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The topic development submission has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history for editing changes made whilst reviewing this chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date.
None summarised on user page with direct link(s) to evidence – this was covered in Tutorial 03. Looking ahead to the book chapter submission, see how to earn marks for social contributions.
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Hey, I think you've displayed your page really well. I would consider adding a table to compare the different attachment styles you mentioned. I look forward to your finished work :) --U3224582 (discuss • contribs) 05:24, 8 October 2023 (UTC)Reply
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Hi, thank you for the time you have spent working on this chapter, I think it was very well done. I have made some changes to your reference list. Referencing an article and a book can be slightly different; when you reference the book, you italicise the title instead of the publisher (don't worry, I find it strange too!)
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This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Chapter marks will be available via UCLearn along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.
Overall, this is an excellent chapter. It successfully uses psychological theory and research to address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem.
For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits
Overall, the quality of written expression is very good
Some paragraphs are overly long. Communicate one key idea per paragraph in three to five sentences.
Some sentences are overly long. Strive for the simplest expression. Consider splitting longer sentences into two shorter sentences.
Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes
Avoid starting sentences with a citation unless the author is particularly pertinent. Instead, it is more interesting for the the content/key point to be communicated, with the citation included along the way or, more typically, in parentheses at the end of the sentence.
Layout
Include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections (see [Provide more detail] tags)
Good use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text even more interactive. See example.
No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
Very good use of image(s)
Basic use of table(s)
Good use of feature box(es)
Good use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s)
Basic use of case studies or examples
Very good use of interwiki links in the "See also" section
Use sentence casing
Good of external links in the "External links" section
Latest comment: 11 months ago1 comment1 person in discussion
The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's UCLearn site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.
Audio recording quality was good. Review microphone set-up to achieve higher recording quality. Probably an on-board microphone was used (e.g., keyboard and/or mouse clicks were audible). Consider using an external microphone.
The narrated content is well matched to the target topic (see content) but lacked synthesis of the best psychological research about this topic
The presentation makes basic use of text and image based slides
There is a lot of "these", "this", "they" etc. without naming the target construct (e.g., slide 2). Communication can be strengthened by explicitly naming the "thing".
The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read
The visual communication is supplemented in a basic way by images
Also consider using diagrams
The presentation is basically produced using simple tools
The visual content is well matched to the target topic (see content) but lacked synthesis of the best psychological research about this topic
The chapter title and sub-title (or an abbreviation to fit within the 100 character limit) are used in the name of the presentation — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation
A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding.
Links to and from the book chapter are provided
An inactive hyperlink to the book chapter is provided because the YouTube user account does not yet have access to advanced features