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Hi Noah,
Good work so far. It's an interesting topic you've chosen. Not sure if this will help, but I came across this reference in researching my own chapter that may be useful.
Gray, K., & Wegner, M. (2010). Blaming God for our pain: Human suffering and the divine mind. Personality and Social Psychology Review, 14(1), 7-16. https://doi.org/10.1177/1088868309350299 KingMob221 (discuss • contribs) 12:24, 28 August 2022 (UTC)Reply
Latest comment: 2 years ago1 comment1 person in discussion
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Description about self provided – consider expanding
Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.
Promising development of key points for each section, with relevant citations
Don't get overly distracted by measurement tools. Perhaps one could be used as an example. Far more interesting is underlying theory and research that has been conducted.
Overview - Consider adding:
a brief, evocative description of the problem and what will be covered
focus questions
an image
an example or case study
Strive for an integrated balance of theory and research
Include more in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters
Consider including more examples/case studies
Conclusion (the most important section):
Hasn't been developed
What might the take-home, practical messages be?
In a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions?
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Useful introduction; along with a case study and focus questions, this would do the trick for the Overview
Consider introducing a case study or example or using an image to help engage reader interest
The Overview should not have sub-headings; too long. Move detailed content in subsequent sections. The purpose of the Overview is to briefly explain the topic, engage reader interest, and establish focus questions for the chapter.
Overall, the quality of written expression is excellent
Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences
"People" is often a better term than "individuals"
Use permanent, rather than relative, time references. For example, instead of "20 years ago", refer to something like "at the beginning of the 21st century". In this way, the text will survive better into the future, without needing to be rewritten.
Overall, the use of learning features is excellent
Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example.
No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
Links to non-peer-reviewed sources should be moved to the external links section
Excellent use of image(s)
Excellent use of table(s)
Basic use of feature box(es)
Basic use of quiz(zes)
Good use of case studies or examples
Basic use of interwiki links in the "See also" section
Basic use of external links in the "External links" section. See Tutorial 02 for how to format. Are these the best resource links about this topic?
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An opening slide with the title and sub-title is displayed. Also narrated the title and sub-title to help clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
This presentation has an engaging introduction to hook audience interest
A context for the topic is clearly established through an example
Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation.
The chapter title and sub-title (or an abbreviation to fit within the 100 character limit) are used in the name of the presentation — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation
A written description of the presentation is provided