Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2024/Adverse childhood experiences and risk-taking motivation

Referencing adjustments

Hey, I noticed that in your references you are using a dash, rather than an en-dash, which is required for APA 7th ed. referencing. (click 'here')

Topic development feedback

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1. Title The title and/or sub-title were not correctly worded and/or formatted. This has been corrected. 2. Headings Promising 2-level heading structure – could benefit from further development by expanding the structure Reduce explanation of ACEs and RT as stand-alone concepts (briefly summarise and embed links to other book chapters and/or Wikipedia article for more info) Concentrate on the relationship between ACEs and RT based on psychological science Reasonably good alignment between focus questions and heading structure, but consider closer alignment 3. Overview Excellent - Scenario, image, evocative description of the problem/topic, relevant psychological theory/research, and focus questions A scenario or case study is presented in a feature box at the start of this section Add an image to the scenario or case study to help attract reader interest A brief, evocative description of the problem/topic is provided Reasonably good alignment between focus questions and heading structure, but consider closer alignment The first two questions are much less important (and could be dropped); the last two questions are much more important 4. Key points Partial development of key points for some sections, with some relevant citations Lack of sufficient citations For sections which include sub-sections, include the key points for an overview paragraph prior to branching into the sub-headings Avoid providing too much background information. Briefly summarise general concepts and provide internal wiki links to relevant book chapters and/or Wikipedia pages for further information. Then focus most of the content of this on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title. Strive for an integrated balance of theory and research, with practical examples It is unclear whether the best available psychological theory and research has been consulted in the preparation of this plan Conclusion (the most important section): Underway Currently reads like a wall of text - is it AI-generated? If so, this hasn't been acknowledged and would be a violation of academic integrity. What might the take-home, practical messages be? (What are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions?) 5. Figure A relevant figure is presented and captioned Cite each figure at least once in the main text using APA style Increase image size so that the text is easier to read 6. Learning feature One use of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Promising use of example(s)/case study(ies) Promising use of quiz question(s) Focus the quiz question(s) on the take-home messages for each focus question Consider including more examples/case studies, quiz question(s), table(s) etc. 7. References OK Are there any systematic reviews about this topic? For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation italicisation doi formatting use dois where available instead of other links make doi hyperlinks active (i.e., clickable) page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) provide full journal titles 8. Resources See also OK Use sentence casing Also link to relevant Wikipedia pages External links Very good Use sentence casing 9. User page Used effectively Description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter 10. Social contribution Good – two out of three types of contributions made with with direct link(s) to evidence Please put suggestions on talk/discussion pages rather than as direct edits Avoid links in headings

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:56, 18 August 2024 (UTC)

Heading casing

Hi Krobertsonn. FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:01, 30 September 2024 (UTC)

Good evening @Jtneill,

Throughout the content of my headings, if a source I use utilise capitalises every word for a specific thing (e.g. Behavioural Inhibition System) do I follow what they do? Or do I stick to the sentence casing and keep second words as lowercase? (e.g. Behavioural inhibition system). I would like to know this regarding my reference list as well, as some sources capitalise every word in their titles and others do not. Krobertsonn (discuss • contribs) 11:24, 30 September 2024 (UTC)

APA style is a "down" style e.g., see https://apastyle.apa.org/style-grammar-guidelines/capitalization for more info. Note the section about diseases etc. So, the correct capitalisation for your example is "behavioural inhibition system".

Similarly, for APA style references, the title of the work should be in sentence casing (other than for proper nouns). The journal title uses capitalisation for the main words (e.g., Journal of Personality and Individual Differences). This means that you can't necessarily rely on the capitalisation in the original source. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:45, 30 September 2024 (UTC)

Guidance for further enhancement

Hey Kira! I love this topic! anything to do with childhood experiences and adulthood behaviours is super interesting. You've made great progress so far! Here is some guidance on potential enhancement for your chapter!

I think discussing the psychological mechanisms behind risk taking behaviours can enhance your chapter. For example, when speaking on peer pressure and risk-taking, you could back this up with theories like social learning theory or attachment theory. I found an interesting study on social learning theory and promoting honesty amongst young children. This could be used to argue that although antisocial behaviour can be learned from observation, prosocial behaviour can also be observed and actioned. Here is the link: https://doi.org/10.1016/j.jecp.2017.11.003

Consider potentially speaking on ACE combined with other variables? This could be titled "who is most susceptible to ACE and later risk-taking behaviour?". This can allow for further exploration into what variables increase the likelihood of damaging future behaviours along with already being exposed to a damaging upbringing. I found a study you could use which focuses on ACE and environmental exposures (such as pollution) and neurocognitive outcomes. Here is the link: doi: 10.3390/toxics11030259

That brings me to my next suggestion of looking into the neurological implications of ACE which could then read to risk-taking behaviours, this would be really interesting! Even factors such as gender and age could influence these results which i think would be useful to touch on.

This is also a useful Ted Talk on ACE's which can be an external link for you chapter :) https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=i0anFHqIuJc

Goodluck with your chapter! I'm sure you'll smash it :) Ashdruett (discuss • contribs) 04:02, 2 October 2024 (UTC)

Multimedia presentation feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a basic presentation The presentation is under the maximum time limit (3 mins), so there was room for further development Overview An opening slide with the title and sub-title is displayed — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Also narrate title and sub-title. Basic verbal scenario to engage audience. The scenario doesn't, however, depict the connection between ACEs and risk-taking. A basic context is established Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation. Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation addresses the topic There is probably too much time (1/3rd) spent on defining ACEs rather than focusing on the connection with RTing The presentation makes excellent/very good/good/reasonably good/basic/little/insufficient/no use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes basic use of relevant psychological research Ideally, make more explicit use of research The presentation makes basic use of one or more examples The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples or case studies The presentation provides practical advice The presentation could be improved by providing practical advice The presentation provides reasonably easy to understand information Conclusion Provide a conclusion slide which summarises the most relevant psychological theory and research about this topic, with practical, take-home messages in response to each focus question Audio The audio is OK to follow but there is a lot of content presented quickly The presentation makes basic use of narrated audio Audio communication is reasonably well paced Basic intonation The narration is reasonably well practiced and/or performed Audio recording quality was basic (quite quiet) Review microphone set-up to achieve higher recording quality. Probably an on-board microphone was used (e.g., keyboard and/or mouse clicks were audible). Consider using an external microphone. The narrated content is well matched to the target topic Video Overall, visual display quality is basic The presentation makes basic use of text-based slides The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read The visual communication could be improved by including some relevant images and/or diagrams The presentation is basically produced using simple tools The visual content is well/ matched to the target topic Meta-data The chapter title is used, but the sub-title (or a shortened version of it) is not used, as the name of the presentation. The sub-title (or an abbreviation of the sub-title that fits within the 100 character limit) would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A good written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding. An inactive hyperlink to the book chapter is provided (maybe because the YouTube user account does not yet have access to advanced features) A link from the book chapter is provided Licensing A copyright license for the presentation is clearly indicated

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:01, 6 November 2024 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent chapter. It successfully uses psychological theory and research to address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. Excellent use of academic, peer-reviewed citations to support claims For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Well developed Engages reader via a case study or scenario in a feature box with a relevant image Compellingly explains the psychological problem or phenomenon The focus questions are clear and relevant Theory An excellent range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained Builds reasonably well on other chapters and/or Wikipedia articles Insightful depth is provided about relevant theory(ies) Basic use of tables, figures, and/or lists to help convey key theoretical information Key citations are well used Very good use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts Research Excellent review of relevant research Excellent critical thinking about relevant research is evident Integration Excellent integration between theory and research Conclusion Excellent summary and conclusion The focus questions are addressed Clear take-home message(s) Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is excellent Layout The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections Include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections (see tags) Grammar, spelling, and proofreading are excellent Check and correct use of affect vs. effect APA style Use serial commas[1]. Video (1 min) Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used ... as slang, or as an invented or coined expression" (APA Style 7th ed., 2020, p. 159) Figures Reasonably well captioned Citations use excellent APA style (7th ed.) References use excellent APA style: Learning features Basic good use of learning features Reasonably good use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text even more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Basic use of figure(s) No use of table(s) Basic use of feature box(es) No use of scenarios, case studies, or examples No use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s) Basic use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Use internal linking style per Tutorial 02 Also include links to related Wikipedia articles Add more links Basic use of external links in the "External links" section Move Wikipedia links to the See also section Be more selective Use alphabetical order Social contribution ~6 logged, useful, mostly minor/moderate/major contributions with direct links to evidence (1 link didn't work)

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:34, 13 November 2024 (UTC)