Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2023/Hedonic adaptation prevention model

Heading casing

FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:24, 21 September 2023 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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Title The title is correctly worded and formatted The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted Headings See earlier comment about Heading casing Basic, 1-level heading structure – would benefit from further development, perhaps using a 2-level structure Overview Very basic development Add a scenario in a feature box at the start to help catch reader interest Add a brief, evocative description of the problem/topic Remove overcapitalisation Use APA style for citations Use correct spelling and grammar Add focus questions Use 3rd person perspective Key points Basic development of key points for each section, with relevant citations Some evidence of familiarity with key aspects of theory Some evidence of familiarity with key research Some promising ideas for examples/case studies Conclusion (the most important section): Hasn't been developed What might the take-home, practical messages be? (What are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions?) Consider using the Studiosity service and/or a service like Grammarly to help improve the quality of written expression Figure A relevant figure is presented Include an APA style descriptive figure caption Cite each figure at least once in the main text Consider increasing image size from to make it easier to view Learning feature Two uses of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Consider including more examples/case studies, quiz question(s), table(s) etc. References OK For APA referencing style, check and correct: alphabetical order italicisation Remove extra line breaks make doi hyperlinks active (i.e., clickable) Resources See also One link provided to a Wikiversity chapter External links Not developed User page Used effectively Excellent description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution No wiki edits Discussion forum posts Twitter link doesn't seem to go to any evidence of posting to the hashtag

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:24, 21 September 2023 (UTC)

Multimedia presentation feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a basic presentation It could be improved by providing a cogent description of hedonic adaptation and then explaining the HAP The presentation could also be improved by providing synthesis of relevant research about the HAP The presentation is over the maximum time limit — content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking and feedback purposes Overview An opening slide with the title and sub-title is displayed and narrated — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation Create an engaging introduction to hook audience interest A basic context for the presentation is established Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation. Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation somewhat addresses the topic There is too much content, in too much detail, presented within the allocated time frame. Zoom out and provide a higher-level presentation at a slower pace. It is best to cover a small amount of well-targetted content than a large amount of poorly selected content. The presentation makes basic use of relevant psychological theory The presentation could be strengthened by providing a better description of hedonic adaption Where is the "Application of the HAP model" content from? The presentation makes insufficient/no use of relevant psychological research Ideally, make more explicit use of research Include more citations to support claims The presentation makes basic use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice Conclusion The Conclusion did not fit within the time limit Audio The presentation makes basic use of narrated audio Audio communication is well paced Very good intonation The narration is reasonably well practiced and/or performed Audio recording quality was excellent The narrated content lacked synthesis of the best psychological research about this topic Video Overall, visual display quality is basic The presentation makes basic use of text and image based slides The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read The visual communication is supplemented in a basic way by images Also consider using diagrams The presentation is basically produced using simple tools The visual content lacked synthesis of the best psychological research about this topic Meta-data The chapter title is used, but the sub-title (or a shortened version of it) is not used, as the name of the presentation. The sub-title (or an abbreviation of the sub-title that fits within the 100 character limit) would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding. Links to and from the book chapter are provided An inactive hyperlink to the book chapter is provided because the YouTube user account does not yet have access to advanced features The presentation is incorrectly categorised as being for kids. This creates limitations, such as being unable to add the presentation to a playlist. More info. Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are not provided A copyright license for the presentation is provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:44, 15 November 2023 (UTC)

Book chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a very good chapter. It makes very good use of psychological theory and research to address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. Excellent use of academic, peer-reviewed citations to support claims Well under the maximum word count, so there is room to expand For additional feedback, see the following comments and https://en.wikiversity.org/w/index.php?title=Motivation_and_emotion%2FBook%2F2023%2FHedonic_adaptation_prevention_model&diff=2581590&oldid=2574878[ these copyedits] Overview Underdeveloped Engage reader interest by presenting a case study or scenario in a feature box with a relevant image Clearly explains the problem or phenomenon Provide focus questions in a feature box to help guide the reader and structure the chapter Theory An excellent range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained This chapter could be improved by providing a clearer description hedonic adaption (and providing an embedded link to the chapter about that topic) Builds well on related Wikipedia articles Build more strongly on related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters) Insightful depth is provided about relevant theory(ies) Basic use of tables, figures, and/or lists are to help convey key theoretical information Key citations are well used Very good use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts Consider using more examples to illustrate theoretical concepts Research Excellent review of relevant research More detail about key studies would be ideal Very good critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Most claims are referenced Integration Excellent integration between theory and research Conclusion Very good summary and conclusion Remind the reader about the importance of the problem or phenomenon of interest Key points are well summarised Add practical, take-home message(s) Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is very good Avoid one sentence paragraphs. Convey one idea per paragraph using three to five sentences. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). Instead: it is, most often, not needed at all, or use section linking Layout The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections See earlier comments about heading casing Grammar The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags Consider using a grammar checking tool Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance Spelling Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour) APA style Use sentence casing for the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc. Use serial commas[1]. Video (1 min) Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159) Figures Figures are reasonably well captioned Each Figure is referred to at least once within the main text Citations use correct APA style Use ampersand (&) inside parentheses and "and" outside parentheses References use very good APA style: Check and correct use of capitalisation[2] Include hyperlinked dois Learning features Reasonably good use of learning features Good use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text even more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Basic use of image(s) No use of table(s) Reasonably good use of feature box(es) Good use of case studies or examples No use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s) Basic use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Use bullet points per Tutorial 02 Also include links to related Wikipedia articles Use alphabetical order Move external links to the external links section Basic use of external links in the "External links" section Use sentence casing Use alphabetical order Add more links Social contribution ~2 logged, useful, minor to moderate social contributions with direct links to evidence ~1 logged social contributions without direct links to evidence, so unable to easily verify and assess

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:51, 18 November 2023 (UTC)