Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2022/Exercise and endocannabinoids

Topic development feedback

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Title The title and sub-title are missing User page Excellent – used effectively Excellent description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter (rename to make it more user-friendly) Social contribution At least one contribution has been made and summarised with indirect link(s) to evidence Add direct links to evidence. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions. Headings Basic, 2-level, logical heading structure Could benefit from further development by expanding the structure for the section about exercise and endocannabinoids Consider presenting the case study early in the chapter; maybe in the Overview Key points Promising development of key points for each section, with relevant citations Could benefit from further development by expanding the content for the section about exercise and endocannabinoids "What is exercise and its benefits?" is not especially important for this chapter, so keep it brief and provide embedded links to related book chapters and/or Wikipedia articles Strive for an integrated balance of theory and research Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Conclusion (the most important section): Underway Figure Excellent – A relevant figure is presented and it is appropriately captioned Caption should include Figure X. ... Cite each figure at least once in the main text References Excellent Resources See also OK Use bullet-points (see Tutorial 02) Use sentence casing Rename links so that they are more user friendly (see Tutorial 02) Include source in brackets after link Not developed External links OK Use bullet-points (see Tutorial 02) Rename links so that they are more user friendly (see Tutorial 02) Include source in brackets after link

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:27, 7 October 2022 (UTC)

Hanging indent

Hello,

I have added a template for the hanging indent for the reference list according to APA formatting. I hope it helps, but feel free to delete if not needed. U3217287 (discuss • contribs) 10:40, 16 October 2022 (UTC)

Multimedia presentation feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a good presentation Overview An opening slide with the title and sub-title is displayed and narrated — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation This presentation has an engaging introduction to hook audience interest A context for the topic is established Topics are presented Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation. Content The presentation addresses the topic An appropriate amount of content is presented — not too much or too little The presentation is well structured (i.e., Overview, Content, Conclusion) The presentation makes excellent use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes good use of relevant psychological research The presentation includes citations to support claims The presentation makes good use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice Conclusion The presentation could be strengthened by adding a Conclusion slide with practical, take-home messages in response to each focus question Audio The audio is easy to follow Audio communication is well paced Very good intonation The narration is well practiced Audio recording quality was very good Video Overall, visual display quality is very good The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides Some of the font size could be larger to make it easier to read The amount of text presented per slide could be reduced to make it easier to read and listen at the same time The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images and/or diagrams The presentation is well produced using simple tools Meta-data The chapter title is used, but the sub-title (or a shortened version of it) is not used, as the name of the presentation. The sub-title (or an abbreviation of the sub-title that fits within the 100 character limit) would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding. Links to and from the book chapter are provided Licensing This presentation has probably violated the copyrights of image owners as images appear to have been used without permission and/or acknowledgement. A copyright license for the presentation is provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:37, 12 November 2022 (UTC)

Book chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient chapter Well under the maximum word count, so there is room to expand For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Basic Overview Briefly explains the problem or phenomenon Consider introducing a case study or example or using an image to help engage reader interest Basic focus question(s). Some are too general. Be more specific/targetted. Theory – Breadth Basic but sufficient coverage of relevant theory is provided Build more strongly on other related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters) Theory – Depth Basic depth is provided about the selected theory(ies) Basic use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts Research – Key findings Very basic overview of relevant research Two research studies are included Greater emphasis on effect sizes, major reviews, and/or meta-analyses would be helpful How long do elevated EC levels last following exercise? Research – Critical thinking Basic critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Many claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags) Integration Discussion of theory and research is poorly integrated Conclusion Basic summary Some useful research suggestions Vague take-home message Written expression – Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is basic Use active (e.g., "this chapter explored") rather than passive voice (e.g., "this chapter has explored" or "this chapter will explore") [1][2] Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences. Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[3] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes. Layout The chapter has a basic structure Grammar The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Grammar-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance. Use serial commas[4] – they are part of APA style and are generally recommended by grammaticists. See explanatory video (1 min) Check and correct use of affect vs. effect Spelling Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour) APA style Do not capitalise the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc. Figures Figures needs to be larger to be easily viewable This figure is likely to violate copyright. I've nominated it for deletion. are very well captioned Each Figure is referred to at least once within the main text Citations use correct APA style Written expression – Learning features Overall, the use of learning features is basic Basic use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text even more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Basic use of image(s) No use of table(s) Good use of feature box(es) No use of quiz(zes) Basic use of case studies or examples Basic use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Use bullet points per Tutorial 02 Use bullet points per Tutorial 02 Rename links to related book chapters Basic use of external links in the "External links" section Use bullet-points per Tutorial 02 Include sources in parentheses Social contribution ~3 logged social contributions without direct links to evidence, so unable to easily verify and assess

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:42, 16 November 2022 (UTC)