Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2023/Sadism and emotion

Podcast

@Kimberley Manyura: You might find this podcast about sadism as part of the dark triad and in relation to the big 5 personality factors of interest. Note that the title is a bit misleading: https://www.jordanbpeterson.com/podcast/women-pornography-and-sadism-dr-del-paulhus-ep-327/ Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:07, 14 August 2023 (UTC)

Comments and suggestions

@Kimberley Manyura: I made a few edits to your references, this is to ensure italicisation is formatted. Best of luck with your book chapter!

Angela

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Title The title is correctly worded and formatted The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted Headings Promising 2-level heading structure – could benefit from further development by expanding the structure Adopt closer alignment between the sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings Aim for 3 to 6 top-level headings between the Overview and Conclusion, with up to a similar number of sub-headings for large sections Use default heading formatting (i.e., avoid bold, italics, underline, changing the size etc.) Overview Add a scenario or case study into a feature box (with an image) at the start of this section to help catch reader interest A brief, evocative description of the problem/topic is provided Closer alignment between the sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings is recommended Key points Not developed Figure A relevant figure is presented Caption could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text Cite each figure at least once in the main text Learning feature Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Consider including more examples/case studies, quiz question(s), table(s) etc. References Cite all references in text Very good APA referencing style. Check and correct: italicisation Resources Excellent User page Created – minimal, but sufficient Add description about self Add link to book chapter Social contribution None summarised on user page with direct link(s) to evidence – this was covered in Tutorial 03. Looking ahead to the book chapter submission, see how to earn marks for social contributions.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:16, 29 September 2023 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient chapter The chapter tends to focus on "sadism" and "sexual sadism" rather than on the topic which is "sadism and emotion" Reasonably good use of academic, peer-reviewed citations to support claims Use of academic, peer-reviewed citations is lacking in some places (e.g., see the tags) Well under the maximum word count, so there is room to expand For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Well developed/Solid/Reasonably good/Basic/Underdeveloped Engage reader interest via a case study or scenario in a feature box with a relevant image Briefly explains the problem or phenomenon Basic focus questions Theory A reasonably good range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained The key to improving this chapter is focusing on "sadism and emotion". A lot of the content wasn't directly about this topic. Perhaps consider, what is the relation between sadism, emotion, and gender? Builds somewhat on related Wikipedia articles Build more strongly on related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters) Basic depth is provided about relevant theory(ies) Much of the content was in bullet-point form, so didn't seem to be complete Use tables, figures, and/or lists are to help convey key theoretical information Key citations are well used In some places there is insufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the tags) Reasonably good use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts Research Basic review of relevant research A promising range of research is considered, but often very briefly. More details would be ideal. And relating the research to sadism and emotion was the holy grail. Basic critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Integration Reasonably good integration between theory and research Conclusion Reasonably good summary and conclusion Remind the reader about the importance of the problem or phenomenon of interest Key points are well summarised Add practical, take-home message(s) Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is basic Develop the bullet points into full sentences and paragraphs Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). Instead: it is, most often, not needed at all, or use section linking Grammar The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags) Consider using a grammar checking tool Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance Proofreading More proofreading is needed (e.g., fix punctuation and typographical errors) to bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard APA style Use sentence casing for the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc. Figures Figures are reasonably well captioned Refer to each Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1) Citations use reasonably good APA style (7th ed.). For example: If there are three or more authors, cite the first author followed by et al., then year. For example, either: in-text, Smith et al. (2020), or in parentheses (Smith et al., 2020) References use excellent APA style: Learning features Reasonably good use of learning features Basic use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text even more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Very good use of image(s) Basic use of table(s) Basic use of feature box(es) Basic use of case studies or examples Basic use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s) Reasonably good use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Use internal linking style for Wikipedia links per Tutorial 02 Use alphabetical order Basic use of external links in the "External links" section Use alphabetical order Include more resources Social contribution ~1 logged, useful, minor/moderate/major social contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:02, 20 November 2023 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is an insufficient presentation The main potential areas for improvement are to focus more on the emotional aspects of sadism, to integrate review of the best research, strengthen the Overview and Conclusion, and improve the meta-data and licensing Overview The presentation could be improved by displaying and narrating a slide with the correct title and sub-title as the book chapter to help the viewer understand the purpose of the presentation An example is used to hook audience interest Establish a context for the presentation (e.g., by uexplaining why it is important), to help the viewer understand Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation. Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation somewhat addresses the topic The detailed content about disorders wasn't clearly related to the topic (sadism and emotion) An appropriate amount of content is presented — not too much or too little The presentation makes basic use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes insufficient use of relevant psychological research Ideally, make more explicit use of research The presentation makes insufficient use of citations to support claims The presentation makes basic use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice Conclusion A conclusion is presented with a very basic audio summary Expand about how the take-home message can be used to improve our everyday lives Audio The presentation makes basic use of narrated audio Audio communication is well paced Good intonation The narration could benefit from further practice Audio recording quality was very good The narrated content is reasonably well matched to the target topic but lacked synthesis of the best psychological research about this topic Video Overall, visual display quality is basic The presentation makes basic use of text and image based slides The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read Consider using a sans-serif typeface to make the text easier to read The visual communication is supplemented in a basic way by images Also consider using diagrams The presentation is basically produced using simple tools The visual content is reasonably well matched to the target topic but lacked synthesis of the best psychological research about this topic Meta-data The video title does not match the chapter title and sub-title — this would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation and be more consistent A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding. Links to and from the book chapter are provided Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are not provided A copyright license for the presentation is not provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:59, 21 November 2023 (UTC)