Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2024/Empathy versus sympathy

Empathy, sympathy and compassion - social contribution

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Hi there,

I found this article that may be useful for your Book Chapter. It includes includes the connection between empathy and sympathy as included in your Book Chapter, as well as compassion, which I thought could make an interesting subheading. I thought this because compassion appears to be closely related with empathy adn sympathy. The interconnection between them all was something I enjoyed reading about.

See link:https://www.ncbi.nlm.nih.gov/pmc/articles/PMC5405806/ U3236421 (discusscontribs) 07:19, 14 August 2024 (UTC)Reply

Hi, thank you for your assistance. :) U3236683 (discusscontribs) 02:08, 16 August 2024 (UTC)Reply

Heading casing

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Hi U3236683. FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example:

Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory

Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:17, 5 October 2024 (UTC)Reply

Images and case studies

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Hello, I've read through your book chapter so far, and you have lots of interesting information. One thing I noticed is that the case studies throughout the chapter are a bit hard to spot. Using a coloured text box would be a great way to draw the reader's eye to your case study examples. Another thing I would recommend is including some more images throughout your chapter. This gives the reader visuals to refer to when reading each section and can make your chapter a bit more colourful. Good luck with the rest of your chapter! --U3236447 (discusscontribs) 03:24, 2 October 2024 (UTC)Reply


Topic development feedback

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  1. The title and sub-title are correctly worded and formatted
  1. See earlier comment about Heading casing
  2. Overly complicated 3-level structure – consider simplifying
  3. Many of the headings are overly long
  4. Adopt closer alignment between sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings
  5. Aim for 3 to 6 top-level headings between the Overview and Conclusion, with up to a similar number of sub-headings for large sections
  1. Excellent - Scenario, image, evocative description of the problem/topic, relevant psychological theory/research, and focus questions
  2. Move the scenario or case study into a feature box (with an image) to the start of this section to help catch reader interest
  3. Add a brief, evocative description of the problem/topic
  4. Present focus questions in a feature box at the end of this section
  1. Promising development of key points for each section, with relevant citations
  2. Strive for an integrated balance of the best psychological theory and research about this topic, with practical examples
  3. Direct quotes need page numbers (APA style) – even better, write in your own words
  4. Conclusion (the most important section):
    1. Hasn't been developed
  1. One or more relevant figure(s) is/are presented and captioned
  2. The figure caption(s) could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text
  3. Cite each figure at least once in the main text using APA style (e.g., see Figure 1)
  1. Promising use of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters
  2. Excellent use of one or more scenarios/examples/case studies
  3. Consider including one or more quiz question(s) about the take-home messages
  4. Excellent use of one or more tables
  1. OK
  2. Are there any systematic reviews about this topic?
  3. All references need to be cited in the text
  4. Only include references which have been accessed and read
  5. Check and correct APA referencing style:
    1. alphabetical order
    2. capitalisation
    3. italicisation
    4. make doi hyperlinks active (i.e., clickable)
  6. Use APA style or wiki referencing style, but not both. Currently, a mixture of referencing styles is used.
  1. See also
    1. Not developed – needs work (see Tutorial 2)
  2. External links
    1. Not developed – needs work (see Tutorial 2)
  1. Very good
  2. Description about self provided
  3. Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.
  4. A link to the book chapter is provided
  1. Good – two out of three types of contributions made with with direct link(s) to evidence. The other type of contribution is making:
    1. direct improvements to other chapters (past or current)

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:19, 26 August 2024 (UTC)Reply

Book chapter review and feedback

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Overall

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  1. Overall, this is a reasonably good chapter. It makes good use of psychological theory and some use of research to address a real-world phenomenon or problem.
  2. Reasonably good use of academic, peer-reviewed citations to support claims
  3. Over the maximum word count. The content beyond 4,000 words has been ignored for marking purposes.
  4. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits
  1. Underdeveloped
  2. Engages reader via a case study or scenario in a feature box with a relevant image
  3. Consider giving the people in the scenario names rather than A and B
  4. Overly complex; Simplify the scenario into a single feature box, with a title and an image; move detail into subsequent sections
  5. Explain the psychological problem or phenomenon
  6. Provide focus questions in a feature box to help guide the reader
  1. A very good range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained
  2. Builds effectively on related chapters and Wikipedia articles
  3. Very good depth is provided about relevant theory(ies)
  4. Some content is repetitive
  5. Effective use of tables, figures, and/or lists to help clearly convey key theoretical information
  6. Key citations are well used
  7. Very good use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts
  1. Good review of relevant research
  2. Any systematic reviews or meta-analyses in this area?
  3. Insufficient critical thinking about relevant research is evident
  4. Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by:
    1. describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies
    2. considering the strength of relationships
    3. acknowledging limitations
    4. pointing out critiques/counterarguments
    5. suggesting specific directions for future research
  1. Good integration between theory and research
  1. Over maximum word count, so ignored for marking purposes
  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the quality of written expression is good
    2. Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes
  2. Layout
    1. Bold, colour etc. are overused, making the chapter more difficult to read than if default style was used
    2. Use the default heading style (e.g., remove additional italics and/or bold)
    3. Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading – use 0 or 2+ sub-headings
    4. Some of the standard headings were missing (e.g., External links) and some were incorrect (e.g., Conclusion)
  3. Proofreading
    1. More proofreading is needed (e.g., missing full-stops) to bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard
    2. Remove unnecessary capitalisation (e.g., Empathy -> empathy)
    3. Add required capitalisation (e.g., at the start of sentences, start of sub-titles)
    4. Figures
      1. Reasonably well captioned
      2. Use this format for captions: Figure X. Descriptive caption in sentence casing. See example
      3. Each Figure is referred to at least once within the main text using APA style
      4. Numbering needs correcting
    5. Tables
      1. Add an APA style caption to each table
      2. Refer to each Table at least once within the main text (e.g., see Table 1)
      3. Move the reference into References; just include the citation in the Table note
    6. Citations use excellent APA style (7th ed.)
    7. References are over the maximum word count, so not counted for marking purposes
      1. Check and correct use of italicisation
  1. Very good use of learning features
  2. Very good use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text even more interactive. See example.
  3. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
  4. Good use of image(s)
  5. Very good use of table(s)
  6. Good use of feature box(es)
  7. Very good use of case studies or examples; perhaps could be improved by providing different examples
  8. Excellent use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s)
  9. Over maximum word count, so ignored for marking purposes
  10. Over maximum word count, so ignored for marking purposes
  1. ~13 logged, useful, moderate social contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 20:28, 26 October 2024 (UTC)Reply


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  1. Overall, this is a reasonably good presentation
  2. The presentation is over the maximum time limit — content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking and feedback purposes
  1. The opening slide(s) clearly conveys the purpose of the presentation
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  3. The presentation makes excellent/very good/good/reasonably good/basic/insufficient/no use of relevant psychological theory
  4. The presentation makes reasonably good use of relevant psychological research
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  6. The presentation makes basic use of one or more examples
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  1. Provide a conclusion slide which summarises the most relevant psychological theory and research about this topic, with take-home messages for each focus question
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  3. Audio communication is well-paced
  4. Reasonably good intonation
  5. The narration is reasonably well practiced and/or performed
  6. Audio recording quality was very good
  7. The narrated content is well matched to the target topic
  1. Overall, visual display quality is basic
  2. The presentation makes ebasic use of text and image based slides
  3. The font size is mostly sufficiently large to make it easy to read
  4. Some of the font size could be larger to make it easier to read
  5. Consider using a sans-serif typeface to make the text easier to read
  6. Consider using higher contrast to aid accessibility/visibility
  7. The amount of text presented per slide makes it reasonably easy to read and listen at the same time
  8. The amount of text presented on some slides could be reduced to make it easier to read and listen at the same time
  9. The visual communication is supplemented in a basic way by relevant images and/or diagrams
  10. The presentation is basically produced using simple tools
  11. The visual content is well matched to the target topic
  1. The correct title and sub-title (or an abbreviation to fit within the 100 character limit) are used in the name of the presentation — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation
  2. Provide a written description of the presentation to help potential viewers
  3. A link to the book chapter is not provided
  4. A link from the book chapter is provided
  5. The presentation is incorrectly categorised as being for kids. This creates limitations, such as being unable to add the presentation to a playlist. More info.
  1. Image sources and their copyright status are communicated
  2. Provide clickable links to the image sources (e.g., in the description)
  3. A copyright license for the presentation is in the description but not in the license field

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