Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2022/Equity theory

Heading casing

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Hi EKS2001. FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example:

Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory

Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:25, 26 August 2022 (UTC)Reply


Topic development feedback

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  1. The title is correctly worded and formatted
  2. The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted
  3. User name remove – authorship is as per the page's editing history
  1. Created – minimal, but sufficient
  2. Very brief description about self provided – consider expanding
  3. Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.
  4. Link provided to book chapter
  1. None summarised with direct link(s) to evidence – this was covered in Tutorial 03. Looking ahead to the book chapter submission, see how to earn marks for social contributions.
  1. Promising, 2-level heading structure – could benefit from refinement of the sub-headings
  1. Basic development of key points for some sections
  2. Insufficient citations
  3. Use bullet points (see Tutorial 02)
  4. For sections which include sub-sections include key points for an overview paragraph prior to branching into the sub-headings
  5. Overview - Consider adding:
    1. a brief, evocative description of the problem
    2. focus questions
    3. an image
    4. an example or case study
  6. Strive for an integrated balance of theory and research
  7. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters
  8. Consider including more examples/case studies
  9. Conclusion (the most important section):
    1. Hasn't been developed
  1. A relevant figure is presented
  2. Caption should include Figure X. ...
  3. Cite each figure at least once in the main text
  4. Consider decreasing image size to make it less dominant in relation to the text
  1. OK
  2. For APA referencing style, check and correct:
    1. capitalisation
    2. italicisation
    3. doi formatting
    4. make doi hyperlinks active (i.e., clickable)
    5. page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-)
  1. See also
    1. Use bullet-points (see Tutorial 02)
    2. Include source in brackets after link
    3. Also link to related book chapters
  2. External links
    1. Not developed

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:14, 7 October 2022 (UTC)Reply

Book chapter review and feedback

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This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Chapter marks will be available via UCLearn along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.

 

Overall

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  1. Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient chapter
  2. Well under the maximum word count, so there is room to expand
  3. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits
  1. Basic Overview
  2. Briefly explains the problem or phenomenon
  3. Explain the problem or phenomenon in more detail
  4. Consider introducing a case study or example or using an image to help engage reader interest
  5. Basic focus question(s)
  1. Basic but sufficient coverage of relevant theory is provided
  2. Build more strongly on other related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters, such as burnout)
  1. Basic depth is provided about the selected theory(ies)
  2. Tables and/or lists are used effectively to help clearly convey key theoretical information
  3. Some useful examples are provided to illustrate theoretical concepts
  1. Basic overview of relevant research
  2. Greater emphasis on effect sizes, major reviews, and/or meta-analyses would be helpful
  1. Basic critical thinking about relevant research is evident
  2. Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by:
    1. considering the strength of relationships
    2. acknowledging limitations
    3. pointing out critiques/counterarguments
    4. suggesting specific directions for future research
  3. Some claims are referenced
  4. Some claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the [factual?] tags)
  1. There is basic integration between theory and research
  1. Basic summary
  2. Consider reminding the reader about the importance of the problem or phenomenon of interest
  3. Add practical, take-home message(s)
  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the quality of written expression is basic
    2. Use active (e.g., "this chapter explored") rather than passive voice (e.g., "this chapter has explored" or "this chapter will explore") [1][2]
    3. Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences
  2. Grammar
    1. The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags). Grammar-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance.
    2. Check and correct use of possessive apostrophes (e.g., cats vs cat's vs cats')
  3. Proofreading
    1. More proofreading is needed (e.g., fix punctuation and typographical errors) to bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard
  4. APA style
    1. Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159)
    2. Replace double spaces with single spaces
    3. Tables
      1. Table captions should use APA style. See example
      2. Refer to each Table at least once within the main text (e.g., see Table 1)
    4. Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example:
      1. If there are three or more authors, cite the first author followed by et al., then year. For example, either:
        1. in-text, Smith et al. (2020), or
        2. in parentheses (Smith et al., 2020)
    5. References are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. Check and correct use of italicisation
      2. Include hyperlinked dois that go direct to the article (not via login)
  1. Overall, the use of learning features is basic
  2. Basic use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text even more interactive. See example.
  3. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
  4. No use of image(s)
  5. Basic use of table(s)
  6. Basic use of feature box(es)
  7. Good use of quiz(zes)
  8. Basic use of case studies or examples
  9. Basic use of interwiki links in the "See also" section
    1. Use bullet points
    2. Also include links to related book chapters
    3. Include sources in parentheses
  10. Basic use of external links in the "External links" section
    1. Include sources in parentheses
    2. Use bullet-points per Tutorial 02
  1. No logged social contributions

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:56, 6 November 2022 (UTC)Reply

Multimedia presentation feedback

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Overall

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  1. Overall, this is a basic presentation
  1. An opening slide with is presented, but it does not match the book chapter
  2. This presentation has a basic introduction to engage audience interest
  3. Consider creating an engaging introduction to hook audience interest
  4. Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation.
  1. Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section
  2. The presentation addresses the topic
  3. The presentation somewhat addresses the topic
  4. This presentation doesn't adequately address the topic
  5. An appropriate amount of content is presented — not too much or too little
  6. The presentation is well/poorly structured (i.e., Overview, Content, Conclusion)
  7. The presentation makes basic use of relevant psychological theory
  8. The presentation makes basic use of relevant psychological research
  9. The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples or case studies
  10. Check and correct spelling and grammar errors
  1. The presentation could be strengthened by adding a Conclusion slide with practical, take-home messages in response to each focus question
  1. The audio is easy to follow
  2. Audio communication is well paced
  3. Good intonation
  4. Audio recording quality was very good
  5. Mute the music during narration to help the viewer concentrate on the combination of visual information and narrated audio
  1. Overall, visual display quality is good
  2. The presentation makes basic use of animated slides with text
  3. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read
  4. The visual communication is supplemented by images and/or diagrams
  5. The presentation is basically produced using PowToon
  1. The video title does not match the chapter title and sub-title — this would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation and be more consistent
  2. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding.
  1. Image sources and their copyright status are communicated
  2. A copyright license for the presentation is provided in the presentation description but not in the meta-data

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:24, 12 November 2022 (UTC)Reply

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