Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2023/Attributions and emotion

Initial suggestions

@Carol Chariarse: Thanks for tackling this topic. Some initial suggestions:

• Check out other related chapters and see how you can build on, link to, and integrate with that work:
  • Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Attribution
  • Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Emotion
• What psychological theory(ies) can help to understand? What is the main research in this area?

Let me know if I can do anything else as you go along. Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:53, 14 August 2023 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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Title The title is correctly worded and formatted The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted Headings Promising 2-level heading structure – could benefit from further development by expanding the structure Reduce "What is an emotion?" and "What is an attribution?" Expand "Attribution theory of emotion" and following section Use default heading formatting (i.e., avoid bold, italics, underline, changing the size etc.) Definition(s) is a pedestrian heading. Incorporate definition material into the Overview and/or subsequent sections with embedded inter-wiki link(s) to further information. Overview Excellent - Scenario, image, evocative description of the problem/topic, relevant psychological theory/research, and focus questions Move the scenario or case study into a feature box (with an image) to the start of this section to help catch reader interest Add an image to the case study to help attract reader interest A brief, evocative description of the problem/topic is provided Drop the first two focus questions Expand the third focus questions Develop closer alignment between the sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings Key points Insufficient development of key points for each section, with relevant citations Hasn't been developed Figure A figure is presented and captioned Caption could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text Cite each figure at least once in the main text Learning feature One use of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Promising use of example(s)/case study(ies) Also consider using quiz question(s), table(s) etc. References OK Are there any systematic reviews about this topic? For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation italicisation page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Remember that the goal is to identify and use the best academic theory and research about this topic Resources See also Good Also link to relevant Wikipedia pages External links One of two links provided Use bullet-points (see Tutorial 02) Include source in brackets after link User page Created – minimal, but sufficient Brief description about self provided – consider expanding Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution One of three different types of contributions with direct link(s) to evidence Use a numbered list (see Tutorial 02)

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:32, 28 September 2023 (UTC)

Take-home message

Hi Carolina!

Thank you for tackling on a compelling topic! One small suggestion from me to you is to create a box for key take-home message instead of combining it with conclusion part, since conclusion is for summarizing the key points of your topic. Overall, the chapter looks impressive!

Best regards,

Grace. Grace (Tram) Chu (discuss • contribs) 12:17, 16 October 2023 (UTC)

Book chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient chapter For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Reasonably good Engages reader interest by introducing a case study and/or scenario with an image in a feature box Explains the problem or phenomenon Underdeveloped focus questions Basic focus questions Theory A reasonably good range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained Overly focused on general theoretical background; instead summarise, link to related resources, and move to the more substantive aspects of theory (this is more than half the chapter! ) Build more strongly on other related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters) Reasonably good depth is provided about relevant theory(ies) Place more emphasis on explaining the relationship between attributions and emotion rather than attributions in general Basic use of tables, figures, and/or lists are to help clearly convey key theoretical information Lack of sufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the tags) Basic use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts Research Basic review of relevant research More detail about key studies would be ideal Any systematic reviews or meta-analyses in this area? Greater emphasis on effect sizes could be helpful. Lack of sufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the tags) Insufficient critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Some claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags) Integration Basic integration between theory and research The chapter places more emphasis on theory than on research Conclusion Basic summary and conclusion Key points are summarised Summarise key points Basic take-home message(s) Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is basic Some sentences could be explained more clearly (e.g., see the and tags) Some sentences are overly long. Strive for the simplest expression. Consider splitting longer sentences into two shorter sentences. Avoid starting sentences with a citation unless the author is particularly pertinent. Instead, it is more interesting for the the content/key point to be communicated, with the citation included along the way or, more typically, in parentheses at the end of the sentence. Some paragraphs are overly long. Communicate one key idea per paragraph in three to five sentences. Layout Include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections (see tags) Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading – use 0 or 2+ sub-headings Grammar The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags) Consider using a grammar checking tool Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance Spelling Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour) Proofreading More proofreading is needed (e.g., fix punctuation and typographical errors) to bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard APA style Use sentence casing for the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc. Use past tense for past research e.g., "Weiner (1968) implies" -> "Weiner (1968) implied" > Figures Figures are briefly captioned Each Figure is referred to at least once within the main text Citations use correct APA style References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation[1] Learning features Basic use of learning features Very good use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text even more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Basic use of image(s) Basic use of table(s) Good use of feature box(es) Basic use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s) The quiz questions could be improved by being more focused on the key points and/or take-home messages Basic use of case studies or examples Basic use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Basic use of external links in the "External links" section Rename links per Tutorial 02 Include sources in parentheses Social contribution ~5 logged, useful, minor to major social contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:45, 1 November 2023 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a reasonably good presentation The presentation concentrates on attribution, but not so much on the relation between attribution and emotion The presentation is under the maximum time limit (3 mins), so there was room for further development Overview An opening slide with the title and sub-title is displayed and narrated — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation Very engaging introduction to hook audience interest But how does the scenario illustrate "attribution and emotion"? Establish a context for the presentation (e.g., by using an example or explaining why it is important), to help the viewer understand Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation. Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation somewhat addresses the topic The presentation makes basic use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes no use of relevant psychological research Ideally, make more explicit use of research What is an adaptive attribution? Explain. Include citations to support claims The presentation makes basic use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice related to attributions and emotion Conclusion A Conclusion slide is presented with a basic summary The conclusion goes for a relatively long time (too long?) Audio The presentation makes basic use of narrated audio Audio communication is well paced Good intonation The narration could benefit from further practice Audio recording quality was good. Review microphone set-up to achieve higher recording quality. Probably an on-board microphone was used (e.g., keyboard and/or mouse clicks were audible). Consider using an external microphone. The narrated content is somewhat matched to the target topic (see content) but lacked synthesis of the best psychological research about this topic Video Overall, visual display quality is reasonably good The presentation makes good use of text and image based slides The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images and/or diagrams The presentation is well produced using simple tools The visual content is well matched to the target topic (see content) but lacked synthesis of the best psychological research about this topic Meta-data The chapter title and sub-title (or an abbreviation to fit within the 100 character limit) are used in the name of the presentation — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation A written description of the presentation is provided Links to and from the book chapter are provided An active hyperlink to the book chapter is provided Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are communicated Ideally, provide clickable links to the original image sources (e.g., in the description) A copyright license for the presentation is provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:37, 12 November 2023 (UTC)