Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2023/Role-playing games, motivation, and emotion

Initial suggestion

@U3224203: Thanks for tackling this topic.

I've just started supervising a PhD working on this topic. Here is one of his previous publications: https://doi.org/10.1080/00050067.2021.1890983

Let me know if I can do anything else as you go along.

Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:54, 6 August 2023 (UTC)

Heading casing

Hi U3224203. FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:32, 23 August 2023 (UTC)

Suggested Research

Hey, amazing work! This is an interesting topic, I havent actually read much on role-playing games within the field of psychology but it seems like it would be really benefical. I noticed you talk about features of the self-determination theory. I think looking further into the mini theories of SDT (cognitive evaluation theory, organismic integration theory, causality orientations theory, basic needs theory, and goal contents theory) would be a really interesting approach! Good luck :) Grace U3210285 (discuss • contribs) 13:04, 24 August 2023 (UTC)

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Title The title is correctly worded and formatted The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted Headings Excellent – Well developed 2-level heading structure, with meaningful headings that directly relate to the core topic Overview Excellent plan Put the scenario in a feature box at the start to help catch reader interest Add a brief, evocative description of the problem/topic Excellent focus questions. AddUse single- rather than double-barrelled focus questions Key points Excellent – key points are well developed for each section, with relevant citations For sections which include sub-sections include key points for an overview paragraph prior to branching into the sub-headings Good balance of theory and research Conclusion (the most important section): Well developed Underway What might the take-home, practical messages be? (What are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions?) Figure A relevant figure is presented Consider expanding detail in captions to provide closer connection with key points in text Cite each figure at least once in the main text Consider increasing Figure 2 size from to make it easier to view (or find another way of presenting this information?) Learning feature One use of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Consider including more examples/case studies, quiz question(s), table(s) etc. References Good For APA referencing style, check and correct: remove extra line spaces doi formatting make doi hyperlinks active (i.e., clickable) fix typos/inconsistencies. Resources Very good Use bullet-points (see Tutorial 02) Include source in brackets after link I've correct the first one External links Excellent User page Excellent – used effectively Link(s) provided to professional profile(s) Link provided to book chapter Social contribution Good/promising – two different types of contributions with direct link(s) to evidence At least one contribution has been made and summarised with indirect link(s) to evidence If adding the second or subsequent link to a page (or a talk/discussion page), create a direct link like / Add direct links to evidence. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions. Great to see you on X - join the conversation :)

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:32, 23 September 2023 (UTC)

Edits

Hi, thank you for this book chapter! It was very informative. Good use of figures to make it more interesting! I think additional use of interactive mechanisms (e.g., graphs, quizzes, case studies) may make it more entertaining for the readers. I have made some changes to the errors in your reference list, I hope you don't mind! The most common ones I have noticed are:

• You do not need to apply hanging indent to every single reference! Just in the beginning, and leave the bracket open until the end of your last reference.
• Unnecessary capitalisation of words (e.g., for the title of the article only capitalise the first word or the first word after a colon)
• Lack of italicise for publishers
• Did not include the article link within the reference

Here is a website for APA7 referencing, I hope it can assist you in your future assessments! UC Referencing Guide Jingying Chen (discuss • contribs) 23:41, 19 October 2023 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is an insufficient chapter The main issue is that the chapter does not address the question, which is about RPG and M/E, whereas the chapter is about games more generally. The chapter takes an overly broad lens to a specific question/topic. Whether the effects of gaming are beneficial or detrimental is also not part of the target topic (it is related, but it is not central) This chapter should report on the best psychological science about the motivational and emotional aspects of RPGs Under the maximum word count, so there is room to expand For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Insufficient because it is focused on gaming rather than RPG and motivation and emotion Consider providing a case study or scenario with an image in a feature box to help engage reader interest Does not show a clear understanding of the problem (topic) The focus questions could be improved by being more specific to the topic (i.e., the sub-title) Theory Provide a clear definition of RPGs A basic range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained There is some very promising content; it needs to be tailored/focused on RPGs For more general discussion about gaming, provide embedded links to other relevant chapters Build more strongly on other related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters) There is too much general theoretical material. Instead, summarise and link to further information (such as other book chapters or Wikipedia articles), to allow this chapter to focus on the specific topic (i.e., the sub-title question). Basic depth is provided about relevant theory(ies) No use of tables and/or lists are to help clearly convey key theoretical information Lack of sufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the tags) Basic use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts Research Insufficient review of relevant research Some interesting research is presented, but overall the reviewed research is not sufficiently related to RPGs and M/E Lack of sufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the tags) Insufficient critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research, in the first instance, could be further evidenced by being more focused and selective about the studies which are reviewed Integration Insufficient integration between theory and research The chapter should place more emphasis on integrating RPG and M/E theory than on research Conclusion Insufficient as a cohesive summary of the best available psychological theory and research about the topic Remind the reader about the importance of the problem or phenomenon of interest Summarise key points Address the focus questions Add practical, take-home message(s) Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is basic Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). Instead: it is, most often, not needed at all, or use section linking Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes Figures Figures are captioned Each Figure is referred to at least once within the main text Citations use correct APA style References use very good APA style Check and correct use of capitalisation[2] Separate page numbers using an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Check consistency and completeness Learning features Reasonably good use of learning features Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Basic use of image(s) No use of table(s) Basic use of feature box(es) No use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s) No use of case studies or examples Basic use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Be more selective (I've removed low relevance links) Basic use of external links in the "External links" section Be more selective i.e., RPGs and M/E Social contribution ~9 logged, useful, mostly minor, mostly direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:57, 31 October 2023 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a very good presentation The presentation is under the maximum time limit — so there is room to expand (e.g., to include review of the best research on this topic) Overview An opening slide with the title and sub-title is displayed and narrated — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation Create an engaging introduction to hook audience interest A basic context for the presentation is established Focus questions and/or an outline of topics are presented Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation addresses the topic The presentation makes very good use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes basic implied use of relevant psychological research Ideally, make more explicit use of research The presentation relies heavily on a single citation which is not directly about RPGs Include more citations to support claims The presentation makes excellent use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice The presentation provides easy to understand information Conclusion A Conclusion slide is presented with excellent take-home message(s) Audio The audio is easy to follow The presentation makes effective use of narrated audio Audio communication is well paced Very good intonation The narration is well practiced and/or performed Audio recording quality was excellent The narrated content is well matched to the target topic (see content) but lacked synthesis of the best psychological research about this topic Video Overall, visual display quality is very good The presentation makes good use of text and image based slides The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read The visual communication is supplemented in a basic way by images and/or diagrams The presentation is well produced using simple tools The visual content is well matched to the target topic (see content) but lacked synthesis of the best psychological research about this topic Check and correct spelling (e.g., tropheies -> trophies) Reduce unnecessary use of exclamation marks Meta-data The chapter title is used, but the sub-title (or a shortened version of it) is not used, as the name of the presentation. The sub-title (or an abbreviation of the sub-title that fits within the 100 character limit) would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A very brief written description of the presentation is provided. Expand. Links to and from the book chapter are provided An inactive hyperlink to the book chapter is provided because the YouTube user account does not yet have access to advanced features Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are not provided A copyright license for the presentation is provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:59, 8 November 2023 (UTC)