Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2023/Torture interrogation, motivation, and emotion

Initial suggestions

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@U3204500: Thanks for tackling this topic.

Some initial suggestions:

  • There has been one previous chapter that may be of particular interest: Motivation and emotion/Book/2021/Torture motivation
  • Note that this chapter can and should cover motivation and emotion. However, if you find that you want to focus more specifically on one or the other, let me know and we renegotiate the topic.
  • There is increasingly good science suggesting that torture, whilst tempting, is not particularly effective at obtaining truth, and has other undesirable consequences. But what are the alternatives?

Let me know if I can do anything else as you go along.

Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:11, 2 August 2023 (UTC)Reply


Topic development feedback

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  1. The title is correctly worded and formatted
  2. The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted
  1. Basic, 3-level heading structure
  2. Simplify by removing 3rd level of heading
  3. Expand the 2nd level of heading
  4. The top-level headings between Overview and Conclusion make sense - they are logical
  5. Adopt closer alignment between the sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings
  6. Avoid having sections with only 1 sub-heading – use 0 or 2+ sub-headings
  7. Quiz doesn't need a separate heading; instead embed quiz questions within relevant sections
  8. I've changed what is torture to what is torture interrogation - closer to the topic. Keep the definitional/historical material to a minimum. The subsequent sections are more important.
  9. Add question mark to "How does motivation and emotion impact the effectiveness of torture". This is arguably the most important section.
  1. Promising
  2. Move case study to top of section; include image
  3. A brief, evocative description of the problem/topic is planned
  4. Closer alignment between the sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings is recommended
  1. Promising development of key points for each section, with relevant citations
  2. The theories used are very general. Read more closer into the best psychological science about this topic and refine the choice/focus of theories.
  3. Strive for an integrated balance of theory and research, with practical examples
  4. Conclusion (the most important section):
    1. Well underway
    2. What might the take-home, practical messages be? (What are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions?)
  1. A relevant figure is presented, captioned, and cited
  1. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters
  2. Promising use of example(s)/case study(ies)
  3. Promising use of quiz question(s)
  4. Consider including table(s)
  1. Excellent choice of references
  2. Are there any systematic reviews about this topic?
  3. Very good APA style
  4. For APA referencing style, check and correct:
    1. italicisation
  1. Excellent
  1. Excellent – used effectively
  2. Excellent description about self provided
  3. Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.
  4. Link provided to book chapter
  1. Very good – two out of three different types of contributions with direct link(s) to evidence
  2. No data is recorded for Wikiversity quiz responses, so not a social contribution
  3. Also try directly improving a Wikiversity page and/or commenting on a Wikiversity page

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:28, 26 September 2023 (UTC)Reply

Social Contribution Suggestion

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Hey,

This topic looks so interesting and can't wait to see it developed!

I would suggest to include information and potentially display this in a table regarding the different types of torture (in the Historical Perspective section - I would also reconsider calling this 'historical' unless the same focus will be history as it seems to be mainly the different types at this stage) so that the quiz can be easily answered. Including some (non-distributing) images may also be necessary to display.

Adding wiki-hyperlinks in aswell to save you describing things (eg. Maslow's heirachy of needs) and save your word count for more information.

Mia Pearse (discusscontribs) 05:49, 5 October 2023 (UTC)Reply

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  1. Overall, this is an excellent chapter. It successfully uses psychological theory and research to address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem.
  2. Excellent use of academic, peer-reviewed citations to support claims
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  1. Well developed
  2. Engages reader interest by presenting a case study and/or scenario in a feature box; also add (appropriate) image
  3. Clearly explains the problem or phenomenon
  4. Clear focus questions
  1. An excellent range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained
  2. Builds effectively on related Wikipedia articles
  3. Build more strongly on other related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters)
  4. Insightful depth is provided about relevant theory(ies)
  5. Effective use of tables, figures, and/or lists are to help clearly convey key theoretical information
  6. Key citations are well used
  7. Excellent use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts
  1. Excellent review of relevant research
  2. Good critical thinking about relevant research is evident
  3. Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by:
    1. describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies
    2. discussing the direction of relationships
    3. considering the strength of relationships
    4. acknowledging limitations
    5. pointing out critiques/counterarguments
    6. suggesting specific directions for future research
  4. Claims are referenced
  1. Excellent integration between theory and research
  1. Very good summary and conclusion
  2. Key points are well summarised
  3. Add practical, take-home message(s)
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    1. Overall, the quality of written expression is excellent
    2. Direct quotes are overused. Communicate concepts in your own words.
    3. "People" is often a better term than "individuals"
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    1. The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections
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  3. Grammar, spelling, and proofreading are excellent
  4. APA style
    1. Use sentence casing for the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc.
    2. Use serial commas[1]. See explanatory video (1 min)
    3. Direct quotes need page numbers – even better, write in your own words
    4. Figures
      1. Figures are briefly captioned
      2. Provide more detailed Figure captions to help connect the figure to the text
      3. Each Figure is referred to at least once within the main text
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      1. Use APA style for captions. See example
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    6. Citations use correct APA style
    7. References are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. Check and correct use of italicisation
      2. Move non-peer-reviewed sources to the external links section
  1. Excellent use of learning features
  2. Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles
  3. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
  4. Good use of image(s)
  5. Very good use of table(s)
  6. Very good use of feature box(es)
  7. Very good use of case studies or examples
  8. Basic use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s)
  9. Excellent use of interwiki links in the "See also" section
    1. Use alphabetical order
  10. Excellent use of external links in the "External links" section
    1. Use alphabetical order
  1. ~11 logged, useful, minor to moderate social contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:25, 12 November 2023 (UTC)Reply

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  1. Overall, this is a reasonably good presentation
  1. An opening slide with the sub-title is displayed and narrated — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation
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  5. Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation.
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  2. The presentation addresses the topic
  3. An appropriate amount of content is presented — not too much or too little
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  6. Ideally, make more explicit use of research
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  9. The presentation provides easy to understand information
  1. The presentation could be strengthened by providing a Conclusion slide with take-home message (e.g., answers to each of the focus questions)
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  1. The audio is easy to follow and interesting to listen to
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  6. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read
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  9. The presentation is well produced using simple tools
  10. The visual content is well matched to the target topic (see content) but lacked synthesis of the best psychological research about this topic
  1. Use the chapter title and sub-title (or an abbreviation to fit within the 100 character limit) in the name of the presentation — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation
  2. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding.
  3. Links to and from the book chapter are provided
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-- Jtneill - Talk - c 20:56, 14 November 2023 (UTC)Reply

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