Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2023/Moral outrage

Initial suggestions

@U3215934: Thanks for tackling this topic. Some initial suggestions:

• Check out other related chapters and see how you can build on, link to, and integrate with that work:
  • Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Anger
  • Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Morality
• What psychological theories can help to understand? What is the main research in this area?

Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 12:36, 7 August 2023 (UTC)

Heading casing

FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 12:02, 28 September 2023 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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Title The title is correctly worded and formatted The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted Headings Excellent – Well developed 2-level heading structure, with meaningful headings that directly relate to the core topic See earlier comment about Heading casing Logical structure aligned with sub-title questions Consider expressing top-level headings as questions Overview Excellent - Scenario, image, evocative description of the problem/topic, relevant psychological theory/research, and focus questions Move the scenario or case study (COVID-19) into a feature box (with an image) to the start of this section to help catch reader interest A brief, evocative description of the problem/topic is provided Focus questions are aligned with sub-title and top-level headings Key points Promising development of key points for each section Lack of relevant citations For sections which include sub-sections include key points for an overview paragraph prior to branching into the sub-headings Strive for an integrated balance of theory and research, with practical examples Use Australian spelling (e.g., analyze -> analyse; behavior -> behaviour) Is this genAI content? If so, it needs to be acknowledged as such in the edit summaries otherwise it violates academic integrity. Conclusion (the most important section): Underway What might the take-home, practical messages be? (What are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions?) Figure A relevant figure is presented and captioned Caption could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text Cite each figure at least once in the main text Consider increasing image size from to make it easier to view Learning feature Promising use of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Promising use of example(s)/case study(ies) Consider including more examples/case studies, quiz question(s), table(s) etc. References Well selected For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation italicisation Resources See also Excellent External links Very good Use sentence casing User page Good Description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution Excellent – at least three different types of contributions with direct link(s) to evidence At least one contribution has been made and summarised with indirect link(s) to evidence If adding the second or subsequent link to a page (or a talk/discussion page), create a direct link like / Add direct links to evidence. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions. Great to see you on X (formally known as Twitter)! Use a numbered list (see Tutorial 02) Add a brief summary of each contribution None summarised on user page with direct link(s) to evidence – this was covered in Tutorial 03. Looking ahead to the book chapter submission, see how to earn marks for social contributions.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 12:02, 28 September 2023 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient chapter Some parts of this chapter are excellent and others are insufficient I suspect that some of this chapter is genAI content. If so, it violates academic integrity. Excellent use of academic, peer-reviewed citations to support claims in some places Use of academic, peer-reviewed citations is lacking in some other places (e.g., see the tags) Well under the maximum word count, so there is room to expand For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Solid Engages reader interest by presenting a case study or scenario in a feature box with a relevant image Briefly/generally explain the problem or phenomenon. The dot points read like unedited genAI content. Clear focus questions Theory An promising range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained Builds reasonably well on related Wikipedia articles Build more strongly on related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters) Insufficient depth is provided about relevant theory(ies) When it comes to the crunch (detail), the chapter seems to run out of puff in several sections and lists what reads like generic genAI content. If so, . Use tables, figures, and/or lists are to help convey key theoretical information Some key citations are well used Insufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations in many palces (e.g., see the tags) Very good use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts Research Basic review of relevant research Any systematic reviews or meta-analyses in this area? Insufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations for many sections (e.g., see the tags) Basic critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Some claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags) Integration Basic integration between theory and research Conclusion Basic summary and conclusion Key points are summarised Address the focus questions Add practical, take-home message(s) Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is basic Some of the writing is excellent. Some is poor/incomplete (e.g., bullet-points). The chapter could be improved by developing some the bullet points into sentences and paragraphs Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). Instead: it is, most often, not needed at all, or use section linking Avoid overly emotive language (e.g,. desparately) in science-based communication Layout Include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections (see tags) APA style Use sentence casing for the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc. Use serial commas[2]. Video (1 min) Figures Figures are briefly captioned Provide more detailed Figure captions to help connect the figure to the text Use ampersand (&) inside parentheses and "and" outside parentheses List multiple citations in alphabetical order by first author surname Very limited reference list. Does not provide evidence that the best psychological theory and research about this topic has been used to develop this chapter. References use excellent APA style: Learning features Basic use of learning features Good use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text even more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Minimal use of image(s) No use of table(s) Minimal use of feature box(es) Good use of case studies or examples No use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s) Excellent use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Basic use of external links in the "External links" section Use sentence casing Use alphabetical order Social contribution No logged social contributions

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:54, 16 November 2023 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a basic presentation Overview An opening slide with the title and sub-title is displayed and narrated — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation Engaging introduction to hook audience interest Establish a context for the presentation (e.g., by explaining why it is important), to help the viewer understand Focus questions and/or an outline of topics are presented (implicit in sub-title) Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation addresses the topic An appropriate amount of content is presented — not too much or too little The presentation makes basic use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes insufficient use of relevant psychological research Ideally, make more explicit use of research The presentation makes excellent/very good/good/reasonably good/basic/insufficient use of citations to support claims Use APA style for citations The presentation makes basic use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples or case studies Conclusion Add a conclusion slide with practical, take-home messages in response to each focus question Audio The audio is easy to follow The presentation makes basic use of narrated audio Audio communication is well paced Very good intonation The narration could benefit from further scripting and practice (e.g., to remove umms) Audio recording quality was excellent Timer in background at end? The narrated content is reasonably well matched to the target topic but lacked synthesis of the best psychological research about this topic Video Overall, visual display quality is basic The presentation makes basic use of text and image based slides The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time The visual communication is supplemented in a basic way by images Also consider using diagrams The presentation is basically produced using simple tools The visual content is reasonably well matched to the target topic but lacked synthesis of the best psychological research about this topic Meta-data The chapter title is used, but the sub-title (or a shortened version of it) is not used, as the name of the presentation. The sub-title (or an abbreviation of the sub-title that fits within the 100 character limit) would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding. Links to and from the book chapter are provided An inactive hyperlink to the book chapter is provided because the YouTube user account does not yet have access to advanced features Licensing Image sources are communicated in a general way. Also provide links to each image and the license details (e.g., in the description). A copyright license for the presentation is provided in the presentation description but not in the meta-data

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:36, 21 November 2023 (UTC)