Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2022/Honesty motivation

Suggestion

Hi there! I have reviewed your chapter subtitles and your topic seems very interesting. I noticed you have a subtitle on Ego, it would be interesting if you provided different interpretations of Ego and the different theories of motivation behind lying, for example psychoanalytic approach to Ego and the cognitive approach to Ego and compare these together. GeorgiaFairweather (discuss • contribs) 09:51, 23 September 2022 (UTC)

--GeorgiaFairweather (discuss • contribs) 09:52, 23 September 2022 (UTC)

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Title The title is correctly worded and formatted The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted User page Very good Description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution At least one contribution has been made The summary doesn't make sense? The link to evidence is indirect Add direct links to evidence. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions. Headings Excellent – Well developed 2-level heading structure, with meaningful headings that directly relate to the core topic. Rich and thoughtful heading ideas. Perhaps this will be too much to cover. So, it is OK if the final chapter is less ambitious (e.g., since the topic is honesty, you don't necessarily need to cover dishonesty). Some of the latter headings could be a case study in a feature box instead. Key points Key points are well developed for most sections, with relevant citations Some sections haven't been developed (and these are the key ones i.e., honesty motivation) Overview - Consider adding: a brief, evocative description of the problem an image an example or case study Strive for an integrated balance of theory and research Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Consider including more examples/case studies Conclusion (the most important section): Underway Figure A relevant figure is presented Caption should include Figure X. ... Cite each figure at least once in the main text References Very good For APA referencing style, check and correct: italicisation Resources See also Not developed External links Not developed

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:21, 6 October 2022 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a basic presentation The presentation is under the maximum time limit, so there was room for further development of the ideas Overview An opening slide with the title is displayed. Also display and narrate the sub-title — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. This presentation has a basic introduction to engage audience interest A context for the topic is clearly established through an example Topics focus questions are presented visually but not verbally Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation. Content The presentation addresses the topic The presentation is well structured (i.e., Overview, Content, Conclusion) The presentation makes good use of relevant psychological theory The presentation lacks use of relevant psychological research; ideally make more explicit use of research Include citations to support claims The presentation makes basic use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice Check and correct grammar Conclusion A verbal Conclusion is provided The presentation could be strengthened by adding a Conclusion slide with practical, take-home messages in response to each focus question Audio The presentation makes basic use of narrated audio Audio communication is well paced Good intonation The narration is well practiced Audio recording quality was OKish. Review microphone set-up to achieve higher recording quality. Probably an on-board microphone was used (e.g., keyboard and/or mouse clicks were audible). Consider using an external microphone. Video Overall, visual display quality is basic The presentation makes basic use of text and image based slides The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time The visual communication is supplemented in a basic way by images and/or diagrams The presentation is basically produced using simple tools Meta-data The chapter title and sub-title (or an abbreviation to fit within the 100 character limit) are used in the name of the presentation — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation A written description of the presentation is provided A link to the book chapter is provided but the hyperlink isn't active to allow 1-click access A link from the book chapter is provided The presentation is incorrectly categorised as being for kids. This introduces limitations, such as being unable to add the presentation to a playlist. More info. Licensing This presentation has probably violated the copyrights of image owners as images appear to have been used without permission and/or acknowledgement. A copyright license for the presentation is provided in the presentation description but not in the meta-data

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:34, 12 November 2022 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a very good chapter Under the maximum word count, so there is room to expand For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Well developed Overview Clearly explains the problem or phenomenon Engages reader interest by introducing a case study and/or example and/or using an image Clear focus question(s) Theory – Breadth An excellent range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained The chapter doesn't wander off into discussion of irrelevant theory Builds somewhat on previous, related chapters Build more strongly on other related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters) Theory – Depth Very good depth is provided about the selected theory(ies) Key citations are well used Tables and/or lists are used effectively to help clearly convey key theoretical information Some useful examples are provided to illustrate theoretical concepts Research – Key findings Relevant research is well reviewed Greater emphasis on effect sizes, major reviews, and/or meta-analyses would be helpful Research – Critical thinking Good critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Claims are referenced Integration Discussion of theory and research is well integrated Conclusion Key points are well summarised Written expression – Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is very good "People" is often a better term than "individuals" Layout Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading – use 0 or 2+ sub-headings Grammar The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Grammar-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance. Check and correct use of possessive apostrophes (e.g., cats vs cat's vs cats')[1] Use serial commas[2] – they are part of APA style and are generally recommended by grammaticists. See explanatory video (1 min) Check and correct use of that vs. who APA style Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numerals (e.g., 10) Figures Figures are very well captioned Refer to each Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1) Tables Table captions should use APA style. See example Refer to each Table at least once within the main text (e.g., see Table 1) Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example: If there are three or more authors, cite the first author followed by et al., then year. For example, either: in-text, Smith et al. (2020), or in parentheses (Smith et al., 2020) References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation[3] Check and correct use of italicisation Written expression – Learning features Overall, the use of learning features is very good No use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example. One use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Very good use of image(s) Very good use of table(s) Excellent use of feature box(es) No use of quiz(zes) Excellent use of case studies or examples Basic use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Use bullet points per Tutorial 02 Also include links to related Wikipedia articles Include sources in parentheses Good use of external links in the "External links" section Social contribution 1 logged social contributions with direct links to evidence which made erroneous APA style changes and has been reverted. This has changed between 6th and 7th edition of the APA style manual.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:43, 14 November 2022 (UTC)