Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2023/Burn injury and body image

Initial suggestions

@Biancanappo: Thanks for tackling this topic. Some initial suggestions:

• Check out other related chapters and see how you can build on, link to, and integrate with that work:
  • Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Body image
  • Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Injury
• What psychological theories can help to understand? What is the main research in this area?

Let me know if I can do anything else as you go along. Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:04, 7 August 2023 (UTC)

Social Contribution

@Biancanappo: Hi, I have had a look at previous year's book chapter topic developments and I believe your references will need to be completed in full. Here's one I have done for you as an example: Cleary, M., Kornhaber, R., Thapa, D. K., West, S., Visentin, D. (2020). A quantitative systematic review assessing the impact of burn injuries on body image, Body Image, 33, 47-65. https://doi.org/10.1016/j.bodyim.2020.02.008 Your chapter looks great so far!

Heading casing

Hi Biancanappo. FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:15, 23 August 2023 (UTC)

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Title The title is correctly worded Title casing needs to be corrected The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted Headings See earlier comment about Heading casing Overly complicated 4-level structure – simplify Reduce the general sections about body image Expand and develop the sections about body image and burn injury (this is the chapter topic) Avoid having sections with only 1 sub-heading – use 0 or 2+ sub-headings Overview Excellent - Includes scenario, image, evocative description of the problem/topic with links to relevant psychological theory/research, and focus questions Move scenario in feature box with image top of section Use 3rd person perspective (except possibly in scenarios) Key points Promising development of key points for each section, with relevant citations Better to use your words than rely on quotes Have relevant systematic reviews/meta-analyses been identified and used? Avoid providing too much background information. Briefly summarise general concepts and provide internal wiki links to relevant book chapters and/or Wikipedia pages for further information. Then focus most of the content of this on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title. Promising balance of theory and research Conclusion (the most important section): Hasn't been developed What might the take-home, practical messages be? (What are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions?) Figure Excellent - A relevant figure is presented, captioned, and cited Cite each figure at least once in the main text Learning feature Promising use of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Excellent use of example(s)/case study(ies) Focus the quiz question(s) on the take-home messages for each focus question Also consider table(s) etc. References Good Overreliance on websites rather than academic peer-reviewed sources For APA referencing style, check and correct: move non-academic sources to External links remove "Retrieved from" capitalisation Remember that the goal is to identify and use the best academic theory and research about this topic Resources See also Not developed External links OK Use bullet-points (see Tutorial 02) Include source in brackets after link Move wiki links into a See also section User page Insufficient Social contribution None summarised with direct link(s) to evidence – this was covered in Tutorial 03. Looking ahead to the book chapter submission, see how to earn marks for social contributions.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:32, 22 September 2023 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a very good chapter. It successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. It could be improved by conducting a more thorough academic literature search about body image and burn injury. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Well developed Clearly explains the problem or phenomenon Engages reader interest by introducing a case study and/or example Consider adding an image to enhance interest Clear/Basic focus question(s) Theory An excellent range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained The chapter doesn't wander off into discussion of irrelevant theory Build more strongly on other related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters) Very good depth is provided about relevant theory(ies) Effective use of tables and/or lists are to help clearly convey key theoretical information Basic use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts. Consider using more. In some places there is a lack of sufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the tags) Research Very good/ review of relevant research More detail about key studies would be ideal Greater emphasis on effect sizes, major reviews, and/or meta-analyses would be helpful Good critical thinking about relevant research is evident Some/Many claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags) Integration Very good integration between theory and research Conclusion Excellent summary and conclusion Key points are well summarised Clear take-home message(s) Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is very good Some paragraphs are overly long. Communicate one key idea per paragraph in three to five sentences. Some sentences are overly long. Strive for the simplest expression. Consider splitting longer sentences into two shorter sentences. Layout The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections Grammar, spelling, and proofreading are excellent APA style Use sentence casing for the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc. Figures Figures caption(s) are OK, but could do more to help connect the figure to the text Refer to each Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1) Tables One of the figures should be captioned instead as a table Refer to each Table at least once within the main text (e.g., see Table 1) Citations use correct APA style This is a pretty short reference list; definitely shows that more literature searching and reviewing should be conducted There are several non-academic sources; move these to external links References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation[1] Check and correct use of italicisation Learning features Basic use of learning features Basic use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text even more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Basic use of image(s) Good use of table(s) Basic use of feature box(es) Basic use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s) Basic use of case studies or examples Good use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Basic use of external links in the "External links" section Social contribution No logged social contributions

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:21, 28 October 2023 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is an insufficient presentation in part due to being over the maximum time limit and not synthesising any relevant research. Appropriate meta-data and licensing were lacking. The presentation is over the maximum time limit — content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking and feedback purposes Overview An opening slide with the sub-title is displayed and narrated. Also display and narrate the title — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation and to be consistent with the book chapter. Create an engaging introduction to hook audience interest Establish a context for the topic (e.g., by using an example or explaining why it is important), to help the viewer understand Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation. Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation somewhat addresses the topic, but lacks synthesis of relevant research e.g., there is no citations for ACT-based body image/burn studies There is too much content, in too much detail, presented within the allocated time frame. Zoom out and provide a higher-level presentation at a slower pace. It is best to cover a small amount of well-targetted content than a large amount of poorly selected content. The presentation makes reasonably good use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes no use of relevant psychological research Include citations to support claims The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples or case studies Conclusion The Conclusion did not fit within the time limit Audio The presentation makes basic use of narrated audio Consider slowing down and leaving longer pauses between sentences. This can help the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point Audio recording quality was excellent The narrated content is reasonably well matched to the target topic (see content) (but lacks research) Video Overall, visual display quality is basico The presentation makes effective/good/basic use of text and image based slides The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read The visual communication is supplemented in a basic way by images\ Also consider using diagrams The presentation is well produced using simple tools The visual content is reasonably well matched to the target topic (see content) (but lacks synthesis of research) Meta-data The chapter sub-title but not the chapter title is used in the name of the presentation. The title would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A written description of the presentation is not provided. Providing an informative description can help viewers decide whether they want to watch or not. A link to the book chapter is not provided A link from the book chapter is provided Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are not provided A copyright license for the presentation is not provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:11, 7 November 2023 (UTC)