Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2022/Endocannabinoid system and emotion

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Looks like a really interesting topic, suggest simplifying some of the language used and expanding on the different theories of emotion such as James-Lange theory, Cannon-Bard Theory and the Cognitive Appraisal Theory. U3191488 (discuss • contribs) 13:47, 28 August 2022 (UTC)

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Title The title is correctly worded and formatted User page Use default heading styles (e.g., remove bold) Description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution At least one contribution has been made and summarised in a numbered list with direct link(s) to evidence Headings Logical structure Use default heading formatting (i.e., avoid bold, italics, underline, changing the size etc.) and remove unnecessary capitalisation Promising 3-level heading structure Avoid overly long headings Focus the bulk of the chapter on "Endocannabinoid system and emotions", keeping the preliminary material about the ECS and emotion to a minimum (i.e., briefly summarise and link to dedicated Wikipedia articles and/or book chapters) Key points Overall, good development of key points and citations Note suggestions above about limiting the preliminary info leading into dealing with the relationship between ECS and emotion. I like the focus on positive and negative influences Excellent – key points are well developed for each section, with relevant citations Overview - Consider adding: an evocative description of the problem and what will be covered an image an example or case study Good balance of theory and research Consider including more examples/case studies Conclusion (the most important section): Hasn't been developed What might the take-home, practical messages be? In a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions? Figure A relevant figure is presented and it is appropriately captioned Caption format should be: Figure X. ... Check and correct capitalisation in Figure captions. Cite each figure at least once in the main text Consider increasing image size from to make it easier to view References Very good For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation italicisation Resources See also No development External links Good Use bullet-points Include source in brackets after link

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:27, 25 September 2022 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a basic presentation The presentation is over the maximum time limit — content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking and feedback purposes Overview An opening slide with the title and sub-title is displayed and narrated — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation# Consider creating an engaging introduction to hook audience interest Establish a context for the topic (e.g., by using an example or explaining why it is important), to help the viewer understand Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation. Content The presentation somewhat addresses the topic An appropriate amount of content is presented — not too much or too little Overly focused on defining emotion; perhaps instead consider how the ECS facilitates different types of emotion There was no need to focus on cannabis consumption. The topic here is about the endogenous use of the ECS in emotion. Perhaps also consider the influence of exercise on the ECS. The presentation is reasonably well structured (i.e., Overview, Content, Conclusion) The presentation makes basic use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes basic use of relevant psychological research The presentation includes citations to support claims The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples or case studies. Use of cannabis makes sense as an example. Remove red underline from spell check Conclusion A Conclusion slide is presented with a basic summary The Conclusion only partly fitted within the time limit Audio The audio is easy to follow Audio communication is well paced Good intonation The narration is well practiced Audio recording quality was good The narrated content is somewhat matched to the target topic (see content) Check pronunciation of endocannabinoid[1] Video Overall, visual display quality is good The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time The visual communication is supplemented by images and/or diagrams The presentation is basically produced using simple tools Meta-data The video title does not match the chapter title and sub-title — this would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation and be more consistent A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding. Links to and from the book chapter are provided Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are not provided. This presentation has probably violated the copyrights of image owners as images appear to have been used without permission and/or acknowledgement. A copyright license for the presentation is provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:59, 12 November 2022 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent picture that offers an accessible introduction to the role of the ECS in emotion For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Solid Overview Clearly explains the problem or phenomenon Consider introducing a case study or example or using an image to help engage reader interest Basic focus question(s) Theory – Breadth An excellent range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained Build more strongly on other related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters) Theory – Depth Insightful depth is provided about relevant theory(ies) Excellent use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts Research – Key findings Very good review of relevant research More detail about key studies would be ideal Greater emphasis on effect sizes, major reviews, and/or meta-analyses would be helpful Research – Critical thinking Very good critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Claims are referenced Some/Many claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags) Integration Excellent integration between theory and research The chapter places more emphasis on theory than on research Where research is discussed, it is integrated with theory Conclusion Excellent conclusion Written expression – Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is very good Some of the content may have been plagiarised (e.g., https://pubmed.ncbi.nlm.nih.gov/34264141/) Get rid of these phrases: "Conjunctively, ..." "In correlation to ..." Layout Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading – use 0 or 2+ sub-headings Use the default heading style (e.g., remove size changes) Grammar The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Grammar-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages.[2] Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance. Check and make correct use of commas Check and correct use of possessive apostrophes (e.g., cats vs cat's vs cats')[3] Use serial commas[4] – they are part of APA style and are generally recommended by grammaticists. See explanatory video (1 min) Abbreviations Once an abbreviation is established (e.g., ECS), use it consistently. Don't set up an abbreviation and then not use it or only use it sometimes. Proofreading More proofreading is needed (e.g., fix punctuation and typographical errors) to bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard Some content was repeated Figures Renumber; Figure 1 was removed for copyright violation Use this format for figure captions: Figure X. Descriptive caption in sentence casing. See example Refer to each Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1) Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example: If there are three or more authors, cite the first author followed by et al., then year. For example, either: in-text, Smith et al. (2020), or in parentheses (Smith et al., 2020) References mostly use correct APA style Written expression – Learning features Very good use of learning features Basic use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text even more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Basic use of image(s) No use of table(s) Basic use of feature box(es) Basic use of quiz(zes) Very good use of case studies or examples Basic use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Include sources in parentheses Good use of external links in the "External links" section Use bullet points per Tutorial 02 Social contribution ~1 logged, minor social contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:51, 19 November 2022 (UTC)