Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2023/Identity fusion and motivation

Initial suggestions

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@U3235369: Thanks for tackling this topic. Some initial suggestions:

Let me know if I can do anything else as you go along. Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:11, 10 August 2023 (UTC)Reply

The Matildas, the Australian women's national soccer team.

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Sports fandom leading to identity fusion, a recent example. An idea for a fictional case study perhaps?--Rumesa.Aria (discusscontribs) 17:49, 22 August 2023 (UTC)Reply

Thanks @Rumesa.Aria, great idea, I have worked it in. Now I'm trying to cover off both the identity fusion within the team as well as with Australians identifying with them also. Thanks U3235369 (discusscontribs) 12:38, 24 August 2023 (UTC)Reply

Heading casing

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Hi U3235369. FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example:

Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory

Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:00, 23 August 2023 (UTC)Reply


Topic development feedback

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  1. The title is correctly worded and formatted
  2. The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted
  1. Promising 2-level heading structure – could benefit from further development by expanding the structure
  2. The headings could benefit by being more detailed/descriptive
  3. "Relevant theories" is vague; customise
  4. Top-level headings are reasonably well aligned with focus questions
  1. A scenario or case study is presented in a feature box at the start of this section
  2. Use 3rd person perspective (except 1st/2nd person can work for feature boxes/scenarios)
  3. A brief, evocative description of the problem/topic is provided
  4. Focus questions are reasonably well aligned with sub-title and top-level headings
  5. Theories focus question is a bit vague
  6. Second part of last focus question probably not needed (just ask one question)
  1. Solid development of key points
  2. Principles are probably related to theories; consider how to integrate
  3. Avoid overcapitalisation (e.g, Motivation -> motivation)
  4. Keep general material about motivation brief
  5. Theories could have their own sub-headings
  6. How fused are you could be an activity in a feature box rather than a main level heading
  7. Useful applied examples in Consequences section
  8. Promising balance of theory and research
  9. Conclusion (the most important section):
    1. Well underway
  1. Excellent - A relevant figure is presented, captioned, and cited
  2. There are two Figure 1s
  3. The figure caption(s) provide(s) a clear, appropriately detailed description that is meaningfully connected with the main text
  4. Figure(s) are cited at least once in the main text
  1. One use of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters
  2. Excellent use of example(s)/case study(ies)
  3. Promising use of example(s)/case study(ies) quiz question(s), table(s) etc.
  1. Very good
  2. For APA referencing style, check and correct:
    1. capitalisation
    2. page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-)
  1. See also
    1. Excellent
  2. External links
    1. Very good
    2. Focus on links of international relevance; Mathildas links might be better embedded in the relevant case study
  1. Excellent – used effectively
  2. Description about self provided – consider expanding
  3. Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.
  4. Link provided to book chapter
  1. Excellent – at least three different types of contributions with direct link(s) to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:47, 25 September 2023 (UTC)Reply

Book chapter review and feedback

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Overall

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  1. Overall, this is an excellent chapter. It successfully uses psychological theory and research to address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem.
  2. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits
  1. Reasonably good
  2. Engages reader interest by introducing a case study and/or scenario with an image in a feature box
  3. Explain the problem or phenomenon
  4. Clear focus questions
  1. An excellent range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained
  2. The chapter doesn't wander off into discussion of irrelevant theory
  3. Build more strongly on other related chapters and/or Wikipedia articles(e.g., by embedding links to other chapters)
  4. Insightful depth is provided about relevant theory(ies)
  5. Effective use of tables, figures, and/or lists are to help clearly convey key theoretical information
  6. Key citations are well used
  7. It could have been helpful to know more about Swann's initial work
  8. Excellent use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts
  1. Very good review of relevant research
  2. More detail about key studies would be ideal
  3. Any systematic reviews or meta-analyses in this area? Greater emphasis on effect sizes could be helpful.
  4. Very good critical thinking about relevant research is evident
  5. Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by:
    1. describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies
    2. discussing the direction of relationships
    3. considering the strength of relationships
    4. acknowledging limitations
    5. pointing out critiques/counterarguments
    6. suggesting specific directions for future research
  1. Excellent integration between theory and research
  2. More detailed review of research would be ideal
  1. Excellent/ summary and conclusion
  2. Key points are well summarised
  3. Clear take-home message(s)
  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the quality of written expression is excellent
    2. Internationalise: Write for an international, rather than domestic, audience. Australians make up only 0.32% of the world human population.
    3. Avoid starting sentences with a citation unless the author is particularly pertinent. Instead, it is more interesting for the the content/key point to be communicated, with the citation included along the way or, more typically, in parentheses at the end of the sentence.
  2. Layout
    1. The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections
  3. Grammar, spelling, and proofreading are excellent
  4. APA style
    1. Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159)
    2. Direct quotes need page numbers – even better, write in your own words
    3. Figures
      1. Figures are very well captioned
      2. Each Figure is referred to at least once within the main text
    4. Citations use correct APA style
    5. References are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. Check and correct use of italicisation
  1. Excellent use of learning features
  2. Good use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text even more interactive. See example.
  3. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
  4. Use in-text interwiki links, rather than external links, per Tutorial 02
  5. Excellent use of image(s)
  6. Excellent use of table(s)
  7. Excellent use of feature box(es)
  8. Excellent use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s)
  9. Excellent use of case studies or examples
  10. Excellent use of interwiki links in the "See also" section
  11. Very good use of external links in the "External links" section
    1. Use alphabetical order
    2. Include sources in parentheses
  1. ~12 logged, useful, minor to major social contributions with direct links to evidence
  2. ~1 logged social contributions without direct links to evidence, so unable to easily verify and assess

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:09, 3 November 2023 (UTC)Reply

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Overall

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  1. Overall, this is an excellent presentation
  1. An opening slide with the title and sub-title is displayed and narrated — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation
  2. Very engaging introduction to hook audience interest  
  3. A context for the presentation is clearly established through an example
  4. Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation.
  1. Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section
  2. The presentation addresses the topic
  3. An appropriate amount of content is presented — not too much or too little
  4. The presentation makes excellent use of relevant psychological theory
  5. The presentation makes very good use of relevant psychological research
  6. Some citations are included to support claims
  7. The presentation makes excellent use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice
  8. The presentation provides practical, easy to understand information
  1. A Conclusion slide is presented with excellent take-home message(s)
  1. The audio is fun, easy to follow, and interesting to listen to
  2. The presentation makes effective use of narrated audio
  3. Audio communication is well paced
  4. Excellent intonation enhances listener interest and engagement
  5. The narration is well practiced and/or performed
  6. Audio recording quality was excellent
  7. The narrated content is well matched to the target topic (see content)
  1. Overall, visual display quality is excellent
  2. The presentation makes creative use of text and image based slides
  3. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read
  4. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images and/or diagrams
  5. The presentation is very well produced
  6. The visual content is well matched to the target topic (see content)
  1. The chapter title is used, but the sub-title (or a shortened version of it) is not used, as the name of the presentation. The sub-title (or an abbreviation of the sub-title that fits within the 100 character limit) would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding.
  3. Links to and from the book chapter are provided
  4. An inactive hyperlink to the book chapter is provided because the YouTube user account does not yet have access to advanced features
  1. Image sources and their copyright status are communicated
    1. This presentation has probably violated the copyrights of image owners as images appear to have been used without permission and/or acknowledgement
  2. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:02, 11 November 2023 (UTC)Reply

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