Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2024/Death and motivation

Use of the word 'literally'

Hi there, what an awesome topic! I have enjoyed reading your page so far, I just have noticed that you heavily include the word 'literally' quite often in your writing, if you are able to eliminate using this word I think it will allow your work to sound more academic and professional. --Jacqueline Di Fronzo (discuss • contribs) 11:41, 23 September 2024 (UTC)

Initial suggestions

@Krutipatil: Thanks for tackling this topic. Some initial suggestions:

• Check out other related chapters and see how you can build on, link to, and integrate with that work:
  • Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Death
  • Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Motivation
• Also search past book chapters for related topics
• For the topic development, consider:
  • What psychological theory(ies) can help to understand and explain this topic?
  • What is the main research in this area?Let me know if I can do anything else to support the development of this chapter.

Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:52, 6 August 2024 (UTC)

Life regrets

I wonder if the research about what people regret later in life might be useful?---- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:31, 14 August 2024 (UTC)

you could add to this by researching if people take advice from others about what they regret? Biancagouws (discuss • contribs) 09:15, 15 August 2024 (UTC)

Heading casing

Hi Krutipatil. FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:30, 23 August 2024 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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1. Title The title and sub-title are correctly worded and formatted 2. Headings See earlier comment about Heading casing Promising 2-level heading structure – could benefit from further development by expanding the structure Adopt closer alignment between the sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings Avoid having sections with only 1 sub-heading – use 0 or 2+ sub-headings Definition(s) tend to be pedestrian headings. Incorporate definitional material into the Overview and/or subsequent sections with embedded inter-wiki link(s) to further information. 3. Overview Add a scenario or case study in a feature box (with an image) at the start of this section to help catch reader interest Add a brief, evocative description of the problem/topic Present focus questions in a feature box at the end of this section 4. Key points Basic development of key points for each section, with relevant citations Avoid providing too much background information. Aim to briefly summarise general concepts and provide internal links to relevant book chapters and/or Wikipedia pages for further information. Then focus most of the content on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title. For sections which include sub-sections, include the key points for an overview paragraph prior to branching into the sub-headings It is unclear whether the best available psychological theory and research has been consulted in the preparation of this plan For example, consider referring to the concept of mortality salience Replace citations to internet webpages with citations of peer-reviewed academic literature Use APA style 7th edition for citations with three or more authors (i.e., FirstAuthor et al., year) Conclusion (the most important section): Under developed What might the take-home, practical messages be? (What are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions?) 5. Figure A relevant figure is presented and captioned Cite each figure at least once in the main text using APA style 6. Learning feature One in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters used (see Tutorial 2) Consider use of one or more scenarios/examples/case studies Promising use of quiz question(s) Focus the quiz question(s) on the take-home messages for each focus question Also consider using one or more tables to summarise key information 7. References OK Are there any systematic reviews about this topic? 3 out of 6 references provided Check and correct APA referencing style: capitalisation italicisation 8. Resources See also Move the external link to the external links section Also link to related book chapters Also link to relevant Wikipedia pages Include source in brackets after link (e.g., (Wikipedia) or (Book chapter, year) for Wikiversity book chapters) External links Not developed 9. User page Good Brief description about self – consider expanding Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. A link to the book chapter is provided 10. Social contribution None summarised on user page with direct link(s) to evidence. This was explained in Tutorial 03. Looking ahead to the book chapter submission, see social contributions.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:30, 23 August 2024 (UTC)

Areas of interest/ resource to check out

Optimistic nihilism and positive existentialism could be interesting to research in terms of motivation. The influence of social media on our perceptions/awareness of death is also fascinating.

Arena, A. F., MacCann, C., Moreton, S. G., Menzies, R. E., & Tiliopoulos, N. (2024). Living authentically in the face of death: Predictors of autonomous motivation among individuals exposed to chronic mortality cues compared to a matched community sample. OMEGA-Journal of Death and Dying, 89(1), 379-403. https://doi.org/10.1177/00302228221074160 U3229132 (discuss • contribs) 06:57, 24 September 2024 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a basic presentation Overview The opening slide Displays and narrates the title and the sub-title — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation Create an engaging introduction to hook audience interest Establish a context for the presentation (e.g., use an example or explain importance) Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation. Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation addresses the topic An appropriate amount of content is presented — not too much or too little The presentation makes very good use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes insufficient use of relevant psychological research The presentation makes insufficient use of citations to support claims The presentation makes basic of one or more examples The presentation provides practical advice The presentation provides easy to understand information Conclusion The conclusion provides a basic summary of the most relevant psychological theory and research about this topic Audio The presentation makes basic use of narrated audio Audio communication is well-paced Reasonably good intonation The narration is well practiced and/or performed Audio recording quality was reasonably good Some of the audio transitions between slides are clunky Review microphone set-up to achieve higher recording quality Mute background music while narrating The narrated content is well matched to the target topic Video Overall, visual display quality is basic The presentation makes reasonably good use of text and image based slides The font size is sufficiently large to make it reasonably easy to read Consider using a sans-serif typeface to make the text easier to read The amount of text presented per slide makes it reasonably easy to read and listen at the same time The visual communication is supplemented in a reasonably good way by relevant images and/or diagrams The presentation is reasonably well produced using simple tools The visual content is well matched to the target topic Meta-data The correct title is used, but the sub-title (or a shortened version of it) is not used, as the name of the presentation. This would help to convey the purpose of the presentation and be consistent. Provide a written description of the presentation to help potential viewers Links to and from the book chapter are provided Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are not clearly indicated A copyright license for the presentation is clearly indicated

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:21, 7 November 2024 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a very good chapter. It makes very good use of psychological theory and research to address a real-world phenomenon or problem. The main area for improvement is the quality of written expression and proofreading Very good use of academic, peer-reviewed citations to support claims For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Solid Engages reader via a case study or scenario in a feature box; also include a relevant image Explains the psychological problem or phenomenon reasonably well The focus questions are good Theory An excellent range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained Builds somewhat on other chapters and/or Wikipedia articles Build more strongly on related chapters and/or Wikipedia articles (e.g., by embedding interwiki links for key terms) Insightful depth is provided about relevant theory(ies) Use tables, figures, and/or lists to help convey key theoretical information Key citations are well used Good use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts Research Excellent review of relevant research More detail about key studies would be ideal Any systematic reviews or meta-analyses in this area? Basic critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Integration Very good integration between theory and research Conclusion Very brief summary and conclusion Insufficient as a cohesive summary of the best available psychological theory and research about the topic Summarise key points Add practical, take-home message(s) Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is OK but there are several aspects which are below professional standard Avoid one sentence paragraphs. Communicate one idea per paragraph using three to five sentences. Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes Layout The structure is overly complicated Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading – use 0 or 2+ sub-headings See earlier comments about heading casing Include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections (see tags) Grammar The grammar for some/many sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags) Consider using a grammar checking tool Another option is to use a services provided by UC, such as Studiosity Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance Check and correct use of possessive apostrophes (e.g., cats vs cat's vs cats')[2] Abbreviations Once an abbreviation has been established (e.g., TMT), use it consistently aftwarwards Spelling Some words are misspelt (e.g., see the tags). Spell-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour) Proofreading More proofreading is needed (e.g., fix punctuation and typographical errors) to bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard APA style Use sentence casing for the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc. Use serial commas[3]. Video (1 min) Figures Briefly captioned; provide more detail to help connect the figure to the text Add captions Check and correct numbering/ordering Use this format for captions: Figure X. Descriptive caption goes here in sentence casing. See example. Refer to each Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., "(see Figure 1)") Citations use reasonably good APA style (7th ed.). To improve: If there are three or more authors, cite the first author followed by et al., then year. For example, either: in-text, Smith et al. (2020), or in parentheses (Smith et al., 2020) References use reasonably good APA style: Check and correct use of capitalisation[4] Check and correct use of italicisation Learning features Basic use of learning features Reasonably good use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text even more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Basic use of figure(s) No use of table(s) Basic use of feature box(es) Basic use of scenarios, case studies, or examples Basic use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s) No use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Reasonably good use of external links in the "External links" section Use alphabetical order Include sources in parentheses after the link Social contribution ~ logged, useful, mostly minor/moderate/major contributions with direct links to evidence Thanks very much for your extensive contributions ~ logged contributions without direct links to evidence, so unable to easily verify and assess. See tutorials for guidance about how to get direct links to evidence. Contributions made across three platforms Use a numbered list per Tutorial 02 No logged contributions

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:10, 19 November 2024 (UTC)