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Very brief description about self provided – consider expanding
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Latest comment: 1 year ago1 comment1 person in discussion
Hi there,
Great topic, really looking forward to seeing this thickened up. I would suggest to add in some case studies around what is motivated behaviour? A table may also be a good, clear way to describe what this is. I would also suggest to include an image of where the Basal Ganglia is located in the relevant spot. Mia Pearse (discuss • contribs) 05:01, 5 October 2023 (UTC)Reply
Latest comment: 1 year ago1 comment1 person in discussion
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Insufficient use of relevant psychological theory about this topic
Reduce general motivational theory. Increase emphasis on substantive aspects of theory that relate directly to the specific topic (i.e., the sub-title question).
Build more strongly on other related chapters and/or Wikipedia articles (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters in this category: Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/*)
Insufficient depth is provided about relevant theory(ies)
Use tables, figures, and/or lists are to help convey key theoretical information
Insufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the [factual?] tags)
Insufficient use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts
Overall, the quality of written expression is OK but there are several aspects which are below professional standard
Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes
Layout
Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading – use 0 or 2+ sub-headings
The grammar for some/many sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags)
Spelling
Spelling can be improved (e.g., see the [spelling?] tags). Spell-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages.
Proofreading
More proofreading is needed (e.g., fix punctuation and typographical errors) to bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard
One use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text even more interactive. See example.
No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
Basic use of image(s)
No use of table(s)
No use of feature box(es)
No use of case studies or examples
Basic use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s)
The quiz questions could be improved by being more focused on the key points and/or take-home messages
The quiz questions could be more effective as learning prompts by being embedded as single questions within each corresponding section rather than as a set of questions at the end
Basic use of interwiki links in the "See also" section
Latest comment: 11 months ago1 comment1 person in discussion
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Overall, this is an insufficient presentation mainly because it does not demonstrate sufficient understanding of the role of the basal ganglia in motivation based on the best psychological theory and research.
The presentation is over the maximum time limit — content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking and feedback purposes
Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section
This presentation doesn't adequately address the topic
The presentation spends too long on background description of BG and motivation as stand-alone concepts and too little explaining how the role of BG in motivation
The selection of content is poor because it doesn't adequately use the most relevant psychological theory and/or research to address the topic
The presentation makes insufficient use of relevant psychological theory and research
The presentation makes insufficient use of citations to support claimsons
The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples or case studies
Learn how to pronounce the various brain structures
Audio recording quality was basic
There is some background noise
Review microphone set-up to achieve higher recording quality. Probably an on-board microphone was used (e.g., keyboard and/or mouse clicks were audible). Consider using an external microphone.
The narrated content lacked synthesis of the best psychological research about this topic
The video title does not match the chapter title and sub-title — this would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation and be more consistent
A very brief written description of the presentation is provided. Expand.