Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2024/Dopamine and decision making

Initial suggestions

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@Carter.lizzie: Thanks for tackling this topic. Some initial suggestions:

Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:07, 10 August 2024 (UTC)Reply

Comment

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Hey, I was doing some research for my topic on dopamine's role in social interactions and development, and I came across this piece of research. I thought it may help with your topic. Click here for the article. https://onlinelibrary.wiley.com/doi/pdf/10.1111/bcpt.13271 Good luck.

This comment was by DeenMisic. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:54, 15 August 2024 (UTC)Reply

Heading casing

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FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example:

Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory

Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:21, 27 October 2024 (UTC)Reply

Topic development feedback

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The topic development submission has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is below, plus see the general feedback page. Please also check the page history for changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Marks are available via UCLearn. Marks are based on the latest version before the due date.

 
  1. The title and sub-title are correctly worded and formatted
  1. Basic, 2-level heading structure – could benefit from further development by expanding the structure
  2. Adopt closer alignment between the sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings
  1. Excellent - Scenario, image, evocative description of the problem/topic, relevant psychological theory/research, and focus questions
  2. Add a scenario or case study into a feature box (with an image) at the start of this section to help catch reader interest
  3. A brief, evocative description of the problem/topic is planned
  4. Present focus questions in a feature box at the end of this section
  1. Insufficient development
  2. It is unclear whether the best available psychological theory and research has been consulted in the preparation of this plan
  3. Avoid providing too much background info (e.g., about dopamine). Instead, provide a brief description of key concepts and provide embedded links to more info (e.g., other book chapters and/or Wikipedia articles). That way, this chapter can concentrate on synthesising the best psychological science about the relationship between dopamine and decision-making.
  4. Conclusion (the most important section):
    1. Hasn't been developed
  1. A relevant figure is presented
  2. Caption could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text
  3. Cite each figure at least once in the main text using APA style
  1. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters
  2. Consider including more examples/case studies, quiz question(s), table(s) etc.
  1. Insufficient
  2. Are there any systematic reviews about this topic?
  3. Move non-academic / non-peer reviewed sources to External links
  4. For APA referencing style, check and correct:
    1. alphabetical order
    2. capitalisation
    3. italicisation
    4. doi formatting
    5. make doi hyperlinks active (i.e., clickable)
    6. use dois where available instead of other links
  5. Remember that the goal is to identify and use the best academic theory and research about this topic
  6. Use APA style or wiki referencing style, but not both. Currently, a mixture of referencing styles is used.
  1. See also
    1. Not developed
  2. External links
    1. Not developed
  1. Not created
  2. I get the impression that you may not have completed the tutorials, especially Tutorial 02
  1. None summarised on user page with direct link(s) to evidence. This was explained in Tutorial 03. Looking ahead to the book chapter submission, see social contributions.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:55, 19 August 2024 (UTC)Reply

Suggestions

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The chapter on dopamine and decision making is nicely organized and engaging. The introduction effectively captures attention with a relatable scenario, making complex concepts more accessible. The structure, with clear subheadings and examples, is precise and informative, allowing for a smooth flow of ideas. The scientific foundation, especially the use of decision-making theories, is well structured. Strengthening the link between these theories and dopamine’s role in influencing decision-making processes would enhance the chapter's theoretical depth. Overall, the chapter does an excellent job of explaining the psychological and neurochemical significance of dopamine in decision-making. Great work! --Princess Brutus (discusscontribs) 08:30, 6 October 2024 (UTC)Reply

Book chapter review and feedback

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This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Chapter marks will be available via UCLearn along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.

 

Overall

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  1. Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient chapter
  2. Basic use of academic, peer-reviewed citations to support claims
  3. Better use could be made of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the [factual?] tags)
  4. Move embedded non-peer-reviewed links into the External links section
  5. Under the maximum word count, so there is room to expand
  6. For additional feedback, see the following comments and https://en.wikiversity.org/w/index.php?title=Motivation_and_emotion%2FBook%2F2024%2FDopamine_and_decision_making&diff=2676763&oldid=2672664[ these copyedits]
  1. Reasonably good
  2. Engages reader via a case study or scenario in a feature box; also include a relevant image
  3. Explains the psychological problem or phenomenon reasonably well
  4. Basic focus questions
  5. The second focus question is the most important; this is where the focus should be
  1. A basic range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained
  2. The relevance of dopamine and mental health issues is unclear; suggest removing unless it can be related to decision making
  3. I wasn't convinced about the relevance of the dual process model
  4. The relevance of incentive theory could be made more clear and include more citations
  5. Builds on one previous, related chapter and/or Wikipedia article
  6. Build more strongly on related chapters and/or Wikipedia articles (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters)
  7. Basic depth is provided about relevant theory(ies)
  8. Some use of tables, figures, and/or lists to help convey key theoretical information
  9. In some places, there is insufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the [factual?] tags)
  10. Basic use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts
  11. Consider using more examples to illustrate theoretical concepts
  1. Basic review of relevant research
  2. More detail about key studies would be ideal
  3. Any systematic reviews or meta-analyses in this area?
  4. In some places, there is insufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the [factual?] tags)
  5. Insufficient critical thinking about relevant research is evident
  6. Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by:
    1. describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies
    2. considering the strength of relationships
    3. acknowledging limitations
    4. pointing out critiques/counterarguments
    5. suggesting specific directions for future research
  7. Some claims lack sufficient citation (e.g., see the [factual?] tags)
  1. Basic integration between theory and research
  1. Basic summary and conclusion
  2. Add practical, take-home message(s)
  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the quality of written expression is reasonably good
    2. Use active (e.g., "this chapter explores") rather than passive voice (e.g., "this chapter has explored" or "this chapter will explore") [1][2]
    3. Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[3] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes
    4. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). Instead:
      1. it is, most often, not needed at all, or
      2. use section linking
  2. Layout
    1. Use the default heading style (e.g., remove additional italics, bold, and/or change in font size)
    2. See earlier comments about heading casing
  3. Grammar
    1. The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags)
  4. Spelling
    1. Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour)
  5. APA style
    1. Use serial commas[4]. Video (1 min)
    2. Figures
      1. Well captioned
      2. Use this format for captions: Figure X. Descriptive caption goes here in sentence casing. See example.
      3. Refer to each Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1)
    3. Tables
      1. Table captions use APA style or wiki style
      2. Each Table is referred to at least once within the main text
      3. Refer to each Table using APA style (e.g., do not use bold, talics, check and correct capitalisation)
    4. Citations use very goodr APA style (7th ed.). To improve:
  6. Move non-peer reviewed citations into the External links section; only cite peer-reviewed work
    1. References use basic APA style:
      1. Check and correct use of capitalisation[5]
      2. Check and correct use of italicisation
      3. Move non-peer reviewed links into the External links section
  1. Good use of learning features
  2. One use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text even more interactive. See example.
  3. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
  4. Use in-text interwiki links, rather than external links, per Tutorial 02
  5. Reasonably good use of figure(s)
  6. Basic use of table(s)
  7. Reasonably good use of feature box(es)
  8. Reasonably good use of scenarios, case studies, or examples
  9. Reasonably good use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s)
  10. The quiz questions could be improved by being more focused on the key points and/or take-home messages
  11. Excellent use of interwiki links in the "See also" section
  12. Reasonably good use of external links in the "External links" section
    1. Use alphabetical order
    2. Include sources in parentheses after the link
  1. ~1 logged contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:21, 27 October 2024 (UTC)Reply


Multimedia presentation feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's UCLearn site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

 

Overall

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  1. Overall, this is a basic presentation
  2. The presentation is over the maximum time limit — content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking and feedback purposes
  1. An opening slide with the sub-title is displayed and narrated. Also narrate the title and possible the sub-title to help clearly convey the purpose of the presentation and to be consistent with the book chapter.
  2. Useful scenario to engage audience. However, it is too long (over 1/3rd of the presentation).
  3. It would be useful to know more about the sub-title question (and/or focus questions) so that the audience understands the problem or phenomenon and why it is important.
  4. Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation.
  1. Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section
  2. The presentation somewhat addresses the topic
  3. There is too much content (goes over the maximum presentation time). Be more selective.
  4. It is unclear how the dual process theory relates to dopamine and decision making
  5. The presentation makes insufficient/no use of relevant psychological research
  6. Ideally, make more explicit use of research (e.g., there are no citations about the best research on this topic)
  7. The presentation makes use of one main example. It could be helpful to abbreviate this example to allow for more use of other examples.
  8. The presentation provides reasonably easy to understand information
  1. The conclusion provides a basic summary of the most relevant psychological theory and research about this topic
  2. The conclusion provides insufficient take-home message(s)
  3. The Conclusion only partly fitted within the time limit
  1. The audio is reasonably easy to follow
  2. The presentation makes basic use of narrated audio
  3. Audio communication is well paced
  4. Consider using greater intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement
  5. The narration is reasonably well practiced
  6. Audio recording quality was basic
  7. Review microphone set-up to achieve higher recording quality. I had to turn up the volume to near full to hear comfortably. Probably an on-board microphone was used (e.g., keyboard and/or mouse clicks were audible). Consider using an external microphone.
  8. The narrated content is reasonably well matched to the target topic but lacked synthesis of the best psychological theory and research about this topic
  1. Overall, visual display quality is basic
  2. The presentation makes basic use of text and image based slides
  3. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read
  4. The visual communication is supplemented in a reasonably good way by images and/or diagrams
  5. The presentation is reasonably well produced using simple tools
  6. The visual content is reasonably well matched to the target topic but lacked synthesis of the best psychological theory and research about this topic
  1. The chapter title is used, but the sub-title (or a shortened version of it) is not used, as the name of the presentation. The sub-title (or an abbreviation of the sub-title that fits within the 100 character limit) would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. A very brief written description of the presentation is provided. Expand.
  3. Links to and from the book chapter are provided
  1. Image sources are communicated
  2. Image copyright status is not communicated
  3. At least one of the images may have violated copyright: https://healthgroovy.com/stages-of-dementia-and-its-symptoms/
  4. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:47, 4 November 2024 (UTC)Reply

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