Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2023/Episodic future thinking and delay discounting

Initial suggestions

@LightDragonflies: Thanks for tackling this topic. Some initial suggestions:

• Check out other related chapters and see how you can build on, link to, and integrate with that work:
  • Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Cognitive
  • Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Time perspective
• What psychological theories can help to understand? What is the main research in this area?

Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:45, 7 August 2023 (UTC)

Heading casing

FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:45, 29 September 2023 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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Title The title is correctly worded and formatted The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted Remove user name – authorship is as per the list of topics and the page's editing history Headings See earlier comment about Heading casing Promising 2-level heading structure – could benefit from further development (e.g., by expanding the structure for the critical section about the relationship) Health interventions section not required - but these could be excellent areas for case studies/applied examples Promising alignment between focus questions and heading structure Overview Add a scenario or case study into a feature box (with an image) at the start of this section to help catch reader interest A brief, evocative description of the problem/topic is provided Present focus questions in a feature box at the end of this section Key points Promising development of key points for each section, with relevant citations Avoid providing too much background information. Briefly summarise general concepts and provide internal wiki links to relevant book chapters and/or Wikipedia pages for further information. Then focus most of the content of this on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title. Strive for an integrated balance of theory and research, with practical examples Conclusion (the most important section): Hasn't been developed Figure A relevant figure is presented Caption could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text Cite each figure at least once in the main text Learning feature Excellent use of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Consider including more examples/case studies, quiz question(s), table(s) etc. References Four out of six references provided For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation make doi hyperlinks active (i.e., clickable) page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Resources See also Very good Use bullet-points (see Tutorial 02) External links Not developed User page Created – minimal, but sufficient Very brief description about self provided – consider expanding Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution None summarised on user page with direct link(s) to evidence – this was covered in Tutorial 03. Looking ahead to the book chapter submission, see how to earn marks for social contributions.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:45, 29 September 2023 (UTC)

Social Contributions

Hi, you have taken a really interesting approach to this topic, I especially like how you have separated the sections into each addiction. Are there any systematic reviews about this topic that might be relevant? Additionally, I would consider adding interactive quizzes for each addition. --U3224582 (discuss • contribs) 05:32, 8 October 2023 (UTC)

Book chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent chapter. It successfully uses psychological theory and research to address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Well developed Engages reader interest by introducing a case study and/or scenario with an image in a feature box Clearly explains the problem or phenomenon Clear focus questions Ideally, provide open-ended, rather than closed-ended focus questions Theory An excellent range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained Build more strongly on other related chapters and/or Wikipedia articles(e.g., by embedding links to other chapters) Insightful depth is provided about relevant theory(ies) No use of tables, figures, and/or lists are to help convey key theoretical information Key citations are well used Excellent use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts Research Excellent/ review of relevant research Excellent critical thinking about relevant research is evident Integration Excellent integration between theory and research Conclusion Reasonably good summary and conclusion Remind the reader about the importance of the problem or phenomenon of interest Key points are summarised Add practical, take-home message(s) Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is excellent Avoid starting sentences with a citation unless the author is particularly pertinent. Instead, it is more interesting for the the content/key point to be communicated, with the citation included along the way or, more typically, in parentheses at the end of the sentence. Some paragraphs are overly long. Communicate one key idea per paragraph in three to five sentences. Layout The chapter is well structured Avoid having sections with 1 sub-section Include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections (see tags) See earlier comments about heading casing Grammar and proofreading are excellent Proofreading More proofreading is needed (e.g., fix punctuation and typographical errors) to bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard Remove unnecessary capitalisation APA style Use sentence casing for the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc. Figures Figures are well captioned Each Figure is referred to at least once within the main text Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example: If there are three or more authors, cite the first author followed by et al., then year. For example, either: in-text, Smith et al. (2020), or in parentheses (Smith et al., 2020) Use ampersand (&) inside parentheses and "and" outside parentheses References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation[1] Use alphabetical order Learning features Excellent/Very good/Good/Basic/Insufficient use of learning features Very good use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text even more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Good use of image(s) No use of table(s) Basic use of feature box(es) Excellent use of case studies or examples No use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s) Basic use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Use bullet points per Tutorial 02 Include more links Basic use of external links in the "External links" section Use bullet points per Tutorial 02 Include more links Social contribution ~4 logged, useful, moderate social contributions with direct links to evidence Remove clarification tags once you fix the problem

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:51, 4 November 2023 (UTC)

Multimedia presentation feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a good to very good presentation The presentation is over the maximum time limit — content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking and feedback purposes Overview An opening slide with the title and sub-title is briefly displayed Also narrate the title and sub-title — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. This presentation has an opening scenario to hook audience interest A context for the presentation is clearly established through an example Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation. Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation addresses the topic The presentation makes very good use of relevant psychological theory The presentation lacks explicit use of relevant psychological research Include citations to support claims The presentation makes excellent use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice The presentation provides easy to understand information Conclusion A general conclusion slide is presented with a verbal summary The Conclusion only partly fitted within the time limit Audio The audio is easy to follow The presentation makes good use of narrated audio Consider slowing down and leaving longer pauses between sentences. This can help the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point Reasonably good intonation The narration is well practiced and/or performed Audio recording quality was good Review microphone set-up to achieve higher recording quality (there was some audio static/mini-glitches) The narrated content is well matched to the target topic (see content) but lacked synthesis of the best psychological research about this topic Video Overall, visual display quality is good The presentation makes good use of text and image based slides The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time The presentation could be strengthened by adding some more text (e.g., about take-home messages) The visual communication is supplemented in a basic way by images and/or diagrams Also consider using diagrams The presentation is well produced using simple tools The visual content is well matched to the target topic (see content) but could be strengthened by making more explicit use of the best psychological research about this topic Meta-data The chapter title and sub-title (or an abbreviation to fit within the 100 character limit) are used in the name of the presentation — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation A written description of the presentation is provided Links to and from the book chapter are provided An inactive hyperlink to the book chapter is provided because the YouTube user account does not yet have access to advanced features Licensing Image sources are communicated Also indicate the copyright license for the images A copyright license for the presentation is not provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:20, 8 November 2023 (UTC)