Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2022/Wave metaphor for emotion

Heading casing

FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:08, 2 October 2022 (UTC)

Suggestions for this chapter

Hello! The book chapter is looking good so far. Something I suggest is to use hyperlinks to relevant concepts and theories. An example of this would be the James-Lange theory you discuss. Linking this to another book chapter or wikipedia page could be useful. Also using case study boxes and example boxes could help your reader understand the theories better and it is a more interactive and fun feature to enhance the chapter overall. Hope this helps! U3216389 (discuss • contribs) 00:09, 14 October 2022 (UTC)

Hey, @U3216389! There is a section named What is the difference between emotions, feelings and moods. It's said in there: "Feelings occur from emotional experiences." In my opinion, that's strongly incomplete claim. At least it may be misleading.

On one day I experience many feelings more or less simultaneously. For example, I feel hunger, I feel a boot rubbing my foot, it's not that painful, bearable. But at the same time I feel unusually fresh air. I feel connection to a community I belong to, almost not conscientiously, and I feel injustice in little more extent for some reason. Moreover, it is likely that myriads of signals from peripheral nervous system may give birth to many other feelings that I don't care. Right?

So here, the sum of these feeling makes my mood.

To call a reaction (emotion) I need an event (doesn't matter outer -- something that I saw, or inner -- something that I imagined). For example, I imagine I support friends, and at a required level of being lost in thoughts, I may experience joy, and I will smile not on purpose, signaling to those around me about my readiness to interact. But suddenly, I see guys bullying a weak boy. I experience anger, that would rise my heartbeat rate preparing me to fight.

These are emotions.

Of course, experiencing emotions evokes feelings too. So yes, you may say: "Feelings occur from emotional experiences." But would that show the the difference between emotions, feelings and mood? Tosha Langue (discuss • contribs) 13:33, 17 October 2022 (UTC)

Jamieepiper, Jtneill, excuse me, but I'm still not satisfied with the chapter, with the case study in particular. As far as I know, negative emotions, in general, serve to drive a creature out a threatening situation, but sometimes the creature falls in stupor (however, this is a risky tactics, as well). As I understood, emotions of Sophie encourage her to actions, but in this case she is taught to wait the emotions pass. It is against the natural flow of things, I think. Okay, lets assume that an emotion is a metaphoric wave, then visualized 'riding the wave' is the same metaphor. But it must be a skill, as it is in real life. It is better to teach Sophie to take rational actions at will, at the middle of emotion manifestation. Sometime I came across an exercise proposed by George Leonard in his book Mastery:

“ Have someone stand silently behind you. With eyes open, balance and center yourself. When you're ready, hold your arms out to the sides at forty-five degree angles. This is the signal for the person behind you to quietly walk up and grab one of your wrists with just enough impact to startle you; that is, to simulate an unexpected blow. Don't struggle against the grab or try to pretend you weren't upset. Instead, become fully aware of just how the grab affected you. Describe it aloud, as specifically as possible. (For example, "My heart seemed to jump up into my throat" or "My eyes blinked and something like an electric current seemed to shoot up my left arm.") As your partner continues to hold your wrist firmly, go on describing your sensations. Hold nothing back; it's important here and in the case of real blows to face your situation squarely, and to experience and acknowledge your feelings about it. ”

It is simple enough, and it would be simple for Sophie to start with something like that.

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Title The title is correctly worded and formatted The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted User page Excellent – used effectively Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution None summarised with direct link(s) to evidence – this was covered in Tutorial 03. Looking ahead to the book chapter submission, see how to earn marks for social contributions. Headings See earlier comment about Heading casing Promising 2-level heading structure – could benefit from further development by expanding the structure Unless the theories can be tailored to "emotion as a wave", use more specific theories Avoid having sections with only 1 sub-heading – use 0 or 2+ sub-headings Key points Basic development of key points for some sections, with relevant citations For sections which include sub-sections include key points for an overview paragraph prior to branching into the sub-headings Overview - Consider adding: an evocative description of the problem and what will be covered an image an example or case study Strive for an integrated balance of theory and research Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Consider including more examples/case studies Conclusion (the most important section): Hasn't been developed Figure A figure is presented Caption could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text Cite each figure at least once in the main text References Move non-peer reviewed sources to the external links section For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation italicisation doi formatting page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Some suggested references: https://doi.org/10.1080/10926480801944277 https://link.springer.com/chapter/10.1007/978-1-4612-3312-1_10 Resources See also Move this link to external links Link to related book chapters Link to relevant Wikipedia pages External links Not developed

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:08, 2 October 2022 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is an insufficient presentation mainly because it lacks sufficiently targetted use of relevant psychological theory and research (focuses on PTSD/trauma rather than the lifecycles of different emotions) The presentation is under the maximum time limit, so there was room for further development of the ideas Overview An opening slide with the title and sub-title is displayed and narrated — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation Consider creating an engaging introduction to hook audience interest Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation. Content This presentation doesn't adequately address the topic The big opportunity here was to look at the lifecycle of different emotions (e.g., including physiological and neurological reactions) and perhaps how understanding emotions as temporary changes in affective state might help with emotional self-regulation and emotional intelligence The presentation uses a basic structure The presentation makes no substantial use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes no substantial use of relevant psychological research The presentation confuses emotion with trauma The presentation could be improved by making more use of more relevant examples or case studies Conclusion A Conclusion slide is presented with basic take-home message(s) Audio The presentation makes basic use of narrated audio Consider leaving longer pauses between sentences. This can help the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point Basic intonation The presentation lacks the polish that comes with practice Audio recording quality was good Video Overall, visual display quality is basic Check and correct grammar (e.g., "What is an emotion" needs a question mark) The presentation makes basic use of text and image based slides Some of the font size could be larger to make it easier to read The amount of text presented per slide could be reduced to make it easier to read and listen at the same time The visual communication is supplemented in a basic way by images and/or diagrams The presentation is basically produced using simple tools Hide the audio icon Meta-data The chapter title is used, but the sub-title (or a shortened version of it) is not used, as the name of the presentation. The sub-title (or an abbreviation of the sub-title that fits within the 100 character limit) would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding. A link to the book chapter is provided but the hyperlink isn't active to allow 1-click access A link from the book chapter is provided Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are not provided. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided

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Overall Overall, this is an insufficient chapter mainly because of the over-reliance on non-peer reviewed web pages and lack of citation of academic peer-reviewed sources Well under the maximum word count, so there is room to For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview The Overview is underdeveloped Explain the problem or phenomenon in more detail Consider introducing a case study or example or using an image to help engage reader interest Basic focus question(s) Theory – Breadth A reasonably good range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained To improve, make it more clear how some aspects of theory (e.g., flight and fight and trauma) relate to the wave metaphor for emotion There is notable lack of sufficient citation Build more strongly on other emotion-related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters in this category: Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Emotion) Theory – Depth Basic depth is provided about the selected theory(ies) Tables and/or lists could be used more effectively to help clearly convey key theoretical information Some useful examples are provided to illustrate theoretical concepts More examples could be useful to illustrate key concepts Research – Key findings Insufficient use of relevant psychological research Greater emphasis on effect sizes, major reviews, and/or meta-analyses would be helpful Research – Critical thinking Insufficient critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Many claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags) Integration Insufficient integration of relevant theory and research Conclusion Basic summary Add practical, take-home message(s) Written expression – Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is basic The main area for potential improvement is greater use of citations "People" is often a better term than "individuals" Layout Sections which branch into sub-sections should include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections (see tags) APA style Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159) Direct quotes need page numbers – even better, write in your own words Figures Provide more detailed Figure captions to help connect the figure to the text Figure captions should use this format: Figure X. Descriptive caption in sentence casing. See example Refer to each Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1) Citations use correct APA style References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation[1] Check and correct use of italicisation Page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Include hyperlinked dois "Retrieved from" is no longer used (APA style, 7th ed.) Move non-peer-reviewed sources to the external links section Written expression – Learning features Overall, the use of learning features is basic Basic use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text even more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Basic use of image(s) No use of table(s) Basic use of feature box(es) No use of quiz(zes) Basic use of reflection questions. What are the answers? Basic use of case studies or examples Basic use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Use bullet points per Tutorial 02 Rename links per Tutorial 02 Also include links to related Wikipedia articles per Tutorial 02 No use of external links in the "External links" section Social contribution ~ logged, useful, minor/moderate/major social contributions with direct links to evidence Thanks very much for your extensive contributions ~ logged social contributions without direct links to evidence, so unable to easily verify and assess Contributions made across three platforms Use a numbered list per Tutorial 02 No logged social contributions

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:38, 15 November 2022 (UTC)

Book chapter resubmission feedback

These changes were reviewed. I made these additional copyedits, plus see these comments:

1. Approximately 1600 words have been added; the chapter is now approximately 400 words over the maximum word count. Therefore, the references have been ignored for marking purposes.
2. Overview is considerably improved
   1. Dot points have been expanded into sentences and paragraphs
   2. A case study has been added
   3. Images have been added
   4. Focus questions remain underdeveloped
3. Theory: Some general emotion theory content is added, with some basic applicability to the wave metaphor
4. Research
   1. No additional review of research. The main issue remains that there is little to no review of research.
   2. The chapter remains overly-reliant on non-peer-reviewed sources such as webpages
5. Style
   1. An introductory sentence is now provided before branching into subsections
   2. Some minor grammar fixes are made. Some new grammatical errors have been introduced.
   3. Some citations have been added. Do not include author initials in citations (APA style) - I've removed these. Some of the newly added content needs citations added.
   4. I've changed the double-spaces to single spaces (per APA style)
   5. Use serial commas per APA style
6. Conclusion has been expanded and improved
7. Learning features
   1. Several images have been added
   2. One interwiki link has been embedded
   3. Some see also links added
   4. References are a mess (not APA style)
   5. External links are a mess
8. No social contributions

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:18, 5 December 2022 (UTC)