Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2023/Physical activity tracking and exercise motivation

Initial suggestions

@U3230383: Thanks for tackling this topic.

Some initial suggestions:

• You might find it helpful to peek ahead at Tutorial 4 which has a section about self-tracking: Motivation and emotion/Tutorials/Functionalist theory and self-tracking#Self-tracking
• Also search for "quantified self" which is a synonym for self-tracking
• Check out other self-tracking chapters and physical exercise chapters to see how you can build on, link to, and integrate with that work.

Let me know if I can do anything else as you go along.

Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:01, 6 August 2023 (UTC)

Heading casing

Hi U3230383. FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:05, 23 August 2023 (UTC)

Feedback

Awesome start to the chapter. You're introduction so far is very engaging. I like how you started with a broad opening statement. --Taliastefanoski (discuss • contribs) 10:10, 24 August 2023 (UTC)

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Title The title is correctly worded and formatted The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted Headings Promising 2-level heading structure Keep the definitional background material relatively brief (e.g., types of motivation only matters if they are subsequently used to help understand the relationship between PAT and EM) Consider building out the heading structure for the most important section (e.g., The quantified self with exercise motivation). Consider rephrasing more top-level headings as questions Consider adopting closer alignment between the sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings Overview A brief, evocative description of the problem/topic is provided Add a scenario in a feature box (with an image) at the start to help catch reader interest. Focus questions should ideally revolve around the 4th focus question (that's the core topic) Key points Basic development of key points for each section, with relevant citations Avoid providing too much background information. Briefly summarise general concepts and provide internal wiki links to relevant book chapters and/or Wikipedia pages for further information. Then focus most of the content of this on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title. Theories are well selected but not sufficiently apply to PAT and EM Significant expansion of the "The quantified self with exercise motivation is recommended in order to address the topic. Use the best available psychological theory and research about this topic, with practical examples. Conclusion (the most important section): Underway What might the take-home, practical messages be? (What are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or specific focus questions about PAT and EM?) Figure A relevant figure is presented and captioned, but not cited Strive for captions which explain how the image connects to the sub-title and key points being made in the main text Cite each figure at least once in the main text Learning feature Two uses of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Consider including more examples/case studies, quiz question(s), table(s) etc. References OK. Messy. For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation make doi hyperlinks active (i.e., clickable) remove additional line spaces Resources OK. Messy. See Tutorial 02 for how to format these links User page Created – minimal, but sufficient Very brief description about self provided – consider expanding Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution At least three different types of contributions; some link(s) are indirect If adding the second or subsequent link to a page (or a talk/discussion page), create a direct link like / Add direct links to evidence. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions.

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Overall Overall, this is an insufficient chapter Insufficient use of primary, peer-reviewed sources as citations Under the maximum word count, so there is room to expand This chapter "beats around the bush" for ~2,000 words (i.e., too much preamble) before starting to directly tackle the target topic in the section titled "How does the quantified self intertwine with exercise motivation?". The content is this section is the best content of the whole chapter. There needs to be more of it. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Reasonably good Consider providing a case study or scenario with an image in a feature box to help engage reader interest Explains the problem or phenomenon The focus questions could be improved by being more specific to the topic (i.e., the sub-title) Theory Insufficient use of relevant psychological theory about this topic The chapter provides relatively too much discussion of general theory Overly focused on definitions and general theoretical background; instead summarise, link to related resources, and move to the more substantive aspects of theory Build more strongly on other related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters) Insufficient depth is provided about relevant theory(ies) No use of relevant tables, figures, and/or lists are to help clearly convey key theoretical information Lack of sufficient use of the most relevant academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the tags) The Reeve (2018) textbook is overused as a citation – instead, utilise primary, peer-reviewed sources Insufficient use of examples to illustrate relevant theoretical concepts Research Insufficient review of relevant research More detail about key studies would be ideal Any other systematic reviews or meta-analyses in this area? Greater emphasis on effect sizes could be helpful. Basic critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Integration Insufficient integration between theory and research The chapter places more emphasis on theory than on research Conclusion Insufficient as a cohesive summary of the best available psychological theory and research about the topic Remind the reader about the importance of the problem or phenomenon of interest Summarise key points Add practical, take-home message(s) Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is basic Avoid starting sentences with a citation unless the author is particularly pertinent. Instead, it is more interesting for the the content/key point to be communicated, with the citation included along the way or, more typically, in parentheses at the end of the sentence. Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes APA style Direct quotes need page numbers – even better, write in your own words > Figures Figures are well captioned Refer to each Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1) Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example: If there are three or more authors, cite the first author followed by et al., then year. For example, either: in-text, Smith et al. (2020), or in parentheses (Smith et al., 2020) References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation[2] Check and correct use of italicisation Learning features Insufficient use of learning features One use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text even more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Basic use of image(s) No use of table(s) Reasonably good use of feature box(es) Basic use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s) Insufficient use of relevant case studies or examples Basic use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Use bullet points per Tutorial 02 Include sources in parentheses Basic use of external links in the "External links" section Use bullet points per Tutorial 02 Rename links per Tutorial 02 Include sources in parentheses Social contribution ~1 logged, useful, minor/moderate/major social contributions with direct links to evidence ~3 logged social contributions without direct links to evidence, so unable to easily verify and assess

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Overall Overall, this is a very good presentation Overview An opening slide with the title and sub-title is displayed — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation Also narrate the title and sub-title Note that "ladies and gentleman" may not be gender-inclusive Consider establishing a context for the presentation through an example Focus questions and/or an outline of topics are presented Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation addresses the topic An appropriate amount of content is presented — not too much or too little The presentation makes good use of relevant psychological theory, but is overly focused on general motivational theory - concentrate on theory that specifically helps to understand how self-tracking can influence exercise motivation The presentation makes implied use of relevant psychological research; ideally make more explicit use of research Include citations to support claims The presentation makes basic use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice The presentation provides easy to understand information Conclusion A Conclusion slide is presented with good summary The presentation could be strengthened by expanding on the take-home message (e.g., answers to more than one focus question) Audio The audio is fun, easy to follow, and interesting to listen to The presentation makes effective use of narrated audio Audio communication is well paced Excellent intonation enhances listener interest and engagement The narration is well practiced and/or performed Audio recording quality was excellent The narrated content is reasonably well matched to the target topic (see content) but is a general overview rather than synthesising the best psychological theory and research Video Overall, visual display quality is very good The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images and/or diagrams The presentation is very well produced The visual content is reasonably well matched to the target topic (see content) but is a general overview rather than synthesising the best psychological theory and research Meta-data The chapter sub-title but not the chapter title is used in the name of the presentation. The title would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A very brief written description of the presentation is provided. Expand. Links to and from the book chapter are provided Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are communicated A copyright license for the presentation is provided in the presentation description but not in the meta-data

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