Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2023/Unconscious aspects of multiple selves and emotion

Initial suggestions

@Natsta19: Thanks for tackling this topic.

Some initial suggestions:

• Note that there was a previous attempt, so check out that chapter and the feedback on its talk page.
• Check out other related chapters and see how you can build on, link to, and integrate with that work:
  • Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Self
  • Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Unconscious
• What psychological theories can help to understand? What is the main research in this area?

Let me know if I can do anything else as you go along.

Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:09, 6 August 2023 (UTC)

Heading casing

FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:38, 26 September 2023 (UTC)

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Title The title is correctly worded and formatted The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted Headings Basic development Reduce from 3-level to 2-level structure Expand the 2nd level heading structure See earlier comment about Heading casing Use 3rd person perspective Avoid having sections with only 1 sub-heading – use 0 or 2+ sub-headings Overview Move scenario to top of section. Add image to feature fox. Add a brief, evocative description of the problem/topic Very good focus questions Closer alignment between the sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings is recommended Key points Promising development of key points for each section, with relevant citations Historical material is appropriate; but also include as much contemporary psychological science as possible Strive for an integrated balance of theory and research, with practical examples Conclusion (the most important section): Hasn't been developed Figure Excellent - A relevant figure is presented, captioned, and cited Learning feature Excellent use of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Promising use of example(s)/case study(ies) Promising use of quiz question(s) References 4 out of 6 references For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation italicisation Choose either wiki referencing style or APA style - do not use both Resources See also OK Include source in brackets after link Also link to relevant Wikipedia pages External links Not provided User page Created – minimal, but sufficient Brief description about self provided – consider expanding Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution Excellent – at least three different types of contributions with direct link(s) to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:38, 26 September 2023 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a good chapter. It makes very good use of psychological theory and some use of research to address a real-world phenomenon or problem. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Well developed Engages reader interest by presenting a case study and/or scenario with an image in a feature box Clearly explains the problem or phenomenon Clear focus questions Theory An excellent range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained Insightful depth is provided about relevant theory(ies) Promising use of tables, figures, and/or lists are to help clearly convey key theoretical information The content of Table 1 wasn't directly related to the main text; only summarise content that is directly relevant Insufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations in some places (e.g., see the tags) Very good use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts Research Basic review of relevant research More detail about key studies would be ideal Any systematic reviews or meta-analyses in this area? Greater emphasis on effect sizes could be helpful. Basic critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Integration Very good integration between theory and research The chapter places more emphasis on theory than on research Conclusion Very good summary and conclusion Remind the reader about the importance of the problem or phenomenon of interest Key points are summarised Add practical, take-home message(s) Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is good Some sentences are overly long. Strive for the simplest expression. Consider splitting longer sentences into two shorter sentences. Some paragraphs are overly long. Communicate one key idea per paragraph in three to five sentences. Embed direct quotes within sentences and paragraphs, rather than presenting them holus-bolus. Even better, communicate the concept in your own words. Spelling Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour) APA style Use serial commas[1]. See explanatory video (1 min) Direct quotes need page numbers – even better, write in your own words Figures Figures are well captioned Each Figure is referred to at least once within the main text Tables Table captions use APA style or wiki style Each Table is referred to at least once within the main text using APA style Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example: Use ampersand (&) inside parentheses and "and" outside parentheses List multiple citations in alphabetical order by first author surname References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation[2] Check and correct use of italicisation Include hyperlinked dois Learning features Good use of learning features Very good use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text even more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Good use of image(s) Basic use of table(s) Basic use of feature box(es) Good use of case studies or examples Good use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s) The quiz questions could be more effective as learning prompts by being embedded as single questions within each corresponding section rather than as a set of questions at the end Good use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Also include links to related Wikipedia articles Use sentence casing Use alphabetical order Good use of external links in the "External links" section Use bullet points per Tutorial 02 Use alphabetical order Include sources in parentheses Social contribution ~8 logged, useful, minor to moderate social contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:15, 5 November 2023 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is an reasonably good presentation The presentation is over the maximum time limit — content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking and feedback purposes Overview An opening slide with the title and sub-title is displayed — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation Also narrate the title and sub-title — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Very engaging introduction to hook audience interest A context for the topic is clearly established through an example Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation. Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation addresses the topic The presentation is reasonably well structured (i.e., Overview, Content, Conclusion) The presentation makes reasonably good use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes basic use of relevant psychological research The presentation includes some key citations to support claims The presentation makes basic use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice The presentation provides easy to understand information Conclusion A Conclusion slide is presented with an insufficient summary The Conclusion only partly fitted within the time limit Audio The audio is hard to follow because the audio recording quality is poor (distracting static blips). Review microphone set-up to achieve higher recording quality. The presentation makes reasonably good use of narrated audio The narrated content is reasonably well matched to the target topic (see content) Video Overall, visual display quality is reasonably good The presentation makes good use of text and image based slides Some of the font size could be larger to make it easier to read The amount of text presented on some slides could be reduced to make it easier to read and listen at the same time The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images and/or diagrams The presentation is basically produced using simple tools The visual content is reasonably well matched to the target topic (see content) Meta-data The chapter title is used, but the sub-title (or a shortened version of it) is not used, as the name of the presentation. The sub-title (or an abbreviation of the sub-title that fits within the 100 character limit) would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A written description of the presentation is not provided. Providing an informative description can help viewers decide whether they want to watch or not. Excellent use of time codes Links to and from the book chapter are provided Licensing Provide clickable links to the original image sources (e.g., in the description) Image sources are communicated in a general way. Also provide links to each image and the license details. A copyright license for the presentation is provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:19, 6 November 2023 (UTC)