Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2023/Interoception and mental health

Initial suggestions

@U3229576: Thanks for tackling this topic.Some initial suggestions:

• Check out other related chapters and see how you can build on, link to, and integrate with that work:
  • Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Intuition
  • Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Mental health
• What psychological theories can help to understand? What is the main research in this area?Let me know if I can do anything else as you go along.

Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:10, 8 August 2023 (UTC)

Heading casing

FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:21, 23 August 2023 (UTC)

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Title Correct wording Incorrect capitalisation Headings Promising 2-level heading structure – could benefit from further development by expanding the structure Align top-level headings with focus questions Use 3rd person perspective Remove colons from end of heading Avoid having sections with only 1 sub-heading – use 0 or 2+ sub-headings Quiz doesn't need a separate heading; instead embed quiz questions within relevant sections Overview Add a scenario (e.g., "Think about when you get the feeling ...") in a feature box (with an image) at the start to help catch reader interest A brief, evocative description of the problem/topic is provided Add focus questions in a feature box at the end of the section (current the questions are in another section). Drop the first question (too general - can be briefly mentioned). Express in 3rd person perspective. Avoid double-barrelled questions. Measurement is not central. Can be mentioned, but probably doesn't warrant a focus question. Narrow in the relationship between I and MH. "What are the theoretical underpinnings of physiological and mental health?" is too broad. Key points Promising development of key points for each section, with relevant citations Avoid providing too much background information (e.g., what is mental health?). Briefly summarise general concepts and provide internal wiki links to relevant book chapters and/or Wikipedia pages for further information. Then focus most of the content of this on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title. Check and correct spelling (e.g., effect vs. affect) Strive for an integrated balance of theory and research Conclusion (the most important section): Well developed Underway What might the take-home, practical messages be? (What are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions?) Figure A relevant figure is presented, captioned, and cited Caption could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text Figure(s) are cited at least once in the main text Learning feature Excellent use of table(s) Promising use of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Consider including case study(ies), quiz question(s) etc. References Good Are there any systematic reviews about this topic? For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation make doi hyperlinks active (i.e., clickable) Resources See also OK Use first-level bullet points Rename links so that they are more user friendly (see Tutorial 02) Include source in brackets after link Also link to relevant Wikipedia pages External links Very good Use sentence casing User page Created – minimal, but sufficient Very brief description about self provided – consider expanding Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Add link to book chapter Social contribution Use a numbered list (see Tutorial 02) How to make social contributions was covered in Tutorial 03. Looking ahead to the book chapter submission, see how to earn marks for social contributions.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:03, 25 September 2023 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent chapter. It successfully uses psychological theory and research to address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. Over the maximum word count. The content beyond 4,000 words has been ignored for marking purposes. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Well developed Engages reader interest by presenting a case study and/or scenario with an image in a feature box Clearly explains the problem or phenomenon Clear focus questions The focus questions could be improved by being more specific to the topic (i.e., the sub-title) Theory An excellent range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained Build more strongly on other related chapters and/or Wikipedia articles (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters) Insightful depth is provided about relevant theory(ies) Effective use of tables, figures, and/or lists are to help clearly convey key theoretical information Key citations are well used The Reeve (2018) textbook is overused as a citation – instead, utilise primary, peer-reviewed sources Excellent use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts Research Excellent review of relevant research Excellent critical thinking about relevant research is evident Integration Excellent integration between theory and research Conclusion Very good summary and conclusion Remind the reader about the importance of the problem or phenomenon of interest Key points are well summarised Add practical, take-home message(s) Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is very good Some paragraphs are overly long. Communicate one key idea per paragraph in three to five sentences. Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes Layout The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections Grammar, spelling, and proofreading are excellent APA style Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159) Figures Figures are very well captioned Refer to each Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1) Tables Use APA style for captions. See example Each Table is referred to at least once within the main text using APA style Refer to each Table using APA style (e.g., do not use italics, check and correct capitalisation) Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example: Use ampersand (&) inside parentheses and "and" outside parentheses Do not italicise citations References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation[2] Check and correct use of italicisation Move non-peer-reviewed sources to the external links section Learning features Good to very good use of learning features One use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text even more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Excellent use of image(s) Very good use of table(s) Very good use of feature box(es) Very good use of case studies or examples Good use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s) Basic use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Use bullet points per Tutorial 02 Rename links per Tutorial 02 Basic use of external links in the "External links" section Use sentence casing Include sources in parentheses Social contribution ~3 logged, minor social contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:15, 4 November 2023 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a good presentation The presentation is over the maximum time limit — content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking and feedback purposes Overview An opening slide with the title and sub-title is displayed and narrated — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation Very engaging introduction to hook audience interest A context for the presentation is clearly established through an example Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation. Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation addresses the topic The presentation makes very good use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes basic use of relevant psychological research Ideally, make more explicit use of research The presentation includes citations to support claims The presentation makes good use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice Conclusion A Conclusion slide is presented with very good take-home message(s) The Conclusion only partly fitted within the time limit Audio The audio is easy to follow The presentation makes good use of narrated audio Audio communication is well paced Good intonation Consider improving articulation to enhance the clarity of speech The narration could benefit from further practice Audio recording quality was good. Probably an on-board microphone was used (e.g., keyboard and/or mouse clicks were audible). Consider using an external microphone. The narrated content is well matched to the target topic (see content) Video Overall, visual display quality is very good The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images and/or diagrams The presentation is well produced using simple tools The visual content is well matched to the target topic (see content) Meta-data The chapter title and sub-title (or an abbreviation to fit within the 100 character limit) are used in the name of the presentation — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation A very brief written description of the presentation is provided. Expand. Links to and from the book chapter are provided An inactive hyperlink to the book chapter is provided because the YouTube user account does not yet have access to advanced features The link to the book chapter doesn't look to be correct Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are not provided A copyright license for the presentation is provided in the presentation description but not in the meta-data

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:27, 12 November 2023 (UTC)