  7. Recording volume was low
  8. Review microphone set-up to achieve higher recording quality
  9. The narrated content is reasonably well matched to the target topic
  1. Overall, visual display quality is reasonably good
  2. The presentation makes reasonably good use of text and image based slides
  3. The font size is mostly sufficiently large to make it easy to read
  4. Some of the font size could be larger to make it easier to read
  5. The amount of text presented per slide (for some slides) could be reduced to make it easier to read and listen at the same time
  6. The visual communication is supplemented in a basic way by relevant images and/or diagrams
  7. The presentation is well produced using simple tools
  8. Hide the audio icon
  9. The visual content is reasonably well matched to the target topic
  1. The correct title and sub-title (or an abbreviation to fit within the 100 character limit) are used in the name of the presentation — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation
  2. A good written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding.
  3. An inactive hyperlink to the book chapter is provided (maybe because the YouTube user account doesn't have advanced features)
  4. A link from the book chapter is provided
  5. The presentation is incorrectly categorised as being for kids. This creates limitations, such as being unable to add the presentation to a playlist. More info.
  1. Image sources and their copyright status are not clearly indicated
  2. A copyright license for the presentation is clearly indicated

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:52, 6 November 2024 (UTC)Reply

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