Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2022/Inspiration

Heading casing

FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:19, 3 October 2022 (UTC)

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Title The title is correctly worded and formatted The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted User page Created – minimal, but sufficient Brief description about self provided – consider expanding Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter (rename the link to make it more user-friendly) Social contribution At least one contribution has been made and summarised in a numbered list with direct link(s) to evidence User a numbered list Remember to sign comments on talk pages Headings See earlier comment about Heading casing Promising 2-level heading structure – could benefit from further development (e.g., the top-level heading for "Inspiration" could be removed or rethought since it is the chapter title) Key points Excellent – key points are well developed for each section, with relevant citations Promising development of key points for each section, with relevant citations Basic development of key points for each section, with relevant citations Use bullet points (see Tutorial 02) For sections which include sub-sections include key points for an overview paragraph prior to branching into the sub-headings Overview - Consider: User name removed (authorship is as per the page's editing history) Merge learning outcomes and focus questions (preferably use the latter) adding an image adding an example or case study Strive for an integrated balance of theory and research Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Consider including more examples/case studies Conclusion (the most important section): Underway Figure A relevant figure is presented Caption should include Figure X. ... Cite each figure at least once in the main text Consider decreasing image size References Good For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation italicisation Resources See also Excellent External links Very good

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:19, 3 October 2022 (UTC)

Suggestion

Hi there,

I have just made a couple of edits in removing some capitalisations as per wiki style and reformatted some in-text references as per APA style.

I also wanted to let you know that if you have time and wanted to add some more information, you still have around 1100 words to play with to get to the 4000 word mark. It might be worth expanding on how can inspiration be fostered as this is one of your guiding/focus questions however only has a paragraph addressing it.

Many thanks and all the best for the rest of your book chapter! AEMOR (discuss • contribs) 03:07, 16 October 2022 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a basic, sufficient chapter Well under the maximum word count, so there is room to expand For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Basic Overview Consider introducing a case study or example or using an image to help engage reader interest Clear focus question(s) Theory – Breadth Relevant theory is reasonably well explained Build more strongly on other related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters) Well done on linking to, and distinguishing from, motivation more generally Also consider linking to related concepts such as peak experiences Theory – Depth Basic depth is provided about the selected theory(ies) Key citations are well used Tables and/or lists are used effectively to help clearly convey key theoretical information Some useful examples are provided to illustrate theoretical concepts Basic use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts More examples could be useful to illustrate key concepts Research – Key findings Basic overview of relevant research More detail about key studies would be ideal Greater emphasis on effect sizes, major reviews, and/or meta-analyses would be helpful Research – Critical thinking Insufficient critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Most claims are referenced Some claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags) Be wary of saying "prove" (science can really only disprove) and overstating claims. I suggest never using the word "prove" - consider editing the chapter to remove it. Integration Insufficient integration of relevant theory and research Conclusion Basic summary; has a bit of wiffle-waffle What were the take-home message(s) for each focus question? Confusing last sentence. What were the detrimental impacts? These weren't discussed. Written expression – Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is basic Reduce use of weasel words which bulk out the text, but don't enhance meaning Grammar The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Grammar-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance. Check and make correct use of commas Figures Provide more detailed Figure captions to help connect the figure to the text Figure captions should use this format: Figure X. Descriptive caption in sentence casing. See example Refer to each Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1) Tables Table captions should use APA style. See example Refer to each Table at least once within the main text (e.g., see Table 1) Citations use correct APA style References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation[1] Check and correct use of italicisation Page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Written expression – Learning features Overall, the use of learning features is very good Very good use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Basic use of image(s) Good use of table(s) Good use of feature box(es) Very good use of quiz(zes) Very good use of case studies or examples Basic use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Very good use of external links in the "External links" section Social contribution ~1 logged social contributions with direct links to evidence Thanks very much for your extensive contributions ~4 logged social contributions without direct links to evidence, so unable to easily verify and assess

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:42, 3 November 2022 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a basic presentation, however there is a lack of concentration on relevant theory and especially the lack of sufficient use of psychological research about this topic Overview An opening slide with the title and sub-title is displayed — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Also narrate the sub-title to emphasis the focus questions. This presentation has a basic introduction to engage audience interest Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation somewhat addresses the topic, but only some of the focus questions are adequately addressed Odd use of the word "detrimental". Are you sure this what you mean?? Unnecessary/excessive use of quotes Consider relating the experience of inspiration to the emotion of curiousity The presentation is appropriately structured in a general sense (i.e., Overview, Content, Conclusion) The selection of content doesn't adequately use the most relevant psychological theory and/or research to address the topic The presentation makes basic use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes basic use of relevant psychological research The presentation includes a limited number citations to support claims The presentation provides lacks practical, easy to understand information Conclusion A Conclusion slide is presented with basic take-home message(s) The Conclusion does not adequately address each of the focus questions What are the practical take-home message(s) that we can use to help improve our everyday lives based on the best available psychological theory and research about this topic? Audio The presentation makes basic use of narrated audio The volume varies somewhat between slides Well paced Basic intonation Consider using greater intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement Consider improving articulation to enhance the clarity of speech The audio communication is hesitant — could benefit from further practice Audio recording quality was OK. Review microphone set-up to achieve higher recording quality. Video Overall, visual display quality is basic The presentation makes basic use of text and image based slides The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read The amount of text presented per slide could be reduced to make it easier to read and listen at the same time The visual communication is supplemented by images and/or diagrams The presentation is basically produced using simple tools Meta-data The chapter title and sub-title (or an abbreviation to fit within the 100 character limit) are used in the name of the presentation — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation A written description of the presentation is provided A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding. Links to and from the book chapter are provided Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are not provided. This presentation has probably violated the copyrights of image owners as images appear to have been used without permission and/or acknowledgement. A copyright license for the presentation is provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:07, 10 November 2022 (UTC)