Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2023/Ecopsychology and stress

Initial suggestions

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@Dnamynts: Thanks for tackling this topic. Some initial suggestions:

Let me know if I can do anything else as you go along. Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:43, 9 August 2023 (UTC)Reply

Heading casing

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FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example:

Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory

Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:05, 29 September 2023 (UTC)Reply


Topic development feedback

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  1. The title is correctly worded and formatted
  2. The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted
  1. Promising 2-level heading structure – could benefit from further development
  2. Adopt closer alignment between the sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings
  3. Incorporate definition material into the Overview and/or subsequent sections with embedded inter-wiki link(s) to further information. Drop the definitional headings.
  4. Quiz doesn't need a separate heading; instead embed quiz questions within relevant sections
  1. Add a scenario or case study into a feature box (with an image) at the start of this section to help catch reader interest
  2. Citations should be in alphabetical order (APA style)
  3. Provide a brief, evocative description of the problem/topic
  4. Closer alignment between the sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings is recommended
  5. At least three focus questions are recommended
  1. Promising development of key points for each section, with relevant citations
  2. For sections which include sub-sections include key points for an overview paragraph prior to branching into the sub-headings
  3. Avoid providing too much background information. Briefly summarise general concepts and provide internal wiki links to relevant book chapters and/or Wikipedia pages for further information. Then focus most of the content of this on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title.
  4. Strive for an integrated balance of theory and research, with practical examples
  5. Conclusion (the most important section):
    1. Underway
    2. What might the take-home, practical messages be? (What are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions?)
  1. A relevant figure is presented and captioned
  2. Caption could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text
  3. Captions should start with a capital letter
  4. Cite each figure at least once in the main text
  1. Excellent use of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters
  2. Promising use of example(s)/case study(ies)
  3. Promising use of quiz question(s)
  1. OK
  2. For APA referencing style, check and correct:
    1. capitalisation
    2. italicisation
    3. page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-)
    4. remove book publisher location
  1. See also
    1. OK
    2. Also link to relevant Wikipedia pages
    3. Move external links to the External links section
  2. External links
    1. Very good
    2. Use sentence casing
  1. Excellent – used effectively
  2. Excellent description about self provided
  3. Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.
  4. Link provided to book chapter
  1. One out of three different types of contributions with direct link(s) to evidence
  2. Looking ahead to the book chapter submission, see how to earn marks for social contributions.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:05, 29 September 2023 (UTC)Reply

Book chapter review and feedback

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Overall

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  1. Overall, this is a very good chapter. It makes very good use of psychological theory and research to address a real-world phenomenon or problem.
  2. Over the maximum word count. The content beyond 4,000 words has been ignored for marking purposes.
  3. Obtaining (earlier) comments on a chapter plan via the topic development exercise could have helped to improve the chapter
  4. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits
  1. Underdeveloped
  2. Engage reader interest by presenting a case study or scenario with an image in a feature box
  3. Explains the problem or phenomenon
  4. Underdeveloped focus questions
  1. An excellent range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained
  2. Builds effectively on related Wikipedia articles
  3. Build more strongly on other related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters)
  4. Very good depth is provided about relevant theory(ies)
  5. Basic use of tables, figures, and/or lists are to help convey key theoretical information
  6. Key citations are well used
  7. Very good use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts
  1. Very good to excellent review of relevant research
  2. Very good critical thinking about relevant research is evident
  3. Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by:
    1. describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies
    2. discussing the direction of relationships
    3. considering the strength of relationships
    4. acknowledging limitations
    5. pointing out critiques/counterarguments
    6. suggesting specific directions for future research
  4. Some claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the [factual?] tags)
  1. Very good integration between theory and research
  1. Very good summary and conclusion
  2. There are some ideas in the Conclusion that don't appear earlier
  3. Remind the reader about the importance of the problem or phenomenon of interest
  4. Key points are well summarised
  5. Clear take-home message(s)
  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the quality of written expression is very good
    2. However, the chapter is over the word count and consists of many bullet points rather than mostly sentences and paragraphs
    3. Internationalise: Write for an international, rather than domestic, audience. Australians make up only 0.32% of the world human population. However, Australian ecopsychology can be used as an example.
    4. The chapter could be improved by developing some of the bullet points into full sentences and paragraphs
    5. Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes
  2. Layout
    1. Avoid having sections with a single sub-section
    2. Include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections (see [Provide more detail] tags)
  3. Grammar, spelling, and proofreading are excellent
  4. APA style
    1. Use sentence casing for the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc.
    2. Figures
      1. Figures are well captioned
      2. Each Figure is referred to at least once within the main text
    3. Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example:
      1. Use ampersand (&) inside parentheses and "and" outside parentheses
      2. List multiple citations in alphabetical order by first author surname
    4. References are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. Check and correct use of capitalisation[2]
      2. Check and correct use of italicisation
      3. Separate page numbers using an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-)
  1. Very good use of learning features
  2. Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles
  3. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
  4. Good use of image(s)
  5. No use of table(s)
  6. Good use of feature box(es)
  7. Very good use of case studies or examples
  8. Excellent use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s)
  9. Basic use of interwiki links in the "See also" section
    1. Also include links to related Wikipedia articles
  10. Good use of external links in the "External links" section (not counted for marking purposes)
    1. Use sentence casing
    2. Use alphabetical order
  1. ~16 logged, useful, minor to major social contributions with direct links to evidence
  2. Use a numbered list per Tutorial 02

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 13:45, 4 November 2023 (UTC)Reply

Multimedia presentation feedback

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Overall

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  1. Overall, this is an excellent presentation
  1. This presentation could be improved by displaying and narrating a slide with the same title and sub-title as the book chapter to help the viewer understand the purpose of the presentation
  2. Very engaging introduction to hook audience interest  
  3. A context for the presentation is clearly established through an example
  4. Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation.
  1. Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section
  2. The presentation addresses the topic
  3. An appropriate amount of content is presented — not too much or too little
  4. The presentation makes excellent use of relevant psychological theory
  5. The presentation makes good use of relevant psychological research
  6. The presentation includes citations to support claims
  7. The presentation makes excellent use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice
  8. The presentation provides practical, easy to understand information
  1. A Conclusion slide is presented with excellent take-home message(s)
  1. The audio is easy to follow, and interesting to listen to
  2. The presentation makes effectivec use of narrated audio
  3. Audio communication is well paced
  4. Very good intonation
  5. The narration is well practiced and/or performed
  6. Audio recording quality was very good
  7. The narrated content is well matched to the target topic (see content)
  1. Overall, visual display quality is excellent
  2. The presentation makes creative use of stock video and images
  3. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read
  4. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images and/or diagrams
  5. The presentation is very well produced
  6. The visual content is well matched to the target topic (see content)
  1. The chapter title and sub-title (or an abbreviation to fit within the 100 character limit) are used in the name of the presentation — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation
  2. A written description of the presentation is provided
  3. Links to and from the book chapter are provided
  4. An active hyperlink to the book chapter is provided
  1. Image sources and their copyright status are communicated
  2. A copyright license for the presentation is provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:24, 12 November 2023 (UTC)Reply

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