Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2023/Choice and emotion

Initial suggestions

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@Jingying Chen: Thanks for taking on this topic. Some initial suggestions:

Ideally, built on and link to relevant previous chapters in the new chapter.

Let me know if I can do anything as you go along. Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:03, 2 August 2023 (UTC)Reply

Notes from Underground

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Hi,

I've been reading Notes from Underground (Dostoevsky) and the main character in the book talks alot about how he feels that fear has stopped him from being able to make choices and how he feels very unable to move forward because of his anxieties. I just found this really interesting given the topic of this chapter and thought you might too! I think you've done a great job laying out this chapter, making it flow, and making it look really nice as well.

Thanks,

Zac U3216476 (discusscontribs) 19:49, 24 August 2023 (UTC)Reply


Topic development feedback

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  1. The title is correctly worded and formatted
  2. The sub-title is incorrectly worded
  1. Overall structure is good, well done, but could benefit from further development by expanding the structure
  2. Emphasis seems to be on theory rather than a balance with research; make sure to integrate research
  3. Drop the test yourself headings - just embed quiz questions in their relevant sections without headings
  1. Promising
  2. Add a feature box for the scenario/questions at the start to help catch reader interest
  3. Seems to focus on emotion more than choice? Consider revising.
  4. Focus questions 2 and 3 aren't clearly related to choice and emotion. Consider revising.
  1. Promising development of key points for each section, with relevant citations
  2. For sections which include sub-sections include key points for an overview paragraph prior to branching into the sub-headings
  3. Avoid providing too much background information. Briefly summarise general concepts and provide internal wiki links to relevant book chapters and/or Wikipedia pages for further information. Then focus most of the content of this on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title.
  4. Strive for an integrated balance of theory and research
  5. Conclusion (the most important section):
    1. Take-home messages lack sufficient relevant to the relation between choice and emotion. Review focus questions. And provide a take-home message for each focus question.
  1. Excellent – A relevant figure is presented and it is appropriately captioned
  2. Well done on creating and uploading your own image!   – this can also be listed as a social contribution. Fix spelling error. Include citation for source(s) in caption.
  3. Figure(s) are cited at least once in the main text
  1. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters
  2. Increase use of examples/case studies
  3. Promising use of quiz question(s), but be selective and focus on choice and emotion
  4. Consider including table(s) etc.
  1. Good
  2. For APA referencing style, check and correct:
    1. italicisation
    2. doi formatting
  1. See also
    1. Very good
  2. External links
    1. Very good
    2. Use sentence casing
  1. Excellent – used effectively
  2. Link(s) provided to professional profile(s)
  3. Link provided to book chapter
  1. Excellent – at least three different types of contributions with direct link(s) to evidence
  2. Use a numbered list (see Tutorial 02)

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:04, 19 September 2023 (UTC)Reply

Book chapter review and feedback

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Overall

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  1. Overall, this is a very good chapter. It makes very good use of psychological theory and research to address a real-world phenomenon or problem.
  2. Most aspects are excellent. The key areas for potential improvement are focusing in on the topic (emotion and topic) throughout the chapter (sometimes the chapter seems to drift) and the quality of written expression (grammar).
  3. The sub-title was incorrect. Have fixed it.
  4. Excellent use of academic, peer-reviewed citations to support claims
  5. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits
  1. Solid
  2. Engages reader interest via a case study or scenario in a feature box with a relevant image
  3. It is unclear how the case study relates to choice and emotion
  4. Briefly explains the problem or phenomenon
  5. Ideally, expand the focus on choice and emotion
  6. Clear focus questions
  1. A very good range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained
  2. Ideally, provide more theoretical content directly focused on the relationship between emotion and choice
  3. Builds effectively on related Wikipedia articles
  4. Build more strongly on related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters)
  5. Good depth is provided about relevant theory(ies); ideally, provide more focus on the relationship between emotion and choice/decision-making
  6. Effective use of tables, figures, and/or lists are to help clearly convey key theoretical information
  7. Key citations are well used
  8. Excellent use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts
  9. Ideally, the examples would focus more clearly on the relationship between emotion and choice
  1. Good review of relevant research
  2. More detail about key studies, especially those focused on the relationship between emotion and choice, would be ideal
  3. Reasonably good critical thinking about relevant research is evident
  4. Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by:
    1. describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies
    2. discussing the direction of relationships
    3. considering the strength of relationships
    4. acknowledging limitations
    5. pointing out critiques/counterarguments
    6. suggesting specific directions for future research
  1. Excellent integration between theory and research
  1. Excellent summary and conclusion
  2. Remind the reader about the importance of the problem or phenomenon of interest
  3. Key points are well summarised
  4. Add practical, take-home message(s)
  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the quality of written expression is good to very good
  2. Layout
    1. The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections
  3. Grammar
    1. The grammar for many sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags)
    2. Abbreviations
      1. Only use abbreviations such as e.g., i.e., et al., etc. inside parentheses, otherwise spell them out
  4. APA style
    1. Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159)
    2. Express numbers < 10 using words (e.g., two) and >= 10 and over using numerals (e.g., 99)
    3. Figures
      1. Figures are well captioned
      2. Each Figure is referred to at least once within the main text
    4. Tables
      1. Refer to each Table at least once within the main text (e.g., see Table 1)
    5. Use one referencing style (either APA style of wiki style), not both styles
  1. Excellent use of learning features
  2. Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles
  3. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
  4. Excellent use of image(s)
  5. Excellent use of table(s)
  6. Excellent use of feature box(es)
  7. Excellent use of case studies or examples
  8. Very good use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s)
  9. Reasonably good use of interwiki links in the "See also" section
    1. Also include links to related Wikipedia articles
    2. Use alphabetical order
  10. Excellent use of external links in the "External links" section
    1. Use alphabetical order
  1. ~65 logged, useful, minor/moderate/major social contributions with direct links to evidence
  2. Thanks very much for your extensive contributions

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:27, 21 November 2023 (UTC)Reply

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Overall

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  1. Overall, this is a reasonably good presentation
  1. An opening slide with the title is displayed very briefly. Also display and narrate the sub-title — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. An example is used to hook audience interest; perhaps this example could be clearer about how emotion can affect choice
  3. A context for the presentation is established
  4. Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation.
  1. Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section
  2. The presentation somewhat addresses the topic
  3. An appropriate amount of content is presented — not too much or too little
  4. The presentation makes reasonably good use of relevant psychological theory
  5. The presentation makes insufficient use of relevant psychological research
  6. Ideally, make more explicit use of research
  7. The presentation makes basic use of citations to support claims
  8. The presentation makes reasonably good use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice
  1. A conclusion is presented with very good take-home message(s)
  2. The conclusion provides a very good summary of the most relevant psychological theory but not research about this topic
  1. The audio is easy to follow
  2. The presentation makes very good use of narrated audio
  3. Audio communication is well paced
  4. Very good intonation
  5. The narration is well practiced and/or performed
  6. Audio recording quality was basic
  7. Review microphone set-up to achieve higher recording quality. Probably an on-board microphone was used (e.g., keyboard and/or mouse clicks were audible). Consider using an external microphone.
  8. The narrated content is reasonably well matched to the target topic but lacked synthesis of the best psychological research about this topic
  1. Overall, visual display quality is good
  2. The presentation makes creative use of stock video and images
  3. The presentation makes effective/good/reasonably good/basic use of animated slides and/or stock video
  4. The presentation makes effective/good/reasonably good/basic use of text and image based slides
  5. The presentation makes basic use of text-based slides
  6. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read
  7. The visual communication is supplemented in a reasonably good by images
  8. Also consider using diagrams
  9. The presentation is basically produced using simple tools
  10. The visual content is reasonably well matched to the target topic but lacked synthesis of the best psychological research about this topic
  1. The chapter title and sub-title (or an abbreviation to fit within the 100 character limit) are used in the name of the presentation — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation
  2. A written description of the presentation is provided
  3. Excellent use of time codes
  4. Links to and from the book chapter are provided
  5. An active hyperlink to the book chapter is provided
  6. The presentation is incorrectly categorised as being for kids. This creates limitations, such as being unable to add the presentation to a playlist. More info.
  1. Image sources and their copyright status are communicated
  2. A copyright license for the presentation is provided in the presentation description but not in the meta-data

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:39, 21 November 2023 (UTC)Reply

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