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Brief description about self provided – consider expanding
Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.
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The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's UCLearn site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.
Some of the basic about SB lack sufficient explanation (e.g., who, what, how, why, when, for how long etc.). How does SB vary from non-Indigenous grief etc.? How does it vary within Indigeneous Australian cultures? etc.
An appropriate amount of content is presented — not too much or too little
The presentation makes very basic use of relevant psychological theory
The presentation makes no use of relevant psychological research
Include citations to support claims
The presentation makes basic use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice. The Cassius Turvey example needs more explanation for an unfamiliar audience. I'm also not sure whether the use of those photos is appropriate?
Check and correct spelling (e.g., greif vs grief) and grammar
The chapter title is used, but the sub-title (or a shortened version of it) is not used, as the name of the presentation. The sub-title (or an abbreviation of the sub-title that fits within the 100 character limit) would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding.
A link to the book chapter is provided but the hyperlink isn't active to allow 1-click access
Image sources are communicated in a general way. Also provide links to each image and the license details. I am somewhat doubtful that all images were sources through PowerPoint (e.g,. Cassius Turvey images?). In any case, provide the exact links for each source, along with their respective copyright licenses.
A copyright license for the presentation is provided
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Overall, this is a promising chapter with a lot of useful material. Ideally, the bullet-points could be fleshed out, some more details and some more examples used.
For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits
Overall, the quality of written expression is basic
The main area for improvement is expanding the bullet-points into sentences and paragraphs
Layout
Sections which branch into sub-sections should include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections (see [Provide more detail] tags)
More proofreading is needed (e.g., fix punctuation and typographical errors) to bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard
Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159)
Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numerals (e.g., 10)
Figures
Figures are very well captioned
Figure captions use the correct format
Each Figure is referred to at least once within the main text
Refer to each Figure using APA style (e.g., do not use italics, check and correct capitalisation)
Citations use correct APA style
References are not in full APA style. For example:
Basic use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text even more interactive. See example.
No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
Basic use of image(s)
No use of table(s)
Basic use of feature box(es)
Good use of quiz(zes)
No use of case studies or examples
Basic use of interwiki links in the "See also" section