Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2024/Ego death

Provide further links to key terms

Hi Dani,

This is very well written and presented very nicely. The images you have chosen fit nicely !I think your chapter could benefit from a few more links to key terms e.g. dissolution, consciousness, mindfulness. I think this would help the reader get more info and further background on these terms.

Kind regards, u3126684

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References incorrectly formatted

Hey @Danikollas:, I was just checking out your references, and they look great, however, there are some minor errors in the formatting, click 'here' to check out APA 7th edition referencing. Also here is one of your references adjusted (Epstein, M. (1988). The deconstruction of the self: Ego and “egolessness” in Buddhist insight meditation. The Journal of Transpersonal Psychology, 20(1), 61–69. Retrieved from https://citeseerx.ist.psu.edu/document?repid=rep1&type=pdf&doi=b9fa967838934c041dffc5ad71f169fbcc70ea82)

Initial suggestions

@Danikollas: Thanks for tackling this topic. Some initial suggestions:

• Check out other related chapters and see how you can build on, link to, and integrate with that work:
  • Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Death
  • Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Ego
  • Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Self
• Also search past book chapters for related topics
• For the topic development, consider:
  • What psychological theory(ies) can help to understand and explain this topic?
  • What is the main research in this area?
• Let me know if I can do anything else to support the development of this chapter.

Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:33, 10 August 2024 (UTC)

Heading casing

Hi Danikollas. FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:34, 10 August 2024 (UTC)

@Danikollas: Just a reminder to use sentence casing for the headings. Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:48, 14 August 2024 (UTC)

Removal of unnecessary headings

Hey, I saw that you still have your key points, learning features, and figures, as headings. I am not sure if this needs to be removed for the topic development or not, maybe worth checking with James. If you remove them and still want to reference back to them, you can click here — Preceding unsigned comment added by [[User:{{{1}}}|{{{1}}}]] ([[User talk:{{{1}}}#top|talk]] • [[Special:Contributions/{{{1}}}|contribs]])

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1. Title The title and sub-title are correctly worded and formatted 2. Headings Excellent – Well developed 2-level heading structure. Meaningful headings clearly relate directly to the core topic. Reasonably good alignment between focus questions and heading structure, but consider closer alignment 3. Overview Excellent - Scenario, image, evocative description of the problem/topic, relevant psychological theory/research, and focus questions A brief, evocative description of the problem/topic is provided Reasonably good alignment between focus questions and heading structure, but consider closer alignment 4. Key points Excellent – key points are well developed for each section, with relevant citations Strive for an integrated balance of the best psychological theory and research about this topic, with practical examples Use APA style 7th edition for citations Is this genAI content? If so, it needs to be acknowledged as such in the edit summaries, otherwise it violates academic integrity. Conclusion (the most important section): Underway What might the take-home, practical messages be? (What are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions?) 5. Figure A relevant figure is presented and captioned Caption could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text Cite each figure at least once in the main text using APA style 6. Learning feature Excellent use of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Promising use of one ore more scenarios/examples/case studies Excellent use of quiz question(s) Excellent use of one or more tables 7. References Excellent Are there any systematic reviews about this topic? Check and correct APA referencing style: capitalisation page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) 8. Resources See also Excellent External links One of two required external links provided Use bullet-points (see Tutorial 02) 9. User page Excellent – used effectively Excellent description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. A link to the book chapter is provided 10. Social contribution Excellent – at least three different types of contributions with direct link(s) to evidence Well done on creating and uploading your own image

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:55, 24 August 2024 (UTC)

Comment

Thanks for your comment on the UC discussion board! I've read through your chapter and found it super interesting! I was wondering if you might find it useful to incorporate in some research on the impact of a near death experience and its effect on the dissolution of the ego - I hope you find this article helpful file:///Users/nicolewilliams/Downloads/brainsci-11-00929.pdf U3235875 (discuss • contribs) 00:34, 26 September 2024 (UTC)

Thank you!! I originally included NDE's but I was way over my word count and there was limited research on it so decided to cut it.

I unfortunately cannot open that link to the pdf either! Are you able to resend at all as I will definitely reconsider and see if it is worthwhile to add the research! Danikollas (discuss • contribs) 06:48, 27 September 2024 (UTC)

Sorry @Danikollasplease try this link! https://doi.org/10.3390/brainsci11070929 U3235875 (discuss • contribs) 01:10, 4 October 2024 (UTC)

Feedback

Hi @Danikollas,

Great work on your chapter so far, I found it very interesting to read. Your opening case study is very engaging but perhaps you could add an internal link to psilocybin in case readers are unsure of what this means. I find it helpful to add these in "edit source" rather than the "edit" mode. Here's a helpful page if you need:https://meta.wikimedia.org/wiki/Help:Interwiki_linking_on_Wikimedia_wikis

Hope this helps and all the best with your chapter! :) U3216883 (discuss • contribs) 00:57, 2 October 2024 (UTC)

Feedback

Hey @Danikollas,

really enjoyed reading through your chapter!

I wanted to offer some feedback surrounding your 5th focus question "What are the ethical consideration and potential risks associated with facilitating ego death"

While the risks were pretty clearly outlined in the criticisms section, I would love to see some discussion surrounding further ethical considerations of the treatment.

If your interested I found a source talking about informed consent and how it should be implemented, along with concerns about how it would impact the treatment itself.

DOI: 10.1136/medethics-2020-106070 U3230258 (discuss • contribs) 20:30, 5 October 2024 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent chapter. It successfully uses psychological theory and research to address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. Reasonably good use of academic, peer-reviewed citations to support claims Use of academic, peer-reviewed citations is lacking in some places (e.g., see the tags) For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Well developed Engages reader via a case study or scenario in a feature box with a relevant image It could be made more obvious how the scenario demonstrates "ego death" Explains the problem or phenomenon in a balanced way See in-text comments for some specific suggestions Promising focus questions I've reworded some of the focus questions for clarity, but retained the intent Theory An excellent range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained Builds reasonably well on related chapters and/or Wikipedia articles Insightful depth is provided about relevant theory(ies) Some use of tables, figures, and/or lists are to help convey key theoretical information Key citations are well used Very good use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts Research Very good review of relevant research More detail about key studies would be ideal Any systematic reviews or meta-analyses in this area? Basic critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Some claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags) Integration Very good integration between theory and research The chapter places more emphasis on theory than on research Conclusion Very good Excellent, practical, take-home message(s) Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is very good Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes Layout The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections I moved the criticisms section into the psychedelics section Grammar, spelling, and proofreading are excellent Abbreviations Spell out abbreviations on their first use, to explain them to the reader APA style Use serial commas[2]. Video (1 min) Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159) Figures Figures are reasonably well captioned Refer to each Figure using APA style (e.g., check and correct capitalisation) Tables Use APA style for captions. See example Refer to each Table using APA style Citations use excellent APA style (7th ed.) References use excellent/very good/good/reasonably good/basic/poor APA style: Remove " Retrieved from " Include hyperlinked dois Some publication details missing (e.g., Wellender, 2022) Learning features Excellent use of learning features Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles Excellent use of image(s) Excellent use of table(s) Excellent use of feature box(es) Good use of case studies or examples Very good use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s) Excellent use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Excellent use of external links in the "External links" section Social contribution ~30+ logged, useful, mostly moderate to major social contributions with direct links to evidence Thanks very much for your extensive contributions

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:15, 15 October 2024 (UTC)

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-- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:56, 6 November 2024 (UTC)