Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2023/Identity fusion and motivation

Initial suggestions

@U3235369: Thanks for tackling this topic. Some initial suggestions:

• Check out other related chapters and see how you can build on, link to, and integrate with that work:
  • Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Self
  • Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Social psychology
• What psychological theories can help to understand? What is the main research in this area?

Let me know if I can do anything else as you go along. Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:11, 10 August 2023 (UTC)

The Matildas, the Australian women's national soccer team.

Sports fandom leading to identity fusion, a recent example. An idea for a fictional case study perhaps?--Rumesa.Aria (discuss • contribs) 17:49, 22 August 2023 (UTC)

Thanks @Rumesa.Aria, great idea, I have worked it in. Now I'm trying to cover off both the identity fusion within the team as well as with Australians identifying with them also. Thanks U3235369 (discuss • contribs) 12:38, 24 August 2023 (UTC)

Heading casing

Hi U3235369. FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:00, 23 August 2023 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent chapter. It successfully uses psychological theory and research to address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Reasonably good Engages reader interest by introducing a case study and/or scenario with an image in a feature box Explain the problem or phenomenon Clear focus questions Theory An excellent range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained The chapter doesn't wander off into discussion of irrelevant theory Build more strongly on other related chapters and/or Wikipedia articles(e.g., by embedding links to other chapters) Insightful depth is provided about relevant theory(ies) Effective use of tables, figures, and/or lists are to help clearly convey key theoretical information Key citations are well used It could have been helpful to know more about Swann's initial work Excellent use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts Research Very good review of relevant research More detail about key studies would be ideal Any systematic reviews or meta-analyses in this area? Greater emphasis on effect sizes could be helpful. Very good critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Integration Excellent integration between theory and research More detailed review of research would be ideal Conclusion Excellent/ summary and conclusion Key points are well summarised Clear take-home message(s) Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is excellent Internationalise: Write for an international, rather than domestic, audience. Australians make up only 0.32% of the world human population. Avoid starting sentences with a citation unless the author is particularly pertinent. Instead, it is more interesting for the the content/key point to be communicated, with the citation included along the way or, more typically, in parentheses at the end of the sentence. Layout The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections Grammar, spelling, and proofreading are excellent APA style Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159) Direct quotes need page numbers – even better, write in your own words Figures Figures are very well captioned Each Figure is referred to at least once within the main text Citations use correct APA style References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of italicisation Learning features Excellent use of learning features Good use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text even more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Use in-text interwiki links, rather than external links, per Tutorial 02 Excellent use of image(s) Excellent use of table(s) Excellent use of feature box(es) Excellent use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s) Excellent use of case studies or examples Excellent use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Very good use of external links in the "External links" section Use alphabetical order Include sources in parentheses Social contribution ~12 logged, useful, minor to major social contributions with direct links to evidence ~1 logged social contributions without direct links to evidence, so unable to easily verify and assess

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