Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2023/Ageing and motivation

Initial suggestions

@U3217153: Thanks for tackling this topic. Some initial suggestions:

• Check out other related chapters and see how you can build on, link to, and integrate with that work:
  • Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Ageing
  • Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Motivation
• What psychological theories can help to understand? What is the main research in this area?
• Breadth vs. depth. This is a broad topic, which is fine, but it will need to be an overview, with embedded links to more specific chapters. However, if you find that you are interested in a specific aspect of this topic we can also tailor a different, more specific topic.

Let me know if I can do anything else as you go along. Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:34, 7 August 2023 (UTC)

Hi James,

Thank you for your suggestions, I would read them carefully.

Kind regards,

Frank U3217153 (discuss • contribs) 11:48, 9 August 2023 (UTC)

Reference Suggestions

@U3217153: Hi Frank, while I was researching my "Flourishing in the elderly" topic I came across the following references that may be useful to you. They are more about motivation than emotion, which is why I thought they may be useful for you. Best of luck with your chapter, I look forward to seeing it. Cheers Jorja
References:

Baltes, P. B. (1987). Theoretical propositions of life-span developmental psychology: On the dynamics between growth and decline. Developmental Psychology, 23(5), 611.

Carstensen, L. L. (1992). Social and emotional patterns in adulthood: Support for socioemotional selectivity theory. Psychology and Aging, 7(3), 331.

Bäckman, L., Nyberg, L., Lindenberger, U., Li, S. C., & Farde, L. (2006). The correlative triad among aging, dopamine, and cognition: Current status and future prospects. Neuroscience & Biobehavioral Reviews, 30(6), 791-807.

Heckhausen, J., Wrosch, C., & Schulz, R. (2010). A motivational theory of life-span development. Psychological Review, 117(1), 32.

--JorjaFive (discuss • contribs) 11:58, 20 August 2023 (UTC)

Heading casing

FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:56, 26 September 2023 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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Title The title is correctly worded and formatted The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted Remove user name – authorship is as per the list of topics and the page's editing history Headings Promising 2-level heading structure – could benefit from further development by expanding the structure See earlier comment about Heading casing Drop "What are Motivation and Age?"; integrate definitions elsewhere The structure overemphasises theory (also important is research and application) Is this genAI content? If so, it needs to be acknowledged as such in the edit summaries otherwise it violates academic integrity. Overly detailed heading wording Adopt closer alignment between the sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings Case study doesn't need a separate heading; instead embed case study within relevant sections Quiz doesn't need a separate heading; instead embed quiz questions within relevant sections Overview Simplify/abbreviate - move detail into subsequent sections Add a scenario or case study into a feature box (with an image) at the start of this section to help catch reader interest Closer alignment between the sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings is recommended Key points Promising development of key points for each section, with relevant citations Strive for an integrated balance of theory and research, with practical examples Conclusion (the most important section): Under developed What might the take-home, practical messages be? (What are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions?) Figure A relevant figure is presented Caption should include Figure X. ... Learning feature Excellent use of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Consider including examples/case studies, quiz question(s), table(s) etc. References OK Are there any systematic reviews about this topic? For APA referencing style, check and correct: italicisation doi formatting make doi hyperlinks active (i.e., clickable) page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Remember that the goal is to identify and use the best academic theory and research about this topic Resources See also Excellent Remove sub-title External links Very good Use sentence casing User page Good Description about self provided Link provided to professional profile(s). Are you on LinkedIn? Link provided to book chapter Social contribution Only the last two contributions are relevant The links are indirect, so I can't see the evidence If adding the second or subsequent link to a page (or a talk/discussion page), create a direct link like / Add direct links to evidence. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions – this was covered in Tutorial 03.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:56, 26 September 2023 (UTC)

Minor Suggestion

Hey Frank,

Your assignment is looking great, really looking forward to seeing it finished! I would suggest to add a round box to emphasise your case study and make it a side, extra point rather than a whole section for it. I would recommend integrating it throughout the assignment in about 2 or three spots!

Mia Pearse (discuss • contribs) 04:56, 5 October 2023 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a very good chapter, however it didn't fit within the maximum word count. It makes very good use of psychological theory and research to address a real-world phenomenon or problem. The chapter used genAI but this wasn't acknowledged with the prompt details in the edit summaries. OpenAI is acknowledged in some citations. However, it cannot serve as a primary reference source (e.g., it might be bullshit). The author needs to also engage in reading peer-reviewed scientific literature and cite it as appropriate. Well over the maximum word count. The content beyond 4,000 words (i.e., Case Study 5 onwards) has been ignored for marking purposes. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Solid Engages reader interest by introducing a case study and/or scenario with an image in a feature box Tailor the case study to focus more clearly on ageing and motivation Explains the problem or phenomenon Language is overly flowery Clear focus questions Merge focus questions three and four Theory An very good range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained Builds effectively on related chapters and Wikipedia articles Very good/ depth is provided about relevant theory(ies) Effective use of tables, figures, and/or lists are to help clearly convey key theoretical information Key citations are well used Insufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the tags and OpenAI citations except for the case studies) Excellent use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts Research Reasonably good review of relevant research More detail about key studies would be ideal Any systematic reviews or meta-analyses in this area? Greater emphasis on effect sizes could be helpful. Insufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the tags and OpenAI citations) Basic critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Some/Many claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags and OpenAI citations) Integration Reasonably good integration between theory and research The chapter places more emphasis on theory than on research Conclusion Reasonably good summary and conclusion Overly flowery Key points are summarised Add practical, take-home message(s) Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is good The chapter is well over the maximum word count Avoid overly emotive language (e.g,. beautifully) in science-based communication Spelling Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour) APA style Use sentence casing for the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc. Figures Figures are very well/well/briefly captioned Provide more detailed Figure captions to help connect the figure to the text Use this format for figure captions: Figure X. Descriptive caption in sentence casing. See example Each Figure is referred to at least once within the main text Refer to each Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1) Refer to each Figure using APA style (e.g., do not use italics, check and correct capitalisation) Tables Use APA style for captions. See example Refer to each Table using APA style (e.g., do not use italics, check and correct capitalisation) Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example: Use ampersand (&) inside parentheses and "and" outside parentheses Learning features Excellent use of learning features Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Very good use of image(s) Good use of table(s) Very good use of feature box(es) Excellent use of case studies or examples Good use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s) Very good use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Use bullet points per Tutorial 02 Use sentence casing Excellent/Very good/Good/Basic/No use of external links in the "External links" section Use bullet points per Tutorial 02 Use sentence casing Use alphabetical order Social contribution ~2 logged, useful, minor to moderate social contributions with direct links to evidence ~2 logged social contributions of debatable value

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:06, 4 November 2023 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a basic presentation Overview An opening slide with the title and sub-title is displayed and narrated — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation This presentation has an opening scenario to hook audience interest To improve, make it more clear how the soccer/football example relates to ageing and motivation A basic context for the presentation is established Focus questions and/or an outline of topics are presented The Overview is too long (45 seconds out of a 3 minute presentation) Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation somewhat addresses the topic Some of the material is repetitive (e.g., soccer player example) The presentation makes basic use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes insufficient use of relevant psychological research Make more explicit use of research Some citations are included to support claims The presentation makes odd use of the soccer example. Presumably this is meaningful to the presenter, but it isn't clear why this single example serves an effective way to communicate the best psychological theory and research about this topic. It seems more like a personal interest/passion. The presentation could be improved by making use of a wider variety of examples or case studies Conclusion The Conclusion is promising but difficult to understand. The music is loud. The voice is soft and fast. Audio The audio is hard to follow mainly because the music is distracting The presentation makes basic use of narrated audio Basic intonation Consider using greater intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement Consider improving articulation to enhance the clarity of speech The narration could benefit from further practice Audio recording quality was OK The narrated content is reasonably well matched to the target topic (see content) Mute the music during narration to help the viewer concentrate on the combination of visual information and narrated audio Video Overall, visual display quality is reasonably good The presentation makes basic use of text and image based slides The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time The visual communication is supplemented in a good way by images and/or diagrams The presentation is reasonably well produced using simple tools The visual content is well matched to the target topic (see content) For the References, use the simplest, most direct links. There is a lot of extra link text bloat. Meta-data The chapter title and sub-title (or an abbreviation to fit within the 100 character limit) are used in the name of the presentation — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation A written description of the presentation is provided Links to and from the book chapter are provided The presentation is incorrectly categorised as being for kids. This creates limitations, such as being unable to add the presentation to a playlist. More info. Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are not provided A copyright license for the presentation is not provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:09, 12 November 2023 (UTC)