Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2022/Telemental health

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Hi,

I've provided you with a template as part of my social contribution. This allows for easier accessibility and hopefully reduces the overwhelm of starting from a blank page. Telemental health is such a fascinating topic! I engage in these services myself, it'll be interesting to see what makes for effective practice. I look forward to reading your research :) U3223109 (discuss • contribs) 02:36, 23 August 2022 (UTC)

Heading casing

FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:52, 3 October 2022 (UTC)

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Title The title is correctly worded and formatted The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted User page Used effectively Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution At least one contribution has been made and summarised with indirect link(s) to evidence Add direct links to evidence. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions. Headings See earlier comment about Heading casing Check and correct grammar of headings (e.g., missing question mark) Promising 2-level heading structure – could benefit from further development by expanding the structure Key points Key points are well developed for each section, with relevant citations Overview - Consider adding: an evocative description of the problem and what will be covered bullet points for focus questions an image an example or case study Promising balance of theory and research Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Consider including more examples/case studies Conclusion (the most important section): Underway Figure A relevant figure is not presented References Very good For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Resources See also Not developed External links Not developed

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:52, 3 October 2022 (UTC)

Sentence casing of key term 'Telemental Health'

Hey!

I know you're still working on your chapter but I just thought I'd suggest that over the next week as you finalise it, you remember to check that you have consistent sentence casing of your key term 'Telemental Health.'

If you aren't consistently making that phrase capitalised then also make sure to fix the casing of it in your chapter's titles too.

Good luck with finishing off your chapter, looks interesting! :) U3213441 (discuss • contribs) 05:29, 9 October 2022 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a basic presentation Overview An opening slide with the title is displayed. Also display and narrate the sub-title — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Consider creating an engaging introduction to hook audience interest An very brief outline is provided Consider asking focus questions (e.g., from sub-title) that can lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation. Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation addresses the topic An appropriate amount of content is presented — not too much or too little. However, the presented felt rushed, so there was probably room for better distilling the key content. The presentation is reasonably well structured (i.e., Overview, Content, Conclusion) The presentation makes very good use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes good/ use of relevant psychological research Include citations to support claims The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples or case studies The presentation provides practical, easy to understand information Conclusion A Conclusion slide is presented with clear take-home message(s) Audio The audio is reasonably easy to follow Navigational narration (e.g,. "back to the start here") is largely unnecessary The presentation makes good use of narrated audio Consider slowing down and leaving longer pauses between sentences. This can help the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point Good intonation The audio communication is hesitant in some places — could benefit from further scripting and practice Audio recording quality was excellent Video Overall, visual display quality is very good Navigational path doesn't need to cycle back through the opening slide Check grammar (e.g., 1800's -> 1800s) The presentation makes good use of text and image based slides The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time The visual communication is supplemented in a basic way by images and/or diagrams The presentation is basically produced using simple tools Meta-data The chapter title is used, but the sub-title is not used, as the name of the presentation. A very brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding. Links to and from the book chapter are provided Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are not provided. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:18, 10 November 2022 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem Under the maximum word count, so there is room to expand (e.g., maybe some case studies?) For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Solid Overview Clearly explains the problem or phenomenon Consider introducing a case study or example or using an image to help engage reader interest Good focus question(s) Theory – Breadth An excellent range of relevant practical theoretical elements (types, pros and cons) are selected, described, and explained Build more strongly on other related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters) Theory – Depth Insightful depth is provided about relevant theory(ies) No use of tables and/or lists are to help clearly convey key theoretical information Basic use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts Key citations are well used Research – Key findings Excellent review of relevant research More detail about key studies would be ideal Research – Critical thinking Very good critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Claims are generally well referenced Integration Excellent integration between theory and research Conclusion Basic summary and conclusion Add practical, take-home message(s) Written expression – Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is very good Layout Include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections (see tags) See earlier comments about heading casing Grammar Check and make correct use of commas Check and correct use of semicolons (;) and colons (:) Abbreviations Once an abbreviation is established (e.g., TMH), use it consistently. Don't set up an abbreviation and then not use it or only use it sometimes. Check and correct grammatical formatting for abbreviations (such as e.g., i.e., etc.) Spelling Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour) Proofreading More proofreading is needed (e.g., fix punctuation and typographical errors) to bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard Remove unnecessary capitalisation APA style Do not capitalise the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc. Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159) Figures Figures are very well captioned Figure captions use the correct format Refer to each Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1) References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation[1] Separate page numbers using an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Written expression – Learning features Basic use of learning features Basic use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text even more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Very good use of image(s) No use of table(s) Basic use of feature box(es) No use of quiz(zes) No use of case studies Basic use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Use bullet points per Tutorial 02 Also include links to related book chapters Also include links to related Wikipedia articles Basic use of external links in the "External links" section Use bullet points per Tutorial 02 Use sentence casing Move academic sources to references and cite Social contribution ~1 logged, useful, minor social contributions with direct links to evidence ~2 logged social contributions without direct links to evidence, so unable to easily verify and assess

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:32, 18 November 2022 (UTC)